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The Clock it Mocks

Left out in the cold Silent night; my jilted star That once blazed in cherish across her world That once lit up her heart and twinkled her toes Now, no longer glows Once; upon a long time ago A memory now of old forgotten times A star now in decline It lies there – dead A death star now exploding into Supernova’s Of hope Hoping against useless hopelessness That bleeds you to the core when Drowning in repetitive Wonderment To choking on what could have, should have Been Before Him… Before. It was just Us Her hands, I clearly see, frozen in pantomime Of words unsaid They spilled across the floor like a whore His smell upon our bed Insanity climbing through my head It spreads, like a disease Only time can purge Only the clock It mocks Tick tock Tick tock… "Write me sad" 11 September 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/30/2014 5:27:00 AM
This is really, really good Mark. Congratulations on your well deserved win.
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Date: 10/29/2014 10:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Mark.
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Date: 10/29/2014 7:42:00 PM
a very touching write many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/29/2014 7:38:00 PM
this one had an immediate impact on me, and it doesn't surprise me to discover that it's one of yours, as you know I really like your poetry...I loved those opening lines, and I also liked the sprinkling of internal rhyme, and the end rhyme you used - great title too! congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 10/11/2014 6:30:00 PM
This is a free verse write that truly excels . Has the flavor, the raw emotion and the images to make a sad but bold statement. I rarely fav free verse but this I add to my fav list and am honored to do so. If it was rejected that was a pure travesty. Super 7 I give..
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Mark Trichet
Date: 10/11/2014 9:50:00 PM
Hey thanks Robert, your kind words are inspiring and I'll cherish them. I unfortunately missed out on getting this into the contest! Thanks for the visit
Date: 10/10/2014 10:45:00 PM
wow, another very good one here. I see that it was in the rejection contest and yet I see no congratulations down here. If that contest got judged and you were not a winner, it's a travesty. Your writing is very well honed. I don't normally care for the way many poets write their free verse. You are someone whose free verse I would want to read again and again. A new fave poet for me. I noticed I had already seen a few of your other poems earlier and they too were superlative.
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Mark Trichet
Date: 10/11/2014 9:48:00 PM
Thanks Andrea for your kind words. Unfortunately I missed this contest! Glad u liked it :)
Date: 9/18/2014 9:16:00 AM
really love the way you painted the visions in this excellent piece
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Date: 9/12/2014 7:53:00 AM
I LOOOVEEE this!!!!! Such a powerful and nostalgic write!!! Good luck in the conest.. Have a wonderful morning Mark. :) =Juli-Michelle
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Date: 9/11/2014 11:51:00 PM
Like it...should do well in contest. GL
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Date: 9/11/2014 11:29:00 PM
A very touching piece. an excellent write.
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