The Darkness At Noon

She's on her way going back to a room.
From a long journey since morn.
She went to church and prayed harder.
Then she baught a gift for a daughter's birthday.

It's been five months now since an angel lost her wings.
In an illness that a young body can't conquer.
Nights and days, weeks and months...
She fights the light to remain on sight.

Too many times that her heartbeats get weak.
Life support is the only thing that's left.
To suspend the day of a coming death,
And fade the little hope they all seek.

Moving so fast she saw the open door,
Doctors and nurses are reviving a soul.
Breathless and fainted little one,
Is now waving a hand of good-bye.

Tears fell like a river from her eyes.
The entire room gets darker as she arrived.
The clouds turned gray that afternoon.
The heaven cries for a lost of angel's soul.






written :     4/21/2014
entry for:   Dr. Ram Mehta's Darkness at Noon Poetry Contest

*1st Place Winner
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
May 16, 2014 at 12:57 AM
CONGRATULATIONS AIYAH.. :D!!!! sad tragic love story... the sory and the ambiance well-written both displayed darkness in the afternoon.. :D!, Proud of you... :D!!!, GBU olive eloisa here.. (yung cv :O)?
Torres Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 9:18 AM
Thanks sweet Eloisa... I appeciate your time reading and leaving my poem a great reward!! ..(the cv... I'll send it again.. hehe. soupmail.)
Dietrich Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 8:21 PM
aha, I predicted right, didn't I? Big congrats, my friend.
Torres Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 9:08 AM
Yes.. you predicted it RIGHT!!!! haha,,, Thanks Andrea!!! :O))
Nance Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 6:48 PM
Beautiful and sad, What a great poem and well deserved win.
Torres Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 9:13 AM
Thanks a lot, Casarah~!~! :O))
Callus Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 6:15 PM
A very heartfelt write, AiyaH; touched my soul...how sad! // congrats on your top podium:) // paul
Torres Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 9:12 AM
Thanks a lot, Paul for an overwhelming comment... ^_^ XOXO
Smith Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 3:02 PM
I don't know how I missed this gem...congrats on your first place win....you deserve it ...hugs Tim
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 3:05 PM
THANK YOU, TIM!!!! maybe you're just busy writing down or dreaming for a woman in your fantasy .. lol. Thanks again for dropppign by... ^_^
Lucas Mcclure Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 1:22 PM
Congratulations on yur first place win with this amazing poem Lori
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 3:07 PM
Oh Lori.. Thanks sweetie for your time stopping by my poem... You are much appreciated,, :O)) hugs and love.. ^_^
A. Sharma Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 11:32 AM
Extremely sad perfect to the theme Aiyah ! Congrats on wonderful write n a great top win !
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 3:10 PM
a million thanks to you, Dr. Upma... I treasure your time valuing my poem... Loves you a lot... Aiyah.. ^_^
Mehta Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 10:03 AM
Thanks for your support and congrats on a win in my poem, Aiyah
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 10:56 AM
Thank you so much, Dr. Ram for the placement of my poem in your contest!! :O) I'm so honoured to be part of it... ^_^
Andresen Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 8:21 AM
- Congratulations on your wonderful winning poem, my dear friend AiyaH ! - Well deserved! - (I have not participated in the contest for a while - like writing whatever comes to my mind.) - Have a nice day. - Be proud of your write :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 9:23 AM
Sure I am, Anne... I'm so proud to be one of Dr. Ram's Contest winners..!!! Thank you for this wonderful comment.. ^_^ I feel so loved!! ... :O)
Johnson Avatar
April 25, 2014 at 9:29 AM
You have done a great job with the theme. Good luck in the contest and thank you for your kind comments. Love, Joyce
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 9:20 AM
Thank you so much, Joyce for this wonderful message.. :O)0
Tacito Avatar
April 23, 2014 at 11:58 PM
You nailed the darkened vibe so well with this writing. This hit quite hard.
Torres Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 9:19 AM
Thank you ,Dear Drake!!! :O))
Allison Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 12:32 PM
Oh such a heartfelt and emotional write brought tears to my eyes. Hugs Jan
Torres Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 12:35 PM
Hey Jan.. sorry if it made you cry! ..:"O(( thank you so much!! ..we all hate death and loss...
Ponce Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 4:33 AM
This is an example of those gut-wrenching truths that go unnoticed every single day. Thanks for putting them into words and making the world realize.
Torres Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 7:34 AM
HI Jake... Thank you man for this wondeful message you left on my land... it such a pleasure to see your wisdom on my poem!!! Thanks a Lot!! ^__^
Vaso Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 9:06 PM
Beautiful, no words can explain better than what you just did!
Torres Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 7:33 AM
Hi Arthur... oh what a big honor forme to be visited by the most talented person/poet here in PS!!!.. THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! :O))
Dietrich Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 6:32 PM
wow, I LOVE what you did with the theme. This is really a good story and sure to sail high to the top of the winners list!!
Torres Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 7:32 AM
OOOhhh.. this is too much, Andie... :'(( I'm overwhelmed!!! thank you ! thank you so much!!.. you know what?! .. you are not just beautiful... YOU ARE AWESOME..in your words, deeds, and thoughts! .. I love you sweetie ,Andie!!! *$*
George Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 4:03 PM
please, do not cry! within these eyes I could lose my soul and not about my soul I would care but about the tears of these eyes within which my soul might lose itself…..
Torres Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 7:20 AM
no matter how hard we cry... we couldn't return the life of our loved ones... instead, let us live w/ the promise of eternal life.. that soon will come unto us... w/ all his promise... let us have faith... that one day, He will rise and call those who sleep in death...:O)) thanks for the visit and comment, George!! My honor to have you on my land.. my secret paradise... ^_^
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