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The Difference in daffodils

I step out... Between man made Amber street lamps And natures midnight blue, still life.... crisp, dampness Not a soul to hamper, mood nor thought. Moments before witching hour... Solitude Strokes My bitter twisted mind plus soul... Walking Waltzing internally through thoughts fields And daffodils Barely a murmur They shiver softly (as I do) In a Cool Crisp.... Mad march air Cream Eerie... Negative heads bowed, both they and I Are as night time hoodies, shrouded within Noir prison bar petals We are akin. The nightime daffodils and I Skulking in the shadows unnoticed by all that pass We like it that way... The only difference between I and them Tomorrow.... They shine outside, tempt bees and eyes Then smile in the glory Of day...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 6/1/2012 6:36:00 PM
You use beautiful imagery in your poetry, i can see from reading this one on daffodils. Love that "mad march air" and how you compare yourself to the ones at night. Why not the sunny ones? I want to see you in the sunshine too!
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Karen Deeks
Date: 6/3/2012 12:27:00 AM
Hell Andrea and thanks for your thoughts on this one... I compair myself to the night time daffs at my darker mo's which luckily for me lessen as time goes by...karen :)
Date: 6/1/2012 12:00:00 PM
Enjoyed reading this one ...Yes, their day may be a short one but beautifully lived..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Glad that I chose it to read...Sara..Thanks for stopping by...Sara
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Karen Deeks
Date: 6/3/2012 12:25:00 AM
Thank you so much Sara for reading my writes today...and ever so glad you liked this one.... karen :)
Date: 6/1/2012 4:06:00 AM
You painted a beautiful picture here with your words. I could actually see you and the daffodils. An excellent write. Thanks for sharing your gift with us.
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Karen Deeks
Date: 6/3/2012 1:00:00 AM
Thank you so muc for your kind thoughts on this p[iece and im so sorry i missed this review somehow.. before... karen :)