The Day I Showed My Red

Unlike the others in my family,
I rarely let emotions take control.
A temper tantrum they'd not see from me.
The "cool" one I was called. It's still my role.

I rarely get choked up by anything.
As one well-balanced, rarely ever do
I feel depressed, jealous, unforgiving
or guilty! (I don't sit around and stew).

I guess I see betrayal as a sin
that I abhor, for in my youth one day,
my best friend laid a trap and I fell in,
but it was not a too nice joke to play!

My best friend lured me on the telephone
to say the way I felt about Margo -
a girl whose reputation was well-known
as "bad girl," and she also was my foe.

This bad girl had a crush on the same guy
I liked, and he was my best friend's brother.
For his attention both Margo and I
would vie, so we didn't like each other!

My best friend had two phone lines. On the end
of one of them, she let my enemy
then listen in on me as my best friend
was getting my confessions out of me!

Dang Margo heard them all! And I saw red.
I slammed the phone down, and then down the street
I marched to my friend's house. I felt no dread.
But great hurt filled me. I would not retreat!

I pounded on my friend's door righteously
because I'd felt as if I had been slapped.
My mom, unused to such display from me,
was so impressed, when I got home, she clapped!

Nov 30, 2017
End Note: Margo got pregnant right out of junior high and
had to marry Danny. They were divorced a few years later!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 4/10/2018 7:23:00 PM
A fun read, Andrea. I think many of us had similar adventures growing up. One senior girl loved to mercilessly tease me, called me the most inappropriate names as I was only 12 - when she got pregnant during the school year, those names suited her just fine. So many bullies in the world. Nice to see a few get what they deserve.
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Date: 12/15/2017 11:08:00 PM
Best wishes and congratulations on your win, Andrea - keep up the great work! :-)
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Date: 12/7/2017 10:54:00 AM
So many lessons here... even, with age, humility. ;-)
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Date: 12/5/2017 6:39:00 PM
Such intresting story and equally awesome depiction...I loved it...
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Date: 12/4/2017 7:52:00 PM
A very captivating story impressively written in a very creative form. A superb quatrain my dear friend, Andrea. I enjoyed a lot. Thanks and Congrats! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 12/4/2017 12:19:00 PM
What a great story!!
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Date: 12/3/2017 5:24:00 PM
We have a saying here in Yorkshire Andrea " there nothing as queer as folk" and your wonderful poem, goes a long way down the way to prove that....and one day when i settle down, i have heaps of your poetry to read...truly looking forward to that..just trying to say i have not forgot you .
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/3/2017 5:26:00 PM
awww thanks, you are so sweet. You might need a whole week to read all my poems that are here!
Date: 12/3/2017 3:19:00 AM
This is good, often is better not to be silent, speak up for whats right! Loved this!
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Date: 12/3/2017 12:01:00 AM
I'm enthralled and oh so curious as to what prompted this tell from our teenage time when we did many pranks from phone lines. I feel 15 again, maybe I'll stay right here. So, great poem, a gift to me: I now see an upside to 3 high schools in 3 states, but one name: new girl. Again, curious, did you forgive her? Was it a small town thing? You've turned me on with this blast from teenage female ego held in our past! I have so many questions about never moving while growing up. Love .. Ms. Curious
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/3/2017 4:33:00 PM
Yes, I forgave her. Both she and Margo got married young and could not finish school. I lived in a normal sized small city with two junior high schools . We were in the 'better" school, but Margo was the epitome of bad girl. She was a friend of mine in elementary school and told me all about the birds and the bees (what I did not already know) hahaha My " best" friend from junior high is still with me on FB but we rarely talk. She is very busy with her own life and ended up having a lovely life and very nice second husband!!
Date: 12/2/2017 9:42:00 AM
Great story, Andrea. We've all got that breaking point.. sometimes it just takes someone pushing exactly the right buttons to set us off! Regards, John.
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Date: 12/1/2017 11:05:00 PM
Wonderful storytelling. Love it, Andrea.
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Date: 12/1/2017 2:20:00 PM
How creative to be able to retell a real life story in poetry. A marvellous quatrain. A Fav.
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Date: 12/1/2017 8:07:00 AM
Love this :) Congratulations on your win! xomo
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Date: 12/1/2017 7:13:00 AM
Your strength comes out in your words Andrea, congratulations
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Date: 12/1/2017 5:43:00 AM
Righteous indignation Andrea, sometimes you just have to stand up for yourself and what you believe. Not meaning to make light of your hurt but it makes me smile to picture you at age 12 or 13 storming down the street.
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Date: 11/30/2017 9:29:00 PM
She was more like an enemy...she was lucky to be forgiven..
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Date: 11/30/2017 8:21:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea, I loved where this story went, great write.
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Date: 11/30/2017 2:59:00 PM
I enjoyed reading that. Thanks for publishing!
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Date: 11/30/2017 1:05:00 PM
seems you live by a code as do I, nice story, one to learn from
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Date: 11/30/2017 12:48:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this story--well written, Andrea!
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Date: 11/30/2017 12:02:00 PM
Good for your Mom! I would have seen red too. Great rhymed story telling Andrea...
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Date: 11/30/2017 11:59:00 AM
good for you! it's great to let those feelings out once in a while. well told! (i guess you weren't "best friends" after that...)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/30/2017 12:29:00 PM
actually, we stayed very good friends, Ilene. I am a forgiving person. She left school, however , at age 14 to get married and I babysat her baby a few times!
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