The Dance Hall Girl

I'm standing here in limbo as 

I see him wander in.

That no townsman has warned him

is truly a mortal sin.

 

He slides up to the bar and 

takes a curious look around.

He orders a shot of whiskey.

No one else has made a sound.



The barman just ignores him 

as he has the others here,

and keeps on mopping up the bar

as I try to wipe a tear.



I still have strong emotions

with no way to express them.

I don't know about the others.

They all look like wooden chess men.



When that dying gunman hexed us

with that evil, malevolent curse,

he didn't doom us all to death's call

but with something even worse.



He said we'd stay almost forever,

exactly as we were right then,

until some day, some one would free us.

But he didn't tell us when.



I'm a dance hall girl who hasn't danced

for lo these many years.

I just stay as frightened as I was then

as I try to wipe my tears.



I see the stranger stiffen

as he searches for some cash.

He'll reach for it forever.

The spell has hit him in a flash.



So I know he's not the one

who can break the wicked spell.

We'll keep doing what we're doing,

but I guess its just as well.



For the only one who'll walk out

of this doomed saloon alive,

is the hombre who can break the spell

that keeps us in this dive.



When the spell has been broken 

we will all be turned to dust,

and be blown to Earth's corners

with the wind's first heavy gust.



For town of Rotgut contest.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014


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Date: 8/12/2014 11:13:00 AM
Great write, Joyce. Congrats. Nice going. xxxRalph
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Date: 8/11/2014 3:05:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/11/2014 4:04:00 AM
Wow thats lovely Joyce! congrats on huge win!
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Date: 8/11/2014 12:47:00 AM
Very well done, and an original take. This one had my top vote.
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Date: 8/10/2014 8:32:00 PM
Joyce, a lovely story of the rotgut girl. congrats for fine win. Mohan
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Date: 8/10/2014 6:58:00 PM
Ow wow congrats Joyce
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Date: 8/10/2014 4:36:00 PM
Grats on your win!!! Well done!!!
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Date: 8/10/2014 3:00:00 PM
This is a wonderful twist on the contest, Joyce. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/10/2014 2:27:00 PM
Fine win !!! Congrats on this win....
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Date: 8/10/2014 1:29:00 PM
You gave this damsel a good hearted reason for being part of the wild-west,.....what a great twist to the contest! Well done, Joyce!
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Date: 8/10/2014 12:50:00 PM
Congratulations on a great win, Joyce - I had a good time reading this well-written piece! Pandita
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Date: 8/10/2014 10:53:00 AM
A great tale, Joyce. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 8/10/2014 10:28:00 AM
Congratulations on the win! Well done.
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Date: 8/10/2014 10:24:00 AM
A very unique write for the contest, congrats, Joyce
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Date: 8/10/2014 9:43:00 AM
Unique take on the theme - congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/1/2014 6:40:00 AM
Uniquely different entry..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..Thanks for the visit to let me know that I placed in the contest..Sara
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Date: 7/29/2014 5:58:00 PM
This is a truly wonderful imaginative and great write my friend. Classy and strong!!!!
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Joyce Johnson
Date: 7/29/2014 7:31:00 PM
Thank you Robert. I am so pleased that you liked it. Love, Joyce
Date: 7/29/2014 12:08:00 PM
Dear Joyce, You took a fanciful theme and created a poignant, meaningful poem that gave me chills. May you never lose your edge or be caught in the Rotgutt Saloon! Surely this will be a winner, dear. Love you, Carolyn
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Joyce Johnson
Date: 7/29/2014 1:16:00 PM
Thank you Carolyn for reading and commenting. It was quite a different effort for me. I always appreciated your input. Love, Joyce
Date: 7/28/2014 4:34:00 PM
Wow! that is great!! Gave me the chills, what a terrific piece of the story, I hope it tops the winners list!!!
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Joyce Johnson
Date: 7/28/2014 5:04:00 PM
Thank you Casarah. that is nice of you. Love, Joyce
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