The First - and Last - Date

It's true it happened rather long ago,
but still I grin and break out in a laugh:
a friend arranged a date for me with Jo -
he later said, 'I guess I made a gaffe.'

Let's say it wasn't instant love on sight;
she coldly eyed me, said, 'You must be Jack?'
I nodded, said, 'And you are Jo-Jo, right?'
She shrugged and fastened up her flasher mac.

Her arms were folded tight across her chest,
attempts at conversation failed, and so
I drank my pint of beer in silence, stressed,
and eyed the clock. I couldn't wait to go.

And then her eyes were sparkling, gaze intense;
but not for me (the barmaid, breasts immense...)

Sort of based on a real life blind date, LOL

for Brenda's First Date contest, 20th January 2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 2/14/2018 7:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Jack!.. Happy Valentine's Day Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 2/14/2018 8:07:00 AM
Oh boy! LOL! Congrats, Jack!
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Date: 2/14/2018 7:42:00 AM
Well, quite a twist but you titled it right, Jack. Well done and congrats on the placement.
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Date: 2/14/2018 6:38:00 AM
back with congrats, Jack. well done.
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Date: 2/5/2018 12:42:00 PM
This is another fun one.
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Date: 2/4/2018 7:48:00 PM
Yours is better than mine. I finally got 'er done and actually did it on a true date I'd had!! Sonnet form was not quite long enough for all I wanted to say, but because of the way I'd carried through with enjambment to the lines that were not in the same quatrain groups, I could not see a way to do it as a bunch of quatrains. (which I should have done in the first place). Thanks for seeing my poems today, Jack. Joe is flying to Kentucky early this morning. OH my. What will happen with his mom?
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Date: 1/28/2018 10:08:00 AM
oh brilliant, Jack, an experience and more. love the poetry version you've wrote.
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Date: 1/21/2018 6:26:00 PM
VERY NICE one, Jack. Someone just told me I was good at bringing sonnets down to earth. WEll, so the heck are YOU, my friend. This is GREAT story telling in sonnet form. Love it.
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Date: 1/21/2018 5:00:00 PM
Well done, Jack. Very funny.
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Date: 1/21/2018 11:55:00 AM
This is funny but well written Jack. Some dates can be real bummers. lol love phyl
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Date: 1/20/2018 6:07:00 PM
Very good, Jack, and I enjoyed the twist at the end! Incidentally I wrote a Limerick on similar lines about a month ago, though I still have to post it (it's about a king from Baghdad!). Regards // paul
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Date: 1/20/2018 5:02:00 PM
Well, what a bummer of a date..Reads like a good contender for the contest..Way to go..Sara
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Date: 1/20/2018 4:28:00 PM
Oh this sonnet is brilliantly written and expressed Jack. A lovely lighthearted write with perfect rhythm and rhyme and your final couplet is just superb. Best wishes for a win with your excellent sonnet! Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Date: 1/20/2018 4:22:00 PM
oh my word Jack this is hilarious and that final couplet is priceless ! Good luck in the contest I LOVE it:-) hugs Jan xx
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