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For John Lawless's There is a darknes poetry contest.

I never asked to be born, so these sins leave me torn, between living and dying. I'm laughing, but begin crying, because I've lost all affection for my mirror's reflection. You think... I'm just a psychopath, as you don't understand my wrath. Such judgement, leads me on a warpath, as voices tell me to start a bloodbath! These pills offer no remedy, so my heart's not beating steadily. so, I stab the world and let it bleed. Hey death, increase your speed, avenging angels have been freed, and I'm not one who's gonna plead. Damning demons provoke my mind, to behave in ways that aren't kind. Revenge will turn one blind, when fate has been sealed and signed. I can't leave retribution behind, as forgiveness has been declined. Destiny calls my name loudly, Satan claims I've sinned madly, hounds of hell devour me badly. I'll give you my soul gladly, keep on smiling sadly and accept my fate proudly..

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Bill Baker

Date: 2/12/2024 9:12:00 PM

Excellent poem for the contest, Silent One. This should rank high in the contest. It speaks of your talent as a poet to be able take express with passion, both sides of the coin, my friend. Excellent poetry. Have a great week! Bill

Joe Maverick

Date: 2/12/2024 10:35:00 AM

Its more simple than you perhaps think Si? Have you ever wished..You could take on a New life, new address new name just wave to People find a hobby/job do some fishing and Just live a simple life?? Hold that thought.. And consider a new life in Jesus..' enjoyed The read, God bless.!! PS I have been under that hard reasoning condemnation Si..You Struck a chord with me..What can I lose by Reaching out.!!

Joe Maverick
Date: 2/15/2024 8:00:00 AM

Well its dammed if you do..? Dammed if you don't.. Er won't I suppose? But to the end (Only heaven knows) applogies On any oversight btw Si.' I love The thank you.. smiles..) All the best In all events!

Silent One
Date: 2/12/2024 12:57:00 PM

This poem isn't about me...its for s contest..I'm very happy with my life, thank you

Hiya Sharma

Date: 2/11/2024 2:03:00 AM

Sigh.. This made me tear up.. I've been through onyx waves that slice like blades. When one's soul sees no purpose and each moment feels heavier and more cruel than death. Your dark poems really give goosebumps and just hit the heart..The emotions that you've expressed here are painstaking and soul-wrenching, dear Silent One..Still, your poetic artistry shines through, with vivid descriptions, rhymes and alliteration.So poignantly crafted, especially "I never asked to be born..sins leave me torn

Hiya Sharma
Date: 2/11/2024 2:05:00 AM

"I'm just a psychopath,as you don't understand my wrath", "Revenge will turn one blind..fate has been sealed and signed", "Satan claims I've sinned madly" Gosh, this is impeccable.. As always, so wondrous and creative as well. Best of luck for the contest, sending light too!

Tonye George

Date: 2/10/2024 2:58:00 PM

It's okay to watch and let the world bleed sometimes. I honestly love the end ryhmes. Don't let the haunt stop you, maybe you should return the favour. Lovely one as always silent.

Tonye George
Date: 2/11/2024 12:41:00 PM

By haunting back, dear silent, cheers.

Silent One
Date: 2/10/2024 3:30:00 PM

Return the favour?

Karen Jones

Date: 2/9/2024 7:03:00 PM

Wow you capture the angst and pain of the challenge of dealing with darkness! What a great writer you are! Good luck in the contest!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/9/2024 6:11:00 AM

Sounds like what my dear nephew dealt with. He sang a haunting song on Facebook, a suicide letter, then he got better, then the pandemic… You have spoken for many an imprisoned soul. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2024 1:33:00 PM

wow, dark indeed. Love how you did that challenge, Silent one. If it were my contest, I would rank this one high.

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/8/2024 12:30:00 PM

Dear friend SO, Your poetic prowess shines brilliantly through your masterful composition, effortlessly juggling between romance and drama. In my modest estimation, you are an authentic artisan of language, exemplifying both skill and humility, despite your potential dissent.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/8/2024 10:16:00 AM

There's no pride in letting any devil take the upper hand. Yet I'm sure this is fiction.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 2/8/2024 9:17:00 AM

oh, wow. So scary. Sure this isn't really your fate. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 2/8/2024 4:31:00 AM

I am glad that this poem is for a darkness poetry contest :-) Have a nice day lovely Silent One ~ AA

Maria Williams

Date: 2/8/2024 2:20:00 AM

A bit of a dark one, dear S1; however, I know it's not about you. A creative poem, rhyming flows really well, and you show your versatility in writing from romantic to dramatic excellently. In my humble opinion, you are a true Wordsmith, and a humble one, too, because I know you'll disagree, but you are. Hugs

Valsa George

Date: 2/7/2024 8:13:00 PM

This is indeed dark poetry of the best kind . Beautiful rhyming too...! This story of the man falling into the pit of darkness doesn't feel the need for regeneration. That's the worst part of it! Silent One, you can write poems of any sort. Appreciate your remarkable skill, dear friend.

Tom Woody

Date: 2/7/2024 5:14:00 PM

This is someone on the verge of lashing out, perhaps a school shooter or some other madman. Beware the hounds of hell... Yipe!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/7/2024 4:57:00 PM

you do 'dark' quite well...your rhymes are intense and vivid....and you told the story well! best wishes with the contest, Sara

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 2/7/2024 3:35:00 PM

Hi Silent One, This is definitely influenced by the fallen angel Lucifer. The rhymes are amazing and in spite of his professing to be from the dark side, there is some thing a little amusing. I guess it's because we know it's not you of course.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/7/2024 2:39:00 PM

wow I got chills S, you do dark as easily as moon does night, a riveted poem that should do very well in the contest of dark, :)

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/7/2024 1:30:00 PM

This provides an insight into the mind of a troubled soul. They say some trouble exists in everyone. There are a lot of problems associated with aging and you cover those with clarity and directness. I also note the acceptance from this individual. I love the honor at the end. What more do we need?

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 2/7/2024 12:13:00 PM

Well now, If I didn't know this was just for a competition, (I hope), I would start worrying. So powerful and emotion-packed, my friend. A true winner.

Silent One
Date: 2/7/2024 12:29:00 PM

Thanks Jerry, no it is not about me... I do write a lot of dark poems though, not really posted on here...

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/7/2024 11:53:00 AM

WOW!!! What a powerful write. I hope it is just a write and not true. You tell great stories. Have a wonderful day.......................

Ink Empress

Date: 2/7/2024 8:51:00 AM

Brilliant rhymes throughout, as can see from comments already, your words are soul hitting and powerful. And youv described and delved deep into the abyss where darkness floats, leaving an introspective touch to your word weaving. Im a bit excited to see this contest up and you are one of those that can write dark very well, you always did. Sins and satan and not liking the reflection and being regarded or placed with labels such as “ psychopath” is deeply moving and poignant! I love the ending

Ink Empress
Date: 2/7/2024 8:52:00 AM

“ Damning demons provoke my mind, to behave in ways that aren't kind. Revenge will turn one blind, when fate has been sealed and signed.” whoa! Ah i know so many that battle with demons in their mind and ofcourse when triggered they would act in unkind ways. Some are like walking breathing triggers for those with mental health problems too! Pleasure reading your work. Best wishes for the contest.

Aqua Marine

Date: 2/7/2024 7:11:00 AM

As said in Daniel's comments, "it takes immense courage to be so vulnerable, to lay bare, to be so vulnerable... I too also cannot shy away from my" dark side... " There is no judgment here for invisible wounds inflicted undeservedly... Yet Satan and his demons are" hellbent" on gaslighting good hearted individuals to believe they are not worthy of life. False friends did that to Job. Yet he refused to give up his integrity. At heart, he knew he had done his utmost. He was heard.(((Warm Hugs)))

Aqua Marine
Date: 2/7/2024 7:21:00 AM

You speak to those hearts who feel the same, felt the same... I remember a saying that got me up and going time and time again. "The bottom floor has a basement. But the basement has stairs. To the upper floors." I know I went up and down those stairs quite a few times... (((Warm Regards.))) Aqua M

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/7/2024 6:31:00 AM

Dearest Silent One, Wow,you threaded together themes of pain, anger, and despair with a disturbing beauty. A contest winner in my book. This isn't an easy poem to read, but that's exactly what makes it so powerful. It confronts difficult emotions head-on, refusing to shy away from the darker aspects of the human experience. The internal battle you depict, the warpath triggered by judgment, the cry for release – it all feels painfully too real and deeply human.

Daniel Henry Rodgers
Date: 2/7/2024 6:33:00 AM

While I don't know your personal story, your poem allows me to glimpse a world shaded in gray, where lines between victim and villain blur. The voices urging you towards destruction, the pills failing to numb the pain, the acceptance of a seemingly preordained fate – these are heavy burdens to carry. I won't pretend to understand everything you're expressing, but I do want to validate the pain and the struggle present in your words. It takes immense courage to be so vulnerable, to lay bare such raw emotions, and I commend you for that. That is what makes you a Great Poet. A FAV!- Blessings my Friend, Daniel