The Dream

I dreamed you were a snake last night
and blood dripped from your eyes,
your scales were dark and dangerous
and polished with your lies.

A cruel, forked tongue made threatening noise, 
and terrorized my mind.
Angry fangs fanned fear inside
and stoked my inner cries.

Just when a strike seemed obvious,
you dropped your sad disguise,
and coiled around my trembling feet,
and just as sadly died.

An instant passed before I knew
the secret for your slide
Sorrow was your only poison,
now I can leave you far behind.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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George   Avatar
November 3, 2016 at 5:04 AM
Wonderful writing, Madeleine. Many congrats on your win. Lainey
Mclaughlin Avatar
November 3, 2016 at 9:17 AM
thank you, Elaine.
Devnath  Avatar
August 13, 2011 at 7:06 AM
Class write with class thought, which you have brought.Nice, very nice feeling. Thanks for your comment. God bless us all. bl
Guzzi Avatar
August 12, 2009 at 4:37 PM
very very nice ! Some folks are just snakes (shrug) at least you got away unbitten! You might like my The Wol's Tale Light & Love
Fraser Avatar
July 23, 2009 at 10:49 AM
Terrific verse Madeleine, a super read this was>>James
Degenhardt Avatar
January 21, 2009 at 5:00 AM
The flow and rhyme of this are perfect and the imagery is so clear it successfully conveyed the meaning well. Very well written. Michael
Atanacio Avatar
January 5, 2009 at 6:18 AM
what a picture I painted in my mind because of your words Yeah.. I enjoyed this read :) Frank
Esquire Avatar
December 18, 2008 at 6:07 PM
Dear Madeleine, Jeepers the more I read YOU the more Infatuated I am with YOU. YOU make Dreams come to life then YOU Awake Also I must apologize for not saying THANK-YOU for YOUR Gracious comment on Pathway to Heaven I presume YOU only went to the next level in the POETRYSOUP Contest as there are no comments of Congratuiations After LOVEYOUr POETIC TALENT...HG
Wiggins Avatar
December 15, 2008 at 6:10 PM
Great write...i love this... *Breana
Heck Avatar
November 30, 2008 at 7:25 AM
Madeleine - Congratulations on your poem making Round One of the PSoup poetry contest! Wishing you all the best in the finals and have a Happy Holiday season. Peace always, John
Winter Avatar
November 16, 2008 at 5:12 PM
Hi Madeleine. Thanks for your comment. Yes, luckily I did have a great childhood, however, I was in an unusually good mood when I wrote that poem, and honestly do not feel like a 'powerful person', as you stated in your comment, but I thank you. If you are a premium member you are able to enter 3 poems, otherwise, just one. Good luck once again. Love, Shar
Brown Avatar
November 12, 2008 at 4:47 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round. Good luck in the finals. Love, Carol
Winter Avatar
November 11, 2008 at 8:26 AM
Congrats on making it through to the first round! Good luck in the finals! Love, Shar
Jordan Avatar
November 8, 2008 at 10:20 AM
Madeleine - Congrats on your poetry making it through to the next round – Great Job & God Bless
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
September 21, 2008 at 7:42 AM
Dark in a way but a sense of relief and freedom in the end. God Bless and thanks for your comment. Vince
Harrington Avatar
August 30, 2008 at 7:13 PM
madeleine i love your image of your friend in the drea/nightmare/warning. sometimes our dreams are so very vivid and bear the truth that we do not want to see.
Hickman Avatar
August 8, 2008 at 10:41 PM
a beautiful worded piece which serves the ending to which I could feel the realization and comfort you felt, as this has eased your mind about someone who has left you,,,the flow was remarkable as well the images painted within,,,,blessings..Cecil
Hickman Avatar
July 18, 2008 at 7:54 PM
your poem was rich in imagery and flows exceptionally well with details, your last two lines are myfavorite even though so sad,blessings..Cecil
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