Lawrence Sharp Poet Free verse

The Foothills Felt No Breeze

A few moments past twilight,
half a moment before blackfall,
I was sure there’d be time enough
and light enough 
to return to the bodies I’d left behind.
My lifelong friends followed me,
we quaked under the bridge,
through the narrow tunnel,
up the steep, narrow footpath,
through the second tunnel.
We saw them still there,
just where I’d found them
and left them,
why would they not be there ?
Yet somehow 
I wasn’t sure that they would.
Eerily visible from the distant road,
so brilliantly white
they almost glowed,
seven bodies hanging in the gloom,
this was how I found them
and left them.
Now they were five,
there was no hint of a breeze.
No longer hanging,
they stood like forgotten mannequins,
hoping, perhaps,
that we might breathe new life
into the quiet foothills.

29th April 2019

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Eric Ashford August 16, 2020 at 11:05 AM I was hanging on your words here. Good write J. Lawrence Sharp August 17, 2020 at 6:39 AM Thanks, Eric; some of it had me suspended in midair myself even as I wrote it.

Richard Lamoureux August 10, 2019 at 8:54 AM Charmaine’s comment reflects my own. I am a Stephen King fan. I was thinking “The Body”. Made into the movie “Stand By Me” Lawrence Sharp August 12, 2019 at 12:14 AM Thanks for comment, Richard; if it works okay, then all good.

Charmaine Chircop July 7, 2019 at 4:27 PM Mysterious and haunting..It gave me chills down my spine..Somehow made me think of Stephen King books :).Greatly penned. Lawrence Sharp July 16, 2019 at 10:59 AM Thanks, Charmaine, very glad you enjoyed.

Swetha Vangaveti May 15, 2019 at 12:05 AM Wonderfully penned. Wow... Mesmerizing :) Lawrence Sharp May 15, 2019 at 6:08 AM Thank you so much, Swetha, very kind.

Mark Peterson May 11, 2019 at 12:36 AM This is positively eerie and more haunting than any Halloween or ghost story I remember. Think I’ll leave a light on tonight. Lawrence Sharp May 11, 2019 at 2:48 AM Haha, job done ! Thanks for visit and comment, Mark, very good to know it had some kind of effect.

Darlene De Beaulieu May 9, 2019 at 2:52 PM Hello Lawrence Sharp, I felt like i was there as i read this poem. It would be nice to breeze new life into the foot hills. have a nice day my friend. Lawrence Sharp May 9, 2019 at 11:54 PM Thank you very much for visit and comment, Darlene, always good to see you.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr. May 7, 2019 at 2:59 PM Tremendous mood and great poetry Lawrence Sharp May 8, 2019 at 11:13 AM Thank you very much, Allen, very pleased you enjoyed, visit very well received.

Nette Onclaud May 4, 2019 at 6:49 PM a layered piece crafted from the heart, lawrence...a POTD citation well deserved!...huggs Lawrence Sharp May 4, 2019 at 10:38 PM Thanks,Nette, very pleased that you enjoyed.

Kim Rodrigues May 3, 2019 at 1:03 PM The mystery hangs in the air with all the characters. We long to know their stories. Those last two lines are breathtaking! Greatly enjoyed! Lawrence Sharp May 3, 2019 at 1:07 PM Thank you very much indeed, Kim, truly appreciated, and very good to have you here.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 2, 2019 at 5:06 AM - Congratulations with this amazing poem, Lawrence ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lawrence Sharp May 2, 2019 at 8:10 AM Thank you very much, Sunshine, very glad you enjoyed.

Carole Duet May 1, 2019 at 9:52 PM Very mysterious poem/story...and now I'm left with baited breath, wondering what happens next. Hope you write a sequel to this interesting story. Congrats on POTD. Lawrence Sharp May 2, 2019 at 12:04 AM Very gratifying to know that it's well received, Carole; thank you very much, Metalhead Lady.

Susan Ashley May 1, 2019 at 8:58 PM I was captivated by the dark intrigue of your stunning poem, Lawrence. Your imagery is gripping and as well as beautiful; 'A few moments past twilight, half a moment before blackfall,' - I just love that, a great atmospheric touch! Congratulations on your well deserved recognition with POTD honors. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan Lawrence Sharp May 2, 2019 at 12:03 AM Thank you so much, Susan, always good to see you, high praise very well received.

Winged Warrior May 1, 2019 at 7:48 PM Back to Congrats!!! on your poem of the day...Excellento! Mr. Lawrence...happy endings...^WW^...{*J*} Lawrence Sharp May 2, 2019 at 12:02 AM Thanks, W's, appreciated.

Okonkwo Ifeanyichukwu May 1, 2019 at 7:23 PM Congratulations Lawrence, on your poem of the day, you work is well penned. Lawrence Sharp May 2, 2019 at 12:01 AM Thank you very much indeed, pleased to have you here.

Brandy Nicole May 1, 2019 at 12:48 PM Congratulations Lawrence, on Poem of the Day!! Your thoughts are always so deep and powerful. ~ Brandy Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 1:20 PM Thank you, Branderz, always so good to have you here.

Silent One May 1, 2019 at 12:31 PM Congrats on POTD.. Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 12:40 PM Thank you very much, SO, words of encouragement always well received.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 1, 2019 at 10:34 AM Fantastic atmosphere, engaging write. Excellent piece Lawrence, congratulations for your POTD! xomo Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 12:40 PM Very kind of you, Maureen, thank you no end.

Sunlite Wanter May 1, 2019 at 10:05 AM Gloomy, mysterious, yet ending in a kind of hope. Certainly worthy of POTD. I am finding you one of my favorite poets on PS. Congratulations! Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 12:39 PM Thank you, Sunlite, far too kind. There are some very fine poets on PS, but your words of appreciation are deeply valued.

P.S. Awtry May 1, 2019 at 8:57 AM back with congratulations on POTD :) Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 12:36 PM Greatly appreciated, PS, thank you very much.

John Lawless May 1, 2019 at 8:50 AM DAMN, haven't even had my coffee and the muse is wandering in those tunnels. Very intriguing write, mysterious and metaphysical Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 12:35 PM Thanks, John, very glad you enjoyed.

Eve Roper May 1, 2019 at 8:00 AM Wonderful mysteries write with strong fearful emotion.... great write, Lawrence, congratulations on POTD well deserved... a favorite Lawrence Sharp May 2, 2019 at 1:26 AM Peace and rest, always. Eve Roper May 1, 2019 at 5:58 PM I am doing very well, Lawrence, thank you for asking. Time does help Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 8:22 AM Thank you very much, Eve, very good to see you again. I hope that you are well.

Phil Capitano May 1, 2019 at 7:29 AM With Poe-like descriptions you wrapped our focus on the corporeal only to flip us into the mystical. Congrats on POTD. Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 8:21 AM It's always very pleasing if any write can have the effect that you describe, Phil. Thank you very much, appreciated.

Vijay Pandit May 1, 2019 at 7:11 AM Back with congrats my friend on poem of the day..glad to see you in this space. Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 8:19 AM Thanks so much, Vijay, ongoing support always very greatly appreciated, my friend.

Charles Messina May 1, 2019 at 6:19 AM Awesome dark tale, Lawrence. Congratulations my poetry brother on your POTD honors. ~Charlie Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 8:18 AM Thanks, Charles, appreciated. You are surely the charming brother.

Robert Lindley May 1, 2019 at 5:43 AM Congratulations on your exceptional dark verse being awarded POTD honors my great friend! Truly a well deserved recognition and showcasing of very creative and superbly composed poetry! Lawrence Sharp May 1, 2019 at 7:55 AM Thank you, my inspirational friend, your words of encouragement are always very greatly valued.

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