The Dust Devil

Loneliness the circles
In which the daydream never ends
I wish you'd go away those times
So I could find you once again

Perhaps a hole-in -middle whirlpool
The nothing that ever stays
A fist of clenching handful
A farmer begging God for rain

A plague of desperation
No welcome needs around
The sideway glance of people
As if you were a paedophile

An intrusion of their selfish plans
A car with a one way steering wheel
Thats always headed home
A dust devil with nowhere else to go

A ship that wayward stranded
Marooned on a broken beach
A schoolroom devoid of students
And theres nothing else to teach

Sitting so low in the restaurant
Furtive glances all eyes on me
I walk through them, they look through me
I'm a drive-thru KFC

Her virtue were her beauty spot
But she drove the rain to tears
Eating chicken in the parking lot
She didnt fit with all my fears

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Date: 12/1/2017 8:52:00 PM
This one is sure deep and the different images all add up to such gloom and melancholy feelings! Love the images!
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/20/2017 1:52:00 PM
You nailed it . All true. Will catch up soon on all my beautiful friends . Ty. Hugs here
Date: 12/1/2017 1:50:00 PM
This has the sound of woeful desperation to it words. A tug of war within ones self about many things not just a person. Take care my friend you have written a worrisome poem. Inner turmoil.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/20/2017 1:51:00 PM
Oi Patricia, how did I miss you here? As always thank you..yes indeed desperation more like when you dont feel at home in your own skin. Soon I will be more forthcoming. Im fixing some mojo here
Date: 12/1/2017 6:03:00 AM
Some excellent lines of poetry in this deep poem... So much emotion you have expressed.. simply excellent
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/1/2017 8:12:00 AM
Thank you most graciously S.O. Youre in my circle of friends. You write so well
Date: 12/1/2017 1:37:00 AM
A very deep and plaintive write Jannie which I liked - You've covered a whole spectrum from loneliness, to drought, loss of direction, all of which can be equated to our own emotional drought and uncertainty and then your last verse! Have a great festive break - not long to go now - It's summer in our part of the world now...Maria
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/1/2017 8:10:00 AM
Hi Maria, your power of observation is a true gift. Thank you. Its summer down here now . Late rain brought relief.from the incindinary heat. Have a wonderful dec where ever you are
Date: 11/30/2017 12:24:00 PM
I love the emotional grit of this poem, Jannie. Powerful lines, esp ... virtue was her beauty spot ... she didn't fit w/all my fears. Your cosmic pen moves in uncharted galactic skies. Another outstanding write, my dear friend. Love and more love always.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/20/2017 1:56:00 PM
You truly inspire me and I so wished you lived next door so can get more. Thank you Freddie. Love back to you
Date: 11/28/2017 10:41:00 PM
The silly season is on us, yes. Thank you for making me aware. Hope you had a nice break and that things are upbeat over there.
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Date: 11/28/2017 5:55:00 PM
Loneliness is rampant this time of year. I hope poetry will bring you cheer my friend. I haven't been around because of the holiday. It is good to be back. I hope you are well. Blessings, Connie
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