The Foothills Felt No Breeze

A few moments past twilight,
half a moment before blackfall,
I was sure there’d be time enough
and light enough 
to return to the bodies I’d left behind.
My lifelong friends followed me,
we quaked under the bridge,
through the narrow tunnel,
up the steep, narrow footpath,
through the second tunnel.
We saw them still there,
just where I’d found them
and left them,
why would they not be there ?
Yet somehow 
I wasn’t sure that they would.
Eerily visible from the distant road,
so brilliantly white
they almost glowed,
seven bodies hanging in the gloom,
this was how I found them
and left them.
Now they were five,
there was no hint of a breeze.
No longer hanging,
they stood like forgotten mannequins,
hoping, perhaps,
that we might breathe new life
into the quiet foothills.

29th April 2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 8/16/2020 11:05:00 AM
I was hanging on your words here. Good write J.
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 8/17/2020 6:39:00 AM
Thanks, Eric; some of it had me suspended in midair myself even as I wrote it.
Date: 8/10/2019 8:54:00 AM
Charmaine’s comment reflects my own. I am a Stephen King fan. I was thinking “The Body”. Made into the movie “Stand By Me”
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Date: 8/12/2019 12:14:00 AM
Thanks for comment, Richard; if it works okay, then all good.
Date: 7/7/2019 4:27:00 PM
Mysterious and haunting..It gave me chills down my spine..Somehow made me think of Stephen King books :).Greatly penned.
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Date: 7/16/2019 10:59:00 AM
Thanks, Charmaine, very glad you enjoyed.
Date: 5/15/2019 12:05:00 AM
Wonderfully penned. Wow... Mesmerizing :)
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/15/2019 6:08:00 AM
Thank you so much, Swetha, very kind.
Date: 5/11/2019 12:36:00 AM
This is positively eerie and more haunting than any Halloween or ghost story I remember. Think I’ll leave a light on tonight.
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/11/2019 2:48:00 AM
Haha, job done ! Thanks for visit and comment, Mark, very good to know it had some kind of effect.
Date: 5/9/2019 2:52:00 PM
Hello Lawrence Sharp, I felt like i was there as i read this poem. It would be nice to breeze new life into the foot hills. have a nice day my friend.
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/9/2019 11:54:00 PM
Thank you very much for visit and comment, Darlene, always good to see you.
Date: 5/7/2019 2:59:00 PM
Tremendous mood and great poetry
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Date: 5/8/2019 11:13:00 AM
Thank you very much, Allen, very pleased you enjoyed, visit very well received.
Date: 5/4/2019 6:49:00 PM
a layered piece crafted from the heart, lawrence...a POTD citation well deserved!...huggs
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Date: 5/4/2019 10:38:00 PM
Thanks,Nette, very pleased that you enjoyed.
Date: 5/3/2019 1:03:00 PM
The mystery hangs in the air with all the characters. We long to know their stories. Those last two lines are breathtaking! Greatly enjoyed!
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Date: 5/3/2019 1:07:00 PM
Thank you very much indeed, Kim, truly appreciated, and very good to have you here.
Date: 5/2/2019 5:06:00 AM
- Congratulations with this amazing poem, Lawrence ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/2/2019 8:10:00 AM
Thank you very much, Sunshine, very glad you enjoyed.
Date: 5/1/2019 9:52:00 PM
Very mysterious poem/story...and now I'm left with baited breath, wondering what happens next. Hope you write a sequel to this interesting story. Congrats on POTD.
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Date: 5/2/2019 12:04:00 AM
Very gratifying to know that it's well received, Carole; thank you very much, Metalhead Lady.
Date: 5/1/2019 8:58:00 PM
I was captivated by the dark intrigue of your stunning poem, Lawrence. Your imagery is gripping and as well as beautiful; 'A few moments past twilight, half a moment before blackfall,' - I just love that, a great atmospheric touch! Congratulations on your well deserved recognition with POTD honors. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/2/2019 12:03:00 AM
Thank you so much, Susan, always good to see you, high praise very well received.
Date: 5/1/2019 7:48:00 PM
Back to Congrats!!! on your poem of the day...Excellento! Mr. Lawrence...happy endings...^WW^...{*J*}
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Date: 5/2/2019 12:02:00 AM
Thanks, W's, appreciated.
Date: 5/1/2019 7:23:00 PM
Congratulations Lawrence, on your poem of the day, you work is well penned.
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Date: 5/2/2019 12:01:00 AM
Thank you very much indeed, pleased to have you here.
Date: 5/1/2019 12:48:00 PM
Congratulations Lawrence, on Poem of the Day!! Your thoughts are always so deep and powerful. ~ Brandy
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Date: 5/1/2019 1:20:00 PM
Thank you, Branderz, always so good to have you here.
Date: 5/1/2019 12:31:00 PM
Congrats on POTD..
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/1/2019 12:40:00 PM
Thank you very much, SO, words of encouragement always well received.
Date: 5/1/2019 10:34:00 AM
Fantastic atmosphere, engaging write. Excellent piece Lawrence, congratulations for your POTD! xomo
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/1/2019 12:40:00 PM
Very kind of you, Maureen, thank you no end.
Date: 5/1/2019 10:05:00 AM
Gloomy, mysterious, yet ending in a kind of hope. Certainly worthy of POTD. I am finding you one of my favorite poets on PS. Congratulations!
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/1/2019 12:39:00 PM
Thank you, Sunlite, far too kind. There are some very fine poets on PS, but your words of appreciation are deeply valued.
Date: 5/1/2019 8:57:00 AM
back with congratulations on POTD :)
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Date: 5/1/2019 12:36:00 PM
Greatly appreciated, PS, thank you very much.
Date: 5/1/2019 8:50:00 AM
DAMN, haven't even had my coffee and the muse is wandering in those tunnels. Very intriguing write, mysterious and metaphysical
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Date: 5/1/2019 12:35:00 PM
Thanks, John, very glad you enjoyed.
Date: 5/1/2019 8:00:00 AM
Wonderful mysteries write with strong fearful emotion.... great write, Lawrence, congratulations on POTD well deserved... a favorite
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/2/2019 1:26:00 AM
Peace and rest, always.
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Date: 5/1/2019 5:58:00 PM
I am doing very well, Lawrence, thank you for asking. Time does help
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Date: 5/1/2019 8:22:00 AM
Thank you very much, Eve, very good to see you again. I hope that you are well.
Date: 5/1/2019 7:29:00 AM
With Poe-like descriptions you wrapped our focus on the corporeal only to flip us into the mystical. Congrats on POTD.
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Date: 5/1/2019 8:21:00 AM
It's always very pleasing if any write can have the effect that you describe, Phil. Thank you very much, appreciated.
Date: 5/1/2019 7:11:00 AM
Back with congrats my friend on poem of the day..glad to see you in this space.
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/1/2019 8:19:00 AM
Thanks so much, Vijay, ongoing support always very greatly appreciated, my friend.
Date: 5/1/2019 6:19:00 AM
Awesome dark tale, Lawrence. Congratulations my poetry brother on your POTD honors. ~Charlie
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/1/2019 8:18:00 AM
Thanks, Charles, appreciated. You are surely the charming brother.
Date: 5/1/2019 5:43:00 AM
Congratulations on your exceptional dark verse being awarded POTD honors my great friend! Truly a well deserved recognition and showcasing of very creative and superbly composed poetry!
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Lawrence Sharp
Date: 5/1/2019 7:55:00 AM
Thank you, my inspirational friend, your words of encouragement are always very greatly valued.
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