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Continuous use of grammar with no stoppage, periods, and with few uses of commas.  Easily accomplished whenever I’m prompted to apply punctuation, I rearrange the structural integrity, if need be.  One breath accomplishment, folks should give it a try.  A poetic form, call it, ‘Breathless’ CHEERS!  

The Bus Driver: 'Breathless' - New Form - POTD

The endless, gray-smudged window
of this bus seat where the rain streaks down and blurs 
the passing world into a watercolor of passing cars 
and muted neon signs, and I can’t help but feel a strange 
kind of peace in this temporary suspended motion, 
this observation booth where the world outside 
continues without me and the only constant is the 
rhythmic swish of the wipers and the humming of the 
engine that seems to cradle me in its vibrating heart as 
the city lights smear and run, becoming something else 
entirely, a long, liquid memory that pools and spreads 
across the dirty glass, and I wonder what the 
passengers on the behind side of the bus are doing, if 
they are looking out their own windows at this same 
downpour, or if they are inside, warm and dry, with a 
different kind of day unfolding for them, a day filled with 
sunlight and clear, crisp air and the sound of birds that I 
can’t hear right now, only the low, deep hum of the bus 
and the soft hiss of the brakes as it pulls up to the next 
stop, where the rain is already beginning to pool on the 
cracked and broken sidewalk, and a lone figure stands 
under an umbrella, a dark silhouette against the watery 
light, and I can only watch them from this distance, this 
glass-encased world that moves through the larger, wet 
world, and I am a part of both and neither, just another 
face reflected in the window, waiting for the next stop, 
the next blurry landmark, the next moment to disappear
and with backup who is wide-eyed and all peppered up 
and looks just raring to go until you look at me wonderin' 
who must be that poor excuse of a guy into the passing 
stream of the night just before my stop b winter starts.

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Benjamin Bartley October 29, 2025 at 9:49 AM The long one sentence poem. I like it. Excellent POTD! Thanks for sharing!!! William Kelii Kekaula October 29, 2025 at 12:39 PM This was my first, and I did another shortly after, Aloha, and thank you for your time, William.

Daniel Henry Rodgers October 28, 2025 at 8:21 AM Hello HP, Your form distills motion into mood, rain, rhythm, and reflection all flowing in one breath. The whole piece feels like a ride through memory and grit. Congrats on POTD. This form speaks. Autumn Blessings, HP, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues October 27, 2025 at 2:51 PM Congrats on POTD! William Kelii Kekaula October 27, 2025 at 4:50 PM OMgolly! You'd faved me on the 24th, and I got POTD on the 25th; you're an angel. Thanks for the premonition, Aloha.

Valsa George October 27, 2025 at 2:17 AM This is one of the best prose poetry l have read recently. This has been not simply reading a poem but a real experience of travelling in a bus on a rainy day. I can place myself in the shoes of the bus driver. Congratulations dear Hilo poet on your POTD honor. Into my FAVE. William Kelii Kekaula October 27, 2025 at 11:46 AM Wow, thank you so much for it's a rare privilege: Aloha, my friend.

Paula Goldsmith October 26, 2025 at 10:10 AM Sorry this is late, I took yesterday of.... Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your "The Bus Driver" write. Cute Picture... Have a wonderful day writing away with your win.............. William Kelii Kekaula October 27, 2025 at 10:08 AM Thank you, as always, my friend. The picture had to be cartoonish, or it would have been Ralph waiting for his pal Ed to show up: Aloha, and blessed day to you.

Brandy Nicole October 25, 2025 at 5:23 PM ' the humming of the engine that seems to cradle me in its vibrating heart. ' I think this says is all for me. So soft and poetic. There's something about watching the rain fall that makes everything around you feel calm and peaceful. (It does for me, anyway). Congratulations Hilo, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy Brandy Nicole October 26, 2025 at 12:57 PM William. : ) Thanks for sharing this information with me. Aloha and many blessings. William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 11:06 PM Hilo (Willam) here, in Hilo, Hawaii, salutations. The end of November end of our hurricane season, so there's a lot of bus drivers out in this country setting, but not much like Honolulu—a Happy Hallow's Eve, Brandy, and Aloha, my friend.

Abdullah Alhemaidy October 25, 2025 at 1:21 PM Congratulations on your lovely delightful p.o.t.d! Ahlla, Hallo, Hello, Aloha :-) William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 6:48 PM Aloha, my friend, and with my thanks, Mahalo

Eve Roper October 25, 2025 at 9:22 AM I love the imagery and the peacefulness of your poem. A moment of tranquility in solitude by yourself as the outside world is getting soaked. My husband loved the sound of the rain because it made him feel at peace. Not I. Congratulations on Poem of the day, my friend. William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 4:40 PM Tickles me gingerly, living on the windward side, which is the rainy side of the island. With my warmest thanks, Aloha.

Tania Kitchin October 25, 2025 at 4:57 AM William, congratulations on POTD. William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 4:35 PM Heartfelt thanks, Tania, Aloha.

sara Etgen-Baker October 25, 2025 at 4:17 AM filled with a bit of mystery and outstanding imagery....well deserving of POTD. Congrats! William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 4:12 PM Interesting what traverses a work shift before its end, whether a bus seat or an office high-rise. Aloha.

Anne-Lise Andresen October 25, 2025 at 1:15 AM - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., Hilo ... a great poem ... enjoy :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 4:02 PM Thanks, Anne-Lise, appreciate it, Aloha.

Karen Jones October 25, 2025 at 12:32 AM Congratulations on your poem being potd! William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 3:50 PM I'm grateful, my friend. Aloha.

Kim Rodrigues October 24, 2025 at 7:59 AM Excellent! Loved it! William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 12:41 PM A bit out of breath, it seems at the near end, I negated commas to be less prevalent than earlier. Anyhow, there you have it, in a nutshell. Aloha.

Kim Rodrigues October 24, 2025 at 7:59 AM Faving! William Kelii Kekaula October 25, 2025 at 9:57 AM Wow, I appreciate you. It seems to have started a trend. Oy vey, thanks. Aloha.