Caleah Buil Poet Elegy

The Darkest Day

Burning eyes, I cannot believe I'm alive
Smoke fills the air and it makes me so scared
My brain is cloudy and slow, and I see myself upside down on the ground
People are screaming, I hear loud crashing
Everything begins falling
I know I won't make it out alive.
The building is breaking the whole place is shaking
And I get up to run for my life
My hands scraped and bloodied, my skirt, torn. 
There's no time to mourn.
My hair is matted and wet, and I crash into a person I had just met
Making my way down the stairs, I think about how this is all unfair.
In that split second there's another BOOM 
And impact
Throws me down to my doom.
But a hand grabs me and pulls me up,
I would say something but I can hardly gulp.
I can't see and my savior leads me.
There's a ringing in one ear, but none in my other.
I scream in frustration, and my vision goes under.
Deep darkness overwhelms me.
There is pain in my arms and I just want to leave
Leave this chaos of a world, this place where the smoke curls and whirls.
My body shuts down as I slowly fall on the ground and my life flashes before my eyes.
But it is okay. This is all I can take
And then I hear sirens and people.
I smile at them because I know it is too late.
I close my eyes then. This was the end.
I see the light and I give up the fight.

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Richard Lamoureux May 13, 2013 at 8:47 AM Without reading Im's comment I had thought this was about 911. This shows what an effective communicator you are. Caleah Buil May 13, 2013 at 9:29 AM I wanted to be able to convey these emotions in here, and am glad that they were expressed correctly! Thanks you!

Timothy Hicks May 10, 2013 at 11:30 PM What happened on the day of 9/11 was one of the most appalling crimes ever to happen in recent history - some don't even know the extent of HOW appalling. I've written a very long poem about it... but it's probably not what you expect. Maybe I should post it soon... Caleah Buil May 12, 2013 at 1:24 PM It was absolutely tragic. This is only a TOUCH what I can only imagine what happened. I'm sure nothing even remotely close. I'd love to read your take on it. Post away!!

Timothy Hicks May 6, 2013 at 11:22 PM Extremely vivid, Caleah! I love when I get so immersed into a story/poem that I forget there's even rhymes involved (or the fact that I'm reading at all). This makes me think of a chaotic explosion where so much is happening it's impossible to keep track of it all... VERY nicely done! Caleah Buil May 10, 2013 at 11:38 AM Thank you! :) It's for the 9\11 tragedy... :\

Andrea Dietrich February 11, 2013 at 9:00 PM wow, this really puts you RIGHT There. I imagine it was someone dying at the Towers. Very well done. It grabs the reader until its sad end. And yet I love that they went to the light. Caleah Buil February 12, 2013 at 8:39 AM Yes! It was that exactly. Of the 9\11 time. It is extremely sad, and I just pictured how someone would feel at that time.

Poet Destroyer A February 11, 2013 at 8:57 PM Hello Caleah, wow..I've been burned by these tears in the past.. it is sad to read you give up to easily... love the strong emotions you explode here on your light poem... enjoyed~ LINDA Caleah Buil February 12, 2013 at 8:48 AM Hi, thank u so much. I was trying to imagine how I would feel of the hopelessness of the people during the 9\11 attack. And I know some people would just give up even though they were so close...