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The Empty Room

Eight minutes in, dream-debut decomposing, marred in mad mud. Barely begun, his brutish block, a tackle that tore through time, trailed by the walk of shame. Elation fades, deflation reigns, suspended in solitude, exiled in emptiness. The still dressing room droning. He sits soaked in sweat and sorrow, an anvil of anguish weighing down on his chest. A downpour of despair envelopes him, Relentless… His dream withering in a damp corner. He inhales the burden, of cold crushing desolation, agony amplified, Loneliness lingers…

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Date: 6/10/2024 9:04:00 PM
Dear Sean, your potent poetic prowess is on full display. The emotions are palpable conveyed with striking imagery, alliterations and metaphor, "an anvil of anguish weighing down on his chest" - wow! The weight of your words are impressive. Congratulations for your win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Sean Kibble
Date: 6/11/2024 3:23:00 PM
Thank you Susan and congrats on another win.
Date: 6/10/2024 1:30:00 PM
Sean, this is powerful writing!
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Sean Kibble
Date: 6/11/2024 3:24:00 PM
Thank you for a nice top 10 finish and your encouragement

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