The Capital Advancement

Wearing a dream like sari colored navy blue With the lilac lips at a conch shell white in hue Would come the evening as the curve in new moon grew From the glow wormed darkness would look on starry dew Gradually the merchants of capital through The path of building a modern evening anew One day they set fire to the idyllic milieu To make life five and seven stars for me and you Now evening descends in many a polished shoe The crowd in short pants and tee shirt just two-by-two In greedy vigour the same path we now pursue In wounded wing our birds fly in sky a bit blue ________________________________________________________ 13/01/2017 :Contest 12 by 12 Monorhyme – Poetry Contest of John Hamilton Syllable count checked via www.howmanysyllables.com
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Dietrich Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 8:12 PM
Good one, Probir!! Glad to see it on the winners list. Congratulations.
Gupta Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 8:36 PM
Thank you, Andrea ...
Poteet Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 7:10 PM
Enjoyed your poem, congratulations on your win, Probir. I follow most of your imagery, two of my favorites here are the "glow wormed" darkness and "five and seven stars" which balance well. Working on your L. 2; but meaning will come in time I am sure.
Gupta Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 8:38 PM
Thank you so much ...
Medders Tobechi Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 4:25 PM
Great write Probir, a 7. This is a pleasing to read monorhyme. Congratulations.
Gupta Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 8:40 PM
Thank you, Janis ...
Nusker Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 6:44 AM
So beautifully structured poem. Congratulations!
Gupta Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 8:40 PM
Thank you, Afzal ...
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January 16, 2017 at 7:05 AM
your posting some crackers my friend good luck in the comp showing me the way another form I have not tried stephen
Gupta Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 8:14 AM
Thank you, Stephen ... probir ...
Trifiatis Avatar
January 14, 2017 at 2:23 AM
Reading and marveling the written words one thing I can exclaim: Wow: Good luck my friend, Probir! A seven.
Gupta Avatar
January 14, 2017 at 4:21 AM
Thank you, dear friend ...
Green Avatar
January 13, 2017 at 1:57 PM
This was really nicely crafted Probir. Good luck in the contest
Gupta Avatar
January 13, 2017 at 8:14 PM
Thank you for your kind evaluation, Chris ... probir ...
Michelle Avatar
January 13, 2017 at 1:04 PM
Wow, I love your imagery and how well it just flows together! Seriously, a wonderful write! Love, Juli-Michelle
Gupta Avatar
January 13, 2017 at 8:15 PM
Thank you for your nice appreciation, Juli ... probir ...
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