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The Coming Storm

Standing outside, I could sense it coming like before. The air thick, still, birds stopped singing. The sky, a jaundiced yellow, a sickly color about to run its course. Always wondering "will this be the funnel cloud that takes everything away?" Frantically, I've tried to fill a tiny bucket list I made just for her: Picnics to remember Special photos framed Comfort meals from her past Sounds of her great grandchildren squeeling at their birthday parties I love you's more frequent than before The last storm, the third we've faced, had outcomes we were familiar with- Tree limbs down Electric lines dangling Power out But we were lucky, neighbors helped with clean-up, power was restored, we could get around, just a little slower. Now I feel it coming again, that same sickly yellow. I busy myself with household distractions- Move the pictures on the wall Write this poem Shuffle my mementos Something catches my ear- A few heavy raindrops Begin To Fall Moms had another stroke 02/09/14 © All Rights Reserved

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Date: 1/11/2022 10:15:00 AM
James, I've read through a lot of your stuff up to this point. Myself, being from NE Texas, a person can understand why this piece got my attention. You are very good at this, a unique style, you produce gripping free verse - you're a very impactful writer, it appears, in all genres - thanks for sharing that talent.
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Mark Massey
Date: 1/11/2022 2:00:00 PM
Exceptional write and perfectly expressed. I wish you and your mother well - 3 strokes and 92 years is a feat in itself. We just placed my wife's mom in an assisted living facility about a mile from our home. She faded quickly after the death of one of her sons this past summer. She's 87 and will probably out live us all. Thanks again James
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 1/11/2022 12:46:00 PM
Thanks Mark, this poem is allegorically time-lining mom's 3 strokes...(she's doing good at 92!)
Date: 7/10/2017 6:40:00 PM
Storm inner n outer truly picturised.imagery is befitting.Storms can be so destrctive anyways rain started falling.
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Date: 2/18/2014 5:54:00 AM
yes, the sky does turn that jaundiced yellow before a storm, doesn't it? I think this is a very well written piece; quite unusual, good attention to detail and some effective descriptions; I would say this is definitely free verse (and good free verse!) :)
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 2/18/2014 6:19:00 AM
thanks Charlotte, categories sometimes confuse me...jimbo
Date: 2/13/2014 5:04:00 PM
This snagged my heart a bit......knowing you must be speaking of (perhaps)..your mother, and preparing for whatever might make it easier! My wish is that those storms only bring the pleasant sound of spring. :) (I do really love this poem)....
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Date: 2/10/2014 7:20:00 AM
We have had a few tornados to pass by our home but so far they were just damaging to trees..It is a scary time when it happens..It is getting close to that time of year again..Great impressive work about the event..Doris' husband's brother(her husband was a triplet birth and it was one of the triplets) was killed in a tornado a few years ago..Those inner storms can be just as hard..Sara
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Date: 2/9/2014 11:47:00 PM
Ahhhh....those inner storms can be devastating....We try to weather the storm as best we can.. Very moving write, Jim.
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Date: 2/9/2014 10:43:00 PM
Wow James! This is deep and so creatively pulled off. I love the parallelism between the physical storm and emotional storm. When the storm warning goes off, the best one can do is prepare well for it and try cushioning all those who might be affected by it. Very well penned!
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Date: 2/9/2014 5:16:00 PM
A very descriptive poem.
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