The Dream

I dreamed you were a snake last night
and blood dripped from your eyes,
your scales were dark and dangerous
and polished with your lies.

A cruel, forked tongue made threatening noise, 
and terrorized my mind.
Angry fangs fanned fear inside
and stoked my inner cries.

Just when a strike seemed obvious,
you dropped your sad disguise,
and coiled around my trembling feet,
and just as sadly died.

An instant passed before I knew
the secret for your slide
Sorrow was your only poison,
now I can leave you far behind.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 11/3/2016 5:04:00 AM
Wonderful writing, Madeleine. Many congrats on your win. Lainey
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Date: 11/3/2016 9:17:00 AM
thank you, Elaine.
Date: 8/13/2011 7:06:00 AM
Class write with class thought, which you have brought.Nice, very nice feeling. Thanks for your comment. God bless us all. bl
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Date: 8/12/2009 4:37:00 PM
very very nice ! Some folks are just snakes (shrug) at least you got away unbitten! You might like my The Wol's Tale Light & Love
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Date: 7/23/2009 10:49:00 AM
Terrific verse Madeleine, a super read this was>>James
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Date: 1/21/2009 5:00:00 AM
The flow and rhyme of this are perfect and the imagery is so clear it successfully conveyed the meaning well. Very well written. Michael
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Date: 1/5/2009 6:18:00 AM
what a picture I painted in my mind because of your words Yeah.. I enjoyed this read :) Frank
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Date: 12/18/2008 6:07:00 PM
Dear Madeleine, Jeepers the more I read YOU the more Infatuated I am with YOU. YOU make Dreams come to life then YOU Awake Also I must apologize for not saying THANK-YOU for YOUR Gracious comment on Pathway to Heaven I presume YOU only went to the next level in the POETRYSOUP Contest as there are no comments of Congratuiations After LOVEYOUr POETIC TALENT...HG
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Date: 12/15/2008 6:10:00 PM
Great write...i love this... *Breana
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Date: 11/30/2008 7:25:00 AM
Madeleine - Congratulations on your poem making Round One of the PSoup poetry contest! Wishing you all the best in the finals and have a Happy Holiday season. Peace always, John
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Date: 11/16/2008 5:12:00 PM
Hi Madeleine. Thanks for your comment. Yes, luckily I did have a great childhood, however, I was in an unusually good mood when I wrote that poem, and honestly do not feel like a 'powerful person', as you stated in your comment, but I thank you. If you are a premium member you are able to enter 3 poems, otherwise, just one. Good luck once again. Love, Shar
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Date: 11/12/2008 4:47:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round. Good luck in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/11/2008 8:26:00 AM
Congrats on making it through to the first round! Good luck in the finals! Love, Shar
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Date: 11/8/2008 10:20:00 AM
Madeleine - Congrats on your poetry making it through to the next round – Great Job & God Bless
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Date: 9/21/2008 7:42:00 AM
Dark in a way but a sense of relief and freedom in the end. God Bless and thanks for your comment. Vince
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Date: 8/30/2008 7:13:00 PM
madeleine i love your image of your friend in the drea/nightmare/warning. sometimes our dreams are so very vivid and bear the truth that we do not want to see.
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Date: 8/8/2008 10:41:00 PM
a beautiful worded piece which serves the ending to which I could feel the realization and comfort you felt, as this has eased your mind about someone who has left you,,,the flow was remarkable as well the images painted within,,,,blessings..Cecil
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Date: 7/18/2008 7:54:00 PM
your poem was rich in imagery and flows exceptionally well with details, your last two lines are myfavorite even though so sad,blessings..Cecil
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