The Day's Mourning

Fire kissed you lay your ivory skin aglow
beneath the gaslight from the cheery floral globe
marooned in innocence he died not long ago
and left you to wear a ring and coal black robes.
Drained of emotion, still as death but in repose 
beneath the gaslight from the cheery floral globe
you rest. Your ruddy cheeks the firelight bestowed 
a vigor your weary heart can no longer hold.
Drained of emotion, still as death but in repose, 
the shadows soften, pearl your skin, highlight the gold
in waves your silken tresses fall, their flow shows 
a vigor your weary heart can no longer hold.
So like the Lady of Shalott, she's indisposed
for like Ophelia white as bone on a chaise she lays, 
in waves your silken tresses fall, their flow shows 
that sunshine kissed your crown oft on better days.
Let her not wake, we need no words to see her pain
for like Ophelia white as bone on a chaise she lays, 
her heartbeat slows, his wraith goes, all's been in vain.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 6/7/2014 1:50:00 PM
Simply great, nice win...Well I remember my first kiss from a girl I simply adored. First of many thousands to come from all those in my long life but it's joy and tenderness remains like a soft glow on a sweet night.. Truly love this write!!!!
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Date: 6/1/2014 9:17:00 AM
I am back again to see this amazing story/poem.....that should have placed #1 You always find a way to stand out in my estimation. :) So when you honor my poetry in your contests, it makes me very proud and grateful of your own appreciation. Thanks Deb, for the last contest win !! :) I'm so pleased !
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Date: 5/30/2014 11:51:00 PM
nice win, Debbie, Love ~SKAT~
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Date: 5/29/2014 10:54:00 PM
Very nice creation. Congrats. Loved always my lovely friend, bl
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Date: 5/29/2014 4:53:00 PM
DEBBIE, CONGRATULATIONS, enjoying your winning poem in Isaiah's DREAM paint contest.... hugs...Linda
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Date: 5/27/2014 12:37:00 PM
This is a dramatic and very creative take on the painting. You saw her "resting in peace". I didn't think to go there! A brilliant write, Debbie! Congratulations on a well deserved win!.... Thank you for the kind congrats, by the way.
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Date: 5/26/2014 7:44:00 PM
Thank you so much, Deb, for what you said on my entry for this one......and if I may say it again,( the same thing back to you), so often I see how you never take the easy way, you strive to make your form and poem especially difficult, interesting and beautiful. I see it every time! Excellent
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Date: 5/26/2014 7:42:00 PM
Beautiful, Debbie. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/26/2014 6:38:00 PM
Great terzanelle...Congrats on your win
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Date: 5/26/2014 2:41:00 PM
What an outstanding terzanelle, Deb. Your words have such a delightful melody and the imagery is amazing. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/26/2014 11:28:00 AM
This is Fabulous Debbie. I'm enthralled!
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Date: 5/26/2014 12:47:00 AM
Another thoroughly enjoyable read , There is little that can have been in vain if it is written of so beautifully. .
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Date: 5/23/2014 10:45:00 AM
Hi, Debbie. This is the first time I encountered this poetic form and I must say that it's majestic in your hands.
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Date: 5/21/2014 4:57:00 PM
Dear Deb, This is quite a remarkable interpretation of the picture. Enjoyed my first read of a Terzanelle. Two lines are especially memorable for me: "...in waves your silken tresses fall, their flow shows that sunshine kissed your crown oft on better days." If this is for the contest, I wish you success with this awesome poem. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/20/2014 9:15:00 AM
Debbie beautifully sculpted this is a cracker, one of the best I've read recently...Bravo...love and light Jayne xxxx..7
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Date: 5/19/2014 11:14:00 PM
What a pleasure to read.
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Date: 5/17/2014 10:49:00 PM
a wonderful form you chose and a story as intricate as the tapestry brocade chaise. Good Luck in the contest. I have been absent lately but try to be here and catch up. Always enjoy your writing and style, Love, SuZ
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/18/2014 6:52:00 AM
Thanks Suz!
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