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In the heart of the Loire valley
Where the river wends its way
A young dreamer lured by nature
Free of care played music gay

As he wandered along footpaths
Playing lightly on his flute
By the vineyards in abundance
And the orchards full of fruit.

It was there that he encountered 
A fair maiden and her art
She was painting on her canvas; 
With a smile she stole his heart.

From then on they met in secret
Near the rolling hills in green
Where the flowers looked in wonder.
They were happy and serene.

They made love and plans together
Spoke of dreams they meant to share
Looked at life through coloured lenses
And built castles in the air.

Then one night a storm erupted
Unexpected in mid May,
Raging waters in a frenzy
Came and took her life away.

All his dreams were quickly shattered
And the castle tumbled down
For his Queen of Hearts had left him
Broken king without a crown.

In the ruins of the castle
He was left to sit and grieve
And his friends who came to visit
All were kindly asked to leave.

Days and nights passed undetected                     
As he dreamed of raven hair
On his lips he felt her kisses
Woke to find she was not there. 

Then one day, he rose with vigour    
Once again he built the dream
Made a castle even finer                
Standing stately by their stream.

And the people came to marvel
At the wonder of this sight
For there in the very centre
Was her statue gleaming bright.

Now the castle so resplendent
Stands a testament to love
Which will never wane or wither
Conquers death and soars above. 

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26th August, 2015
Paul Callus & Eileen Manassian
Contest: Partner Up 
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 9/8/2015 2:22:00 PM
The imagery flowed delightfully as I read. It's lovely when this happens, it's as if one is watching a mini movie. Me, I love Castles, especially one in particular, and I'm loving the Castle I see here. Very well done Eileen//Paul, smiles, James :) :)
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2015 2:39:00 PM
Thank you for the lovely feedback, James. Yes, I know you love castles, especially Scottish ones...but I notice you've been building a special one of your own:) Wishing you all the best. // paul
Date: 8/31/2015 3:45:00 PM
Hi Paul: BEAUTIFUL POEM AND COLLABORATION!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/5/2015 9:37:00 AM
:)
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/2/2015 4:42:00 PM
Thank you Ralph. Eileen has been the perfect collaborator! // paul
Date: 8/30/2015 2:13:00 PM
This is one of the best poems I've read lately. I really loved it!... A wonderful and seamless collaboration, Paul and Eileen. Its a favorite for me!... Good luck to you both!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/5/2015 9:37:00 AM
:) Thanks, Kelly. Very kind of you.
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/2/2015 4:41:00 PM
I love your complimentary comments, Kelly:) Thank you, especially for rating this among your favourites! Good luck wishes are also appreciated. hugs // paul
Date: 8/30/2015 7:54:00 AM
Paul and Eileen, captivating title and indeed a lovely title.. :D nice flow!!! :D ~Olive Eloisa =')
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/2/2015 4:30:00 PM
Thank you for reading and liking Olive_eloi:) The forever castle is also a love castle. Hugs // paul
Date: 8/28/2015 11:10:00 AM
Enjoyed your lovely tale, Paul and Eileen. Congrats on a successful collaboration and all the best in Shadow's contest. hugs!
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/2/2015 4:21:00 PM
Thank you, Kim! We tried to tackle the theme from a different angle; hope we've succeeded! Hugs // paul
Date: 8/27/2015 11:53:00 PM
This is my kinda poetry, Its almost like you 2 wrote it for me!!!! Ah to be in the Loire again! :)
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Date: 9/2/2015 4:20:00 PM
Glad that you found this to your liking Arthur! Both the valley and the river are beautiful! Thank you for stopping by my friend! // paul
Date: 8/27/2015 7:15:00 PM
Paul and Eileen.....this is written splendidly, capturing the strength of love and devotion, I love it! Hugs
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2015 5:22:00 PM
Thank you for reading and commenting so positively, Cecilia! Glad that you enjoyed our combined offering. Hugs // paul
Date: 8/27/2015 1:55:00 PM
of love eternal essayed with much eloquence and devotion.. a lovely collab, paul and eileen... huggs
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2015 5:18:00 PM
Thank you Nette! True love can last into eternity! Hugs // paul
Date: 8/27/2015 1:46:00 PM
I read Eileen's post. Paul, it's beautiful. A delight to read all over again... The poem ends well and they way it should.... LOVE LINDA
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2015 4:57:00 PM
Hi Linda! I have just read your post on Eileen's page; thank you for the lovely comments:) So pleased that you enjoyed our collaboration. May I add that I also enjoyed co-writing with you:) Hugs // paul
Date: 8/27/2015 11:15:00 AM
Hello Paul, This is a quite excellent fantasy write by you and Eileen!! The imagery and verses flow so well from stanza to stanza with the blend-in of the love theme. Eileen and you are a most talented team here with your marvelous Quatrain write. Best of Luck to both of you in the contest!! Your poem is superb. "7"!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2015 4:48:00 PM
You are most generous in your lovely feedback and the high rating, Gary:) Thank you my friend! I am sure that Eileen will appreciate your positive visit. // paul
Date: 8/27/2015 11:01:00 AM
Hello, my dear collaborator! :) Just wanted to stop by and say....HI! :) Hope you entered us, dear......Hugs
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2015 4:37:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by my dear co-writer:) Writing with you is always a pleasurable experience! Sorry for this late reply, but time is hardly ever on my side:) Hugs // paul

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