The Divine and the Deviant

Like a young Adonis, divine was he.
Star athlete, he was masculine and trim.
Dark hair had he and eyes like azure sea.
Wherever he would go, girls flocked to him.

She was like a deviant among them.
The school was preppy. If it were a pond,
she’d be the outlier they labeled scum.
Of ordinary things she was not fond.

She’d come to school disheveled, legs not shaved.
Large bright tattoos ran up and down her arms.
In class, with cheekiness she misbehaved.
Immune was she to the divine one’s charms.

That guy most worshiped seemed to reverence her!
The other students watched as if in shock
to see each day whatever might occur
when their young god with her would try to talk.

They did not see in her that inner glow
that he could see, but somehow he broke through
by bringing out her beautiful, and so
now everybody else can see it too.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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George Avatar
August 29, 2026 at 12:25 AM
Hi Andrea, back to your poem with Congratulations on your great win. 👏
One Avatar
August 28, 2026 at 7:59 AM
Clever idea for the contest and I like the comparison to Adonis... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Dietrich Avatar
August 28, 2026 at 7:51 PM
Thanks, Silent One
Etgen-Baker Avatar
August 17, 2026 at 4:22 PM
beautifully constructed quatrain; great contest entry.
Borg Avatar
August 17, 2026 at 12:48 PM
Hats off to the Adonis look-a-like. Disheveled, legs not shaved does not bother me so much, but I'd set the bar at the bright tattoos. Call me a prude, I don't mind. Adonis, you're a better man than me, perspicacious and genuine. Andrea, your well written poem puts me to shame; perhaps I may change after the third read, but I know that an Adonis I'll never become.
Dietrich Avatar
August 17, 2026 at 11:58 PM
Ha. A guy like this would be very rare to find.
George Avatar
August 16, 2026 at 4:29 AM
You have approached the subject in a unique way. Those who seem wayward outside may have qualities hidden that only a few can see. The submerged qualities when brought to the fore through right contact may shine with greater glitter. Beautifully crafted 👍
Maverick Avatar
August 15, 2026 at 11:50 PM
Well its a good story Andrea..Not sure how it works in reality.? Probably mire likely in 2026 than in our youth though? Hey just to say I'm so pleased to see how you have grasped the nettle of life In checking out the nde's as you commented on Joe Dimino's poem box.. He's a great brother if sometimes pernikity.? No any of us are perfect though.' Yet you are checking it out very Well ( all love in Christ Andrea! )🙌🙏🙌
Crandall Avatar
August 14, 2026 at 6:42 PM
I enjoyed this story of the guy who could look deeper. It reminds me of a John Hughes film!
Godwin Avatar
August 15, 2026 at 10:51 PM
A word in your first line made me scared you were going to say "Holmes" rather than Hughes. This is CayCay and if you don't know who I'm referring to then I have no idea what you're talking about.
Poet Avatar
August 14, 2026 at 12:49 PM
Andrea, by comparing and contrasting two very different people, you tell an interesting and surprising love story. The images used help to vividly show how unique they are and how they deal with the pressures of society. Good luck with the contest.
Docherty Avatar
August 14, 2026 at 11:19 AM
What a beautiful write, love coquers through... To be cliche 'where theres a will...' Great story detail sets scene well so as a reader you felt you knew all... Well done.
Sharma  Avatar
August 14, 2026 at 7:42 AM
Awwn love finds us in every way possible whenever it's meant to be! The inner self and the soulful glow is what matters the most ~ How beautifully you've crafted this, when he, desired by many, remains attracted to the unusual charm that she has, which no one else can see! A very intriguing piece! Brilliant storytelling as well, love your descriptions throughout, dear Andrea 💫🌙⭐ Pleasure reading you always, Sending mermaid moonbeams and soothing stars 🧜‍♀️🧜‍♀️💜💜💫💫
Rolland Avatar
August 14, 2026 at 6:21 AM
this is surprising and touching, stay away from appearances, enjoyed
DiMino Avatar
August 14, 2026 at 3:14 AM
Yep, that thing about a book and its cover...got to admit, even with myself, covers mean a lot. Mine are mostly antique and treasured.
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