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The Day My Lover Left

A spiritual sickness enveloped my stagnant heart. I searched for her in darkened obscure visions, A futile illusory chase that led to a desert of love. Had I become addicted to her presence? Deep in my heart, I knew that all was distorted. I wondered if I really loved her, Yet I could not bear the loss, knowing her as I did. Finally, she disappeared from circulation, It left my strength sapped from a wide goose chase. Life trickled by slowly, as I lost my job, wasted my money, Rendering my situation an almost irreparable ruin and loss. Looking back, recollecting my bad choices It took me some time to discern the inevitable damage That rendered my skeletal life beyond repair. Could I renew and restore my affluent fortunes? Life had its ups and downs, like desert dunes. All I needed was a fertile oasis. Walking on the hot sand Was painful but I had to try. I began my journey anew. Will I ever learn? Who knows? One can only hope. After all, the desert is never endless though it may seem so.

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Date: 2/13/2024 4:50:00 AM
"All I needed was a fertile oasis. Walking on the hot sand Was painful but I had to try. I began my journey anew. Will I ever learn? Who knows? One can only hope. After all, the desert is never endless though it may seem so." Life is a search for something better. Even when we are thrown into an endless vastness of arid sands, we hope one day we will cross the boundaries of that blistering desert. This gives us the stamina to go on! Beautifully written dear Victor.
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Date: 2/12/2024 9:27:00 AM
Love the metaphor of the desert dunes!
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Date: 2/11/2024 6:44:00 PM
Wow! That’s quite the story. Still somehow you injected a bit of hope in the end. Not easy to do under such extreme circumstances. Well done Victor.
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Date: 2/11/2024 6:29:00 PM
wonderful, and creative images, when welove someone, ir lasts forever, thanks for the touching poem
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Date: 2/10/2024 1:27:00 PM
Yours is a well wrought tale of heartbreak and recovery, Victor. It's a pleasure to read this. I enjoyed the music very much, too. :)
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Date: 2/10/2024 10:02:00 AM
Your poem is a poignant exploration of human frailty, resilience, and the enduring quest for meaning and redemption. It invites readers to confront their own struggles and to find solace in the possibility of renewal, even amidst the harshest of landscapes...
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Date: 2/10/2024 6:51:00 AM
Wonderful writing, so emotive and heart wrenching. A detailed and vivid story. God bless you always, my friend. Love, Gina
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Date: 2/10/2024 4:25:00 AM
It devastates you and you and it can take a long time to get over it. Tom
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Date: 2/10/2024 4:14:00 AM
“ the desert is never endless although it may seem so” what a deep and meaningful line that is dear victor! I absolutely loved the alliterations in your opening lines and your wordplay and flow of lines throughout in such a soul stirring manner as always, you left us readers feeling the depth of what youv delivered. Brilliant write! Pleasure reading your work: sending you light
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Date: 2/10/2024 2:26:00 AM
Beautifully written, dear Victor; I felt the angst and the Hope as well in your concluding lines...After all, the desert is never endless though it may seem so. I love that. A fave for me...Hugs
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:36:00 PM
Deep well written poem. Never stop trying. Hugs
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Date: 2/9/2024 3:42:00 PM
thought provoking piece Victor, hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/9/2024 3:08:00 PM
I agree Victor the dessert is never endless though it may appear so when we lose our partner, and long lasting love of a lifetime. but I think your very brave to continue on, your poetry is brilliant and a great companion, you are blessed dear Victor :)
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Date: 2/9/2024 2:31:00 PM
Reminiscing in memories. A wonderful dialogue questing oasis of love. So well written, as always, Victor.
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Date: 2/9/2024 2:26:00 PM
She was your oasis, when she left you were lost in the desert, Powerful write Victor
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Date: 2/9/2024 2:12:00 PM
a thought-provoking and emotionally powerful poem, Victor. I appreciate the vulnerability in your words and extend respect to you for beginning your journey anew...takes a lot of strength, hope, and faith. I also liked the desert 'symbolism' and the 'fertile oasis.' Brilliant. Am faving. have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 2/9/2024 1:57:00 PM
I can feel the emotion in this one. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Time will heal all wounds if a person tries and maybe seeks some counseling provided it is needed. Sara K
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Date: 2/9/2024 12:06:00 PM
This is raw and tender. I like the vulnerability and the sense of optimism it ends with.
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Date: 2/9/2024 11:58:00 AM
"Walking on the hot sand was painful but I had to try." Even unrequited love reminds us we need to love, and be loved. "All I needed was a fertile oasis." I enjoyed reading your poignant poem, Victor, and the way it ended on a positive note. :)
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Date: 2/9/2024 11:32:00 AM
- He who does not dare ... will never win, it is said ... - A slightly sad poem, but ends with positivity and optimism :) - Have a lovely weekend, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 2/9/2024 11:27:00 AM
This is a powerful, well written poem. Thought provoking. I like how the desert is weaved into this :)
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Date: 2/9/2024 10:41:00 AM
Never give up. Your poem of lost love was intriguing. Thank you for this vignette that goes to the heart.
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