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The Descent

I was floating, only now I'm sinking, Now I'm only sinking, my past drags me, deeper and deeper into the abyss. I never drown, the cold water in my lungs never stops the heartbeat, I just sink. Never dieing, never slowing. For the dankness can not kill me, and cool water can not end my descent, It can only make me colder. It can only drag me deeper.

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Andrea Travis

Date: 7/30/2013 7:49:00 PM

I loved the images your work conveyed to me. I feel like this could be my life. We never know as poets whether anothers work is firsthand experience. Your work is definitely a description of mine. Thanks for tapping into something very real for me. You touched my soul, very rarely done to me! Good job!

Benjamin Larson

Date: 7/15/2013 11:29:00 AM

I am actually doing really good in my life now, but those were my feelings for a while. this is so cool lol i posted this on my facebook and i got like 2 likes. this awesome, i love the feed back

Skat A

Date: 7/15/2013 8:24:00 AM

your past may be troubling and it's always there to haunt you for that case even when your down you must hang on to that balloon and float on cause the sun will shine once more for you,, your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan and "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT"

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/15/2013 4:32:00 AM

Hi, Benjamin. - A good written poem. - Like it a lot. - Welcome to P-Soup. - Thanks for your first poem, hope there will be many more in the future. - Have fun with poetry. - Good luck! - Greetings from Norway / / Anne-Lise

April Gabriella

Date: 7/14/2013 10:30:00 PM

I can really relate to this. I know these feelings. Very nice work!

Benjamin Larson
Date: 7/15/2013 11:30:00 AM

thanks! i was at a party and went to check my fb for a sec, and all of a sudden this was just flowwing out haha it was fun