The Darkness At Noon

She's on her way going back to a room.
From a long journey since morn.
She went to church and prayed harder.
Then she baught a gift for a daughter's birthday.

It's been five months now since an angel lost her wings.
In an illness that a young body can't conquer.
Nights and days, weeks and months...
She fights the light to remain on sight.

Too many times that her heartbeats get weak.
Life support is the only thing that's left.
To suspend the day of a coming death,
And fade the little hope they all seek.

Moving so fast she saw the open door,
Doctors and nurses are reviving a soul.
Breathless and fainted little one,
Is now waving a hand of good-bye.

Tears fell like a river from her eyes.
The entire room gets darker as she arrived.
The clouds turned gray that afternoon.
The heaven cries for a lost of angel's soul.






written :     4/21/2014
entry for:   Dr. Ram Mehta's Darkness at Noon Poetry Contest

*1st Place Winner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 5/16/2014 12:57:00 AM
CONGRATULATIONS AIYAH.. :D!!!! sad tragic love story... the sory and the ambiance well-written both displayed darkness in the afternoon.. :D!, Proud of you... :D!!!, GBU olive eloisa here.. (yung cv :O)?
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/19/2014 9:18:00 AM
Thanks sweet Eloisa... I appeciate your time reading and leaving my poem a great reward!! ..(the cv... I'll send it again.. hehe. soupmail.)
Date: 5/15/2014 8:21:00 PM
aha, I predicted right, didn't I? Big congrats, my friend.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/19/2014 9:08:00 AM
Yes.. you predicted it RIGHT!!!! haha,,, Thanks Andrea!!! :O))
Date: 5/15/2014 6:48:00 PM
Beautiful and sad, What a great poem and well deserved win.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/19/2014 9:13:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Casarah~!~! :O))
Date: 5/15/2014 6:15:00 PM
A very heartfelt write, AiyaH; touched my soul...how sad! // congrats on your top podium:) // paul
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/19/2014 9:12:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Paul for an overwhelming comment... ^_^ XOXO
Date: 5/15/2014 3:02:00 PM
I don't know how I missed this gem...congrats on your first place win....you deserve it ...hugs Tim
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 3:05:00 PM
THANK YOU, TIM!!!! maybe you're just busy writing down or dreaming for a woman in your fantasy .. lol. Thanks again for dropppign by... ^_^
Date: 5/15/2014 1:22:00 PM
Congratulations on yur first place win with this amazing poem Lori
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 3:07:00 PM
Oh Lori.. Thanks sweetie for your time stopping by my poem... You are much appreciated,, :O)) hugs and love.. ^_^
Date: 5/15/2014 11:32:00 AM
Extremely sad perfect to the theme Aiyah ! Congrats on wonderful write n a great top win !
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 3:10:00 PM
a million thanks to you, Dr. Upma... I treasure your time valuing my poem... Loves you a lot... Aiyah.. ^_^
Date: 5/15/2014 10:03:00 AM
Thanks for your support and congrats on a win in my poem, Aiyah
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 10:56:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dr. Ram for the placement of my poem in your contest!! :O) I'm so honoured to be part of it... ^_^
Date: 5/15/2014 8:21:00 AM
- Congratulations on your wonderful winning poem, my dear friend AiyaH ! - Well deserved! - (I have not participated in the contest for a while - like writing whatever comes to my mind.) - Have a nice day. - Be proud of your write :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 9:23:00 AM
Sure I am, Anne... I'm so proud to be one of Dr. Ram's Contest winners..!!! Thank you for this wonderful comment.. ^_^ I feel so loved!! ... :O)
Date: 4/25/2014 9:29:00 AM
You have done a great job with the theme. Good luck in the contest and thank you for your kind comments. Love, Joyce
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 9:20:00 AM
Thank you so much, Joyce for this wonderful message.. :O)0
Date: 4/23/2014 11:58:00 PM
You nailed the darkened vibe so well with this writing. This hit quite hard.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 5/15/2014 9:19:00 AM
Thank you ,Dear Drake!!! :O))
Date: 4/22/2014 12:32:00 PM
Oh such a heartfelt and emotional write brought tears to my eyes. Hugs Jan
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/22/2014 12:35:00 PM
Hey Jan.. sorry if it made you cry! ..:"O(( thank you so much!! ..we all hate death and loss...
Date: 4/22/2014 4:33:00 AM
This is an example of those gut-wrenching truths that go unnoticed every single day. Thanks for putting them into words and making the world realize.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/22/2014 7:34:00 AM
HI Jake... Thank you man for this wondeful message you left on my land... it such a pleasure to see your wisdom on my poem!!! Thanks a Lot!! ^__^
Date: 4/21/2014 9:06:00 PM
Beautiful, no words can explain better than what you just did!
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/22/2014 7:33:00 AM
Hi Arthur... oh what a big honor forme to be visited by the most talented person/poet here in PS!!!.. THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! :O))
Date: 4/21/2014 6:32:00 PM
wow, I LOVE what you did with the theme. This is really a good story and sure to sail high to the top of the winners list!!
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/22/2014 7:32:00 AM
OOOhhh.. this is too much, Andie... :'(( I'm overwhelmed!!! thank you ! thank you so much!!.. you know what?! .. you are not just beautiful... YOU ARE AWESOME..in your words, deeds, and thoughts! .. I love you sweetie ,Andie!!! *$*
Date: 4/21/2014 4:03:00 PM
please, do not cry! within these eyes I could lose my soul and not about my soul I would care but about the tears of these eyes within which my soul might lose itself…..
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Date: 4/22/2014 7:20:00 AM
no matter how hard we cry... we couldn't return the life of our loved ones... instead, let us live w/ the promise of eternal life.. that soon will come unto us... w/ all his promise... let us have faith... that one day, He will rise and call those who sleep in death...:O)) thanks for the visit and comment, George!! My honor to have you on my land.. my secret paradise... ^_^
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