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A lovely breeze blew from the sea That autumn day was almost done; Her thick and wavy raven hair Was boldly gleaming in the sun. She rode her mare with idle reins Along the vast and sprawling sand, Deserted beach that gleamed of gold. The seagulls flew from sea to land. I had no doubt that she could sense My silent gaze. Her head held high She made no move to pull the dress That showed her leg right to the thigh. She turned and gave a fleeting smile Knowing full well what cards to deal And next on impulse flicked the reins To urge her mare and dug each heel. She was away; I followed suit As hooves threw sand into the air. The race was on, yet I held back And watched the sight of flowing hair. We neared the cove where water played I licked my lips and tasted salt. She pulled the reins, her mare obeyed; I did the same, came to a halt. Her face was radiant, breast that heaved; I was a failure at disguise. Appraising look gave me away I saw the glimmer in her eyes. Our eyes communed, there by the sea Before our lips dared utter speech I bade my time, while my heart beat And hoped the silence he would breach. The sunbeams softly kissed my skin My dress, it danced within the breeze My eyes invited him to me My lips curled up in playful tease. Dismounting from his feisty horse He slowly made his way to me I saw in stride and bearing he Was all a dream was meant to be. His fingers slid in silky mane Caressing it with tender touch Yet in my mind, all I could see Was my long hair in ardent clutch. I dared not breathe, for he was close He might discern my wild desire And so demurely I did stroke My lovely mare to quell the fire. He spoke to me, in mellow tones And asked of me, to take a walk Up to the cove where water splayed It offered us a place to talk. I acquiesced with faintest smile His brawny hands reached round my waist No sooner had I touched the ground Than to his body, mine he braced. Down in the cove, he touched my heart He lay me bare, my flesh and soul And love I felt, in every part For on that day, he made me whole. Down in the cove we two made love She gave her all, her flesh and soul There on that day in twilight zone She touched me so; my heart she stole. ----------------------------------------------- A co-write: Paul Callus & Eileen Manassian

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 12/19/2015 12:04:00 PM
Paul....we've written four collabs together and I've LOVED every single one. :) I hope to write more with you. Dear, Would you correct the last line of the stanza before the last? On THAT day, he made me whole. Thanks, dear. Hugs
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Date: 12/19/2015 5:23:00 PM
Your wish has been granted, Eileen:) (do I sound like a genie!) I stand to be corrected...but should four collabs be five:) Hugs // paul
Date: 2/5/2015 8:07:00 AM
I just now found tis great poem . What a very fine collaboration my friends. It flows like a romantic song and evokes such sweet memories. A double bravooooooo!!!!!! A super 7 and congrats to both authors!!!!!!! Adding this to my fav list this fine morn!
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Date: 2/5/2015 3:19:00 PM
Hi Robert! So pleased that you found this poem to your liking. Eileen is great at bringing out the best in me...and others! She will love your enthusiastic comments! thank you for the top rating and the fav. // paul
Date: 1/20/2015 2:37:00 PM
A beautifully sensual poem that shows both sides of a lovers tryst. Great stuff. God Bless. D.
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Date: 1/21/2015 12:16:00 PM
Glad that you enjoyed, Dave. Thank you for stopping by and giving me a chance to make your acquaintance. // paul
Date: 1/17/2015 5:59:00 PM
The intimate danger of missing her stride for you had nothing left to hide A very sensual and passionate poem!
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Date: 1/18/2015 10:48:00 AM
Hi Ralph! Thank you for stopping by; love your comments. All the best. // paul
Date: 1/17/2015 11:21:00 AM
Hi Paul and Eileen, This is a beautifully composed, passionate write. You work very well together and the tempo of the poem seemed to keep up with the horse's stride. Congrats on a great collaboration! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 1/17/2015 4:49:00 PM
Hi Carolyn...I love your lovely insightful comments, and I am sure Eileen will, too. We found it easy writing together and we are both satisfied with the result. (Reminds me of my co-writes with you:)) Thank you!!! hugs and love // paul
Date: 1/16/2015 4:49:00 PM
Wow, I agree was all your comments from everyone else, very romantic and want more.7++ Very good write Paul & Eileen
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Date: 1/17/2015 4:53:00 PM
Thank you Eve...lovely comments and high rating! With Eileen by my side it had to be a romantic offering! So glad you enjoyed. More?...hmmm...will have to wait and see:) hugs // paul
Date: 1/16/2015 10:05:00 AM
This is a gorgeous co-write......it plays music in my mind !! Well done, to both of you!
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Date: 1/17/2015 10:09:00 AM
Thank you Carrie....glad you can hear the music:) have a lovely weekend. // paul
Date: 1/16/2015 8:57:00 AM
I came back to give you another deserved 7!
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Date: 1/17/2015 9:41:00 AM
:) txs
Date: 1/16/2015 4:45:00 AM
-slow clap- Awesome write! 7
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Date: 1/17/2015 8:36:00 AM
Thank you Lei...smiling at your comment...awesome! // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 4:23:00 PM
Wow you two now I need a cold shower! Light & Love
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Date: 1/17/2015 10:07:00 AM
So pleased you enjoyed, Debbie! Thank you!!!! Have a lovely weekend. // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 8:52:00 AM
Why did it end . . . more please!! Outstanding write by two of my favorite poets! cove love is hot! 7
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Date: 1/17/2015 9:31:00 AM
I love your comments, David...and the rating. So very pleased that you found this to your liking. All the best. // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 8:35:00 AM
This is an ooh la la to the moon and back. The two of you rocked this one Paul! 77777777777777777777777777777777, this should be poem of the day.
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Date: 1/17/2015 9:42:00 AM
I love your comments, Richard....and the multiple 7s:) Eileen too will like this! All the best my friend. // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 7:11:00 AM
love the imagery, love the beat, the rhymes, the mood.. ijust like it all. :)!! superb collaboration!
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Date: 1/17/2015 8:54:00 AM
...and I love your lovely comments Olive_eloi....they come in a lovely rhythm of their own! So pleased that you like it:) (You must be cooking...I can smell the tempting aroma!) hugs // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 2:49:00 AM
No question, I have to give this a '7'. What a superb story of love.
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Date: 1/17/2015 8:38:00 AM
Many thanks M.L. So glad that you enjoyed!:) Have a nice day! // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 11:10:00 PM
At a loss for words here, just such a beautiful poetic romantic poem! WOW !! Great collaboration you two!
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Date: 1/17/2015 8:34:00 AM
Thank you Arthur...your reaction says it all...no need for words! All the best. // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 8:29:00 PM
Congrats to both you amazing poets. This is a super 10 in my book! A top notch romantic write!!!!!!
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Date: 1/17/2015 8:23:00 AM
Many thanks Robert, both for the nice comments, wishes and top rating. So pleased that you enjoyed. Have a nice weekend. // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 7:46:00 PM
Wow Paul this is great story telling at it's romantic best congradulation's on such a fine piece of work here both of you, cheri I'm glad you enjoyed the poem I wrote for you, I hoped that you would your poem inspired it, cheri
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Date: 1/17/2015 8:21:00 AM
Thank you Cherl. Both Eileen and I found it easy to work on this romantic poem; I am glad that you too found it to your liking. Have a lovely day my friend. // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 6:05:00 PM
what a perfect collaboration! i should have guessed that it was eileen writing with you, paul. i love the way the point of view switched in the middle - it was an absolutely seamless transition. bravo to you both!
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Date: 1/17/2015 7:37:00 AM
Thank you Ilene! I always like the way you comment; I am sure Eileen will be pleased with your remarks, too. Have a nice weekend. // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 5:22:00 PM
Wow,Wow,Wow...an excellent write by two great poets!
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Date: 1/15/2015 9:52:00 AM
wowx3!!! I think that means you like Armand:) Thank you...Eileen will like that; perhaps you might be tempted to read it again on her post! Good day! // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 3:02:00 PM
Like a moth to a flame you seduce us with the imagination and passion of you words. You make good use of imagery and maintain a poetic flow through the whole piece. Emile.
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Date: 1/14/2015 4:13:00 PM
I love your comments, Emile...always insightful and to the point. Thank you. // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 2:32:00 PM
Outstanding... So beautiful ...the perfect romantic rendezvous.... A7 and fav
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Date: 1/14/2015 4:10:00 PM
Wow Tim! Thank you for the high rating and the fav!! So pleased that you have so enjoyed our combined effort...very meaningful coming from a fellow romantic! // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 2:32:00 PM
Oh lordy miss claudy Wow Wow Wow Eileen and Paul this is stunning - what romance - such sensual imagery and so filled with passion woohooooo - a 7 from me:-) Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 1/14/2015 4:02:00 PM
Hi Jan! From your comments I take it that you enjoyed:) Due praise I must give to Eileen who brings with her the joy of undiluted passion. Thank you for the high rating. hugs // paul

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