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I turned to look back, feeling anxious as I stood "by the squeaky old gate that tomorrow will find." Was there someone there watching me? The gate creaked shut, echoing the taint of guilt That I hoped no one heard. Earlier I came through this gate to meet you in the woods. It was rusty, stuck shut, and needed a heavy shove to open. It reeked a somber reluctant groan, trying to stop me. But, I would have nothing of its rattle, grind and snag. I pushed it aside, and walked into the woods along the winding path. The gate hung its head, trying not to see what it knew I'd do. It looked up and sighed and rusty hinges creaked, as the victim died and cried out, ambushed in the woods. I turned back to retrace my steps, afraid of being watched. I could feel it in my bones, though nothing was there to see. As I approached the open gate it seemed that it had moved every so slightly, impeding my escape through it. It groaned, rattled, creaked with a clang of defiance embellishing a subtle vibrato in the concordance of guilt. The deed was done, the dirge was sung, the gate sprung, shut.

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Date: 6/7/2025 9:41:00 PM
Nice narration of the animated old gate. Congratulations.
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Date: 6/7/2025 7:12:00 PM
Congrats! Great job!
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John Anderson
Date: 6/7/2025 7:13:00 PM
Yeah! Terrific Cheers!
Date: 6/7/2025 6:38:00 PM
Congrats on your win John, Very nicely done
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Date: 6/7/2025 6:41:00 PM
Wow, thanks very much. Cheers to You!
Date: 5/30/2025 12:15:00 PM
The gate tried to do its job to keep out the antagonist, but eventually it gave way. The gate was not a prince that could save. The ambushed victim without a prayer as the antogonist tries to hide and push his way out. The last tone is truly haunting! You write a great story, dear Poet!
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Date: 5/30/2025 12:56:00 PM
Thanks very much. Guilt evokes whimpers in innocent bystanders heard by the guilty one listening out for them.

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