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The commuter

You see the sunlight amongst the scree There was a man who couldn't tell me anything Where there was once the comfort of the evenings telegraph line he runs wild amongst shops turned into flatlets Keep on a straight line he has changed his mind where once basson roamed he guesses himself unfree fortitude follows the wind

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Date: 2/8/2024 7:50:00 AM
Your poem captivated me with its stark imagery and unspoken narrative. The tension between past comforts and modern disconnection was relatable, from the sunlight amidst grit to the man's silent struggle navigating a changing cityscape. His unvoiced thoughts and unmoored spirit, captured in your lines, left me pondering resilience in uncertainty. The final line seems hopeful, suggesting an unwavering spirit despite life's unpredictable currents. Great Read! - Blessings, Daniel
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Antony Glaser
Date: 2/8/2024 8:09:00 AM
Thanks this is about the chances of south croydon, england. I was torn between telegraph line / reader The communal suited commuter has gone

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