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The Capital Advancement

Wearing a dream like sari colored navy blue With the lilac lips at a conch shell white in hue Would come the evening as the curve in new moon grew From the glow wormed darkness would look on starry dew Gradually the merchants of capital through The path of building a modern evening anew One day they set fire to the idyllic milieu To make life five and seven stars for me and you Now evening descends in many a polished shoe The crowd in short pants and tee shirt just two-by-two In greedy vigour the same path we now pursue In wounded wing our birds fly in sky a bit blue ________________________________________________________ 13/01/2017 :Contest 12 by 12 Monorhyme – Poetry Contest of John Hamilton Syllable count checked via www.howmanysyllables.com

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Date: 1/28/2017 8:12:00 PM
Good one, Probir!! Glad to see it on the winners list. Congratulations.
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Date: 1/28/2017 8:36:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea ...
Date: 1/28/2017 7:10:00 PM
Enjoyed your poem, congratulations on your win, Probir. I follow most of your imagery, two of my favorites here are the "glow wormed" darkness and "five and seven stars" which balance well. Working on your L. 2; but meaning will come in time I am sure.
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Date: 1/28/2017 8:38:00 PM
Thank you so much ...
Date: 1/28/2017 4:25:00 PM
Great write Probir, a 7. This is a pleasing to read monorhyme. Congratulations.
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Date: 1/28/2017 8:40:00 PM
Thank you, Janis ...
Date: 1/28/2017 6:44:00 AM
So beautifully structured poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/28/2017 8:40:00 PM
Thank you, Afzal ...
Date: 1/16/2017 7:05:00 AM
your posting some crackers my friend good luck in the comp showing me the way another form I have not tried stephen
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Date: 1/16/2017 8:14:00 AM
Thank you, Stephen ... probir ...
Date: 1/14/2017 2:23:00 AM
Reading and marveling the written words one thing I can exclaim: Wow: Good luck my friend, Probir! A seven.
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Date: 1/14/2017 4:21:00 AM
Thank you, dear friend ...
Date: 1/13/2017 1:57:00 PM
This was really nicely crafted Probir. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 1/13/2017 8:14:00 PM
Thank you for your kind evaluation, Chris ... probir ...
Date: 1/13/2017 1:04:00 PM
Wow, I love your imagery and how well it just flows together! Seriously, a wonderful write! Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 1/13/2017 8:15:00 PM
Thank you for your nice appreciation, Juli ... probir ...

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