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The Empty Room

an empty room and I stare at the ceiling blank eyes and a blanker slate, my poker face arms spread over my head all I can see are whirring blades blurring into creamy paint and the small cracks in between the shadows in my chest, mahogany branching out their needles, ebony one pricks my eye red ink taints crisp alabaster damps it slow, slow, slow I exhale shaky, shaky, shaky heavy lids droop to a close and no one sees no one can.

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Date: 3/29/2025 1:48:00 PM
Oh, my, you just did something 'spiced emotionally-other' to me through this poem. I understood the imagery w/o effort and was thus naturally affected in the true, natural pieces of me. I've missed u which, thank you God, led me to this. I'm putting it in my favs. Think of you all the days in ways that make me wonder if we've known each other 'before.' Let me know what condition your condition is in, please. Love ... CayCay
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 3/30/2025 2:24:00 AM
CayCay, I missed you too, dear friend. How have you been these past few days? I've been well; there is an annual festive day tomorrow where I live - excited for it. Thank you for your encouraging comment. If we knew each other 'before,' then this meeting truly is fated, even though I would cherish it the same if serendipitous. Love, Hiba.
Date: 12/18/2024 2:08:00 AM
Hilba, First and foremost a genuine thank you for your kind observations on my tribute to a wonderful sister, Jay. In turn the above poem is a literary masterpiece on your part. A poignant narrative allied to deeply emotional lines. Superb descriptions imbued with intense passion. Howard
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 12/18/2024 2:22:00 AM
Thank you so much Howard!! So glad to see you here; you're a phenomenal poet, yourself. Be Blessed.
Date: 8/11/2024 2:25:00 PM
Hiba, your poetry is like an abstract painting, very unique. I love how you weave your colors through and through. Keep on writing, dear Hiba ~Anaya
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 8/11/2024 11:09:00 PM
Thank you very much, Anaya!!! This really motivated me.
Date: 6/27/2024 3:17:00 AM
Hiba, you have such an emotional way of expressing your poems, I admire this poem very much, Constance
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 6/27/2024 8:53:00 AM
Ah thank you so very much Constance, I appreciate you <3
Date: 6/7/2024 12:34:00 PM
Good one about addiction. I enjoyed reading it today. Thanks for sharing. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 6/7/2024 9:38:00 PM
Oooooo interesting interpretation. I quite like that. Thank you for dropping by, Sara <3

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