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It was bitterly cold outside; winter had finally arrived Scintillating snowflakes were falling smothering the land with a white lacy shawl My mother is old and frail; it was far too treacherous for her to go out so I’d promised to get some essential provisions I trudged along wearily, the slippery snow made walking so difficult it was such a relief to see the porch light twinkling in the distance When I reached our little cottage I could see her anxious face at the window Mum greeted me with a beaming smile and a warm embrace She helped me brush the snowflakes from my thick coat Then we sat down together by the roaring log fire inside our cosy lounge Oh it felt so good to be home! Fiction write The Fire Inside Contest Sponsored by Julie Leigh Rodeheaver 11-12-17

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 11/14/2017 4:55:00 AM

Beautiful write, Jan, few things compare to home ... congrats on your well-earned win, friend. Blessings! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/14/2017 6:27:00 AM

Thanks Greg I enjoyed the challenge Julie set and was delighted with my placement:-) hugs jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 11/14/2017 1:04:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan on your win. Yes, it's a fabulous feeling.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/14/2017 4:44:00 AM

Thanks Subimal reading my poem and seeing the picture gives me a cosy feeling inside :-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 11/13/2017 10:57:00 PM

Dropping back with my Congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 11/14/2017 4:43:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 11/13/2017 6:37:00 PM

Congrats, Jan. There’s nothing more cozy than sitting in front of a blazing fire sipping hot cider on a snowy night. John

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2017 6:41:00 PM

I've never tried hot cider it sounds rather tasty!:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/13/2017 4:20:00 PM

Your imagination is teeming with talent lady! I loved this! Congratulations! : )

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2017 4:29:00 PM

Thanks for your lovely comment Connie:-) I never know where my muse will take me:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 11/13/2017 3:40:00 PM

Wonderful write, Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2017 4:28:00 PM

thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Smith

Date: 11/13/2017 3:35:00 PM

Lovely imagery here Jan, congrats :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2017 4:28:00 PM

Thanks Gary:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/13/2017 9:15:00 AM

Fiction or not, does not matter, so many will relate to this wonderful poetry Jan, you surely do put the glow into your words,,,,Oh so lovely.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2017 4:28:00 PM

Thanks so much for your lovely comment and all your support Harry:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/12/2017 10:49:00 PM

A very heartwarming poem! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2017 2:44:00 AM

Thanks Art:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/12/2017 5:28:00 PM

Such a heartfelt and heartwarming write Jan. Excellently expressed and a joy to read. Good luck in the contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 5:30:00 PM

Thanks so much Susan I wanted to do a different take on the fire inside theme for the contest and I hope Julie likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 11/12/2017 4:25:00 PM

Lovely reminder of missing mothers for many Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 4:30:00 PM

I wanted to do a different interpretation of the fire inside and i hope Julie likes it. I'm still so lucky to have my mum Jean, we have become so much closer since dad died and she relies on me so much:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/12/2017 2:59:00 PM

Lovely...I wish I still had my Mamma to welcome me home, Jan. Your piece touched my heart. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:06:00 PM

aww Eileen i know how much you miss your mum, this is pure fiction for me but it was the only thing i could think of that was a unique interpretation of the fire inside:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 11/12/2017 1:43:00 PM

Jan, this is so well written, I felt like I was there. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. John

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:07:00 PM

thanks John I hope Julie likes my interpretation of the theme:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 11/12/2017 1:37:00 PM

Wonderful write Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:11:00 PM

thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs jan xx

James Marshall Goff

Date: 11/12/2017 12:51:00 PM

Likewise, the frigid season is upon us....beautiful poem, and story I am familiar...

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:17:00 PM

Thanks so much James I am not a fan of snow as our little Island was so badly hit in 2013 when about 10% of livestock perished and the Island ground to a halt as many of the roads were treacherous, my hubby slept at work for 2 days as he had the company 4 x 4 and was ferrying staff up the steep hill so the broadcasting could still go on :-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 11/12/2017 11:27:00 AM

A beautiful scene you created Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:18:00 PM

thanks so much Tim I wanted to do something different with the theme:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/12/2017 10:41:00 AM

IT feels really good, Jan, nothing like home, sweet home:)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:18:00 PM

thanks so much Jo its just a fiction write and i don't like snow lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 11/12/2017 9:43:00 AM

Now we must add story telling to your poetic repertoire. It's a comfy-cozy write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:19:00 PM

I wanted to do something different on the fire inside theme Lin I hope Julie likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 11/12/2017 9:29:00 AM

well done, jan! i was able to picture it all perfectly and share the coziness when you got inside...

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:19:00 PM

thanks so much Ilene I'm glad i wrote a credible story:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 11/12/2017 8:29:00 AM

Beautiful imagery, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 3:20:00 PM

thanks so much Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/12/2017 8:21:00 AM

I really enjoyed this take on the contest, the warm fire inside the cottage is so inviting when it is very cold out! I loved the way you wrote this delightful poem, filled with a warmth of its own, a peaceful feeling emanates from your piece so eloquently! It tell the tale of how life can be rough and cold, but there is always something awaiting you with joyous warmth and delight! Great Work my friend!!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2017 8:27:00 AM

Thanks Russell. I wanted to do something a little different on the theme:-) I used to shop most days when my parents had their house here and just get bits and bobs of shopping for mum now she is in care, but when the weather is bad I do pop by my next door but one neighbour as she walks with a 3 wheeled walker and I drop by the check on her and get things if she wants but she is pretty independent otherwise:-) hugs jan xx