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The Golden Oriole Found - A Fantasy Story

Martin came to a cleft in the rocks
The oriole must have gone this way
It was narrow and curving
A sudden turn, and everything seemed to change.
Shrill, reedy music of pipes filled the heavy air,
A smell of musk of goats and their dung. 
Invisible cicadas sustained the piper's lament.

Suddenly, he found himself in front of a small but deep lake.
Weeping willows, large copper-coloured beeches 
Surrounded by a large pool of azure water. 
There was a calm tranquillity about the place 
Whilst the air was saturated with a fragrance 
Of exotic flowering lavender-like trees.

He heard a splash, and out stepped a young woman. 
Her canary yellow elegant swimsuit
Clung wetly to her honey-coloured body. 
Damp citrine hair formed a frame around an oval face
That was highlighted by an upturned, pointed nose. 
He did not move but stood mesmerized, 
Looking into her blue, limpid eyes.
A sweet smile shimmered on her lips.
"Hello," she said in a mellifluous voice. 
Her smile was inviting. "My name is Goldie Oriole. 
Come, sit near me 
And tell me how you found this place."


To be concluded in Part 3
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Daniel Avatar
November 20, 2024 at 7:14 AM
Lovely, can't wait to read the end:)
Edmonds  Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 5:37 PM
Enjoying the story/poem Victor… Beryl
Sands Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 10:12 AM
Great story telling with excellent detail. I read the 1st part as well and I bet part 3 will be enjoyable to read after this :)
Rodgers Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 4:59 AM
Dear Victor, Your enchanting narrative is filled with sensory delights, transporting me to a mystical realm. I loved going on Martin's journey and having a mesmerizing encounter with Goldie Oriole. I think your masterful prose blurs the line between reality and fantasy and explores the hidden magic within nature's secret places. Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Jones Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 1:14 AM
I’m hooked on your story and agree it in engaging Victor! Eagerly awaiting part 3!
Buehler Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 4:44 PM
What an engaging story! It transported me to a magical world of wonder. I loved the imagery, such as 'exotic flowering lavender-like trees.' I'm really looking forward to Part 3! :)
M  Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 1:18 PM
You tell a grand story Victor ....captivating! Cuddles...Debx
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 12:29 PM
you are an amazing story teller Victor - write on my friend:-) hugs Jan x
George Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 7:58 AM
This I understand is a series of three parts. What an enjoyable read! Dear Victor, you have created a really wonderful fancy land. I am waiting for the third part to see what mystery is going to unfold shortly.
Poet Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 6:18 AM
What a wonderful tale! The vivid images transport the viewer to Martin's enthralling mystery, from the narrow, winding path to the picturesque lake surrounded by weeping willows and delicious tastes.
Andresen Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 6:03 AM
- An exciting and wonderful story, Victor ... what beauty he found :) - hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 5:17 AM
Great story, dear Victor! A contrast of goat and dung with a great find!
Williams Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 3:16 AM
Dear Victor, your story is mesmerizing! The vivid imagery sweeps one into Martin's mysterious adventure, from the narrow, winding path to the ethereal lake surrounded by weeping willows and exotic fragrances. The introduction of Goldie Oriole is enchanting, with her striking appearance and warm, inviting presence. There's a magical, almost dreamlike quality to it. A great read ...Hugs
Tor Avatar
November 13, 2024 at 2:34 AM
Victor such a wonderful words to describe beauty you got me hooked for part three my friend. Looking forward to read. stop by and check out my Political Truth I was waiting for you valued opinion on it. Thank you my friend so far reading just the two parts I will list it as a favorite... Hope all is well my friend good health to you Victor and many blessings...
Cunningham Avatar
November 12, 2024 at 11:00 PM
You're a great story teller Victor I'm hoping for a happy ending. Tom
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