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Many years ago, I learned a short poem by Emily Dickinson and it was part of the beginning of my love for personification. But MY blond assassin poem is not personification. It's just a metaphor for a tall blond boy I once knew and adored. Here is the poem by Emily Dickinson which I used for inspiration after I messed up yesterday and posted a RHYME of this same theme. (How could I foget this was a free verse contest?) If anyone cares to read the other "version" of this story told in my poem "His Eyes", I'd appreciate knowing if you preferred it in sonnet form or in free verse! The bottom picture is my inspiration from Laura Loo's Contest. 

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“. . .The blond assassin passes on. The sun proceeds unmoved . . .” ( from "Apparently With No Surprise" by Emily Dickinson) A blond assassin was he, but not quite the same as the one personified by the poet Dickinson; her assassin was the frost. Mine had a similar cool veneer and a masquerade of beauty. His heart, though, was ebony, and his soul was black as coal. I and those other women, whom I’m certain he could hypnotize so easily with a mere glance of his eyes' crystal blue, were like the happy flowers in Ms. Dickinson’s short poem. His power, like the frost’s over the flowers, was hardly accidental, for he oozed confidence and charm. Through my high school years, my desire for him burned crimson. I laid my heart open, while his own, opaque, was impossible to read. As he grew more and more aloof, I knew I had to suture my sad heart. But the real death came later when he smashed my soul into obscurity. On seeing me at college, his blue eyes were as icy cold as glass as right through me they sliced! Oh, for the once so happy flower of my youth! 6/2/17 for Laura Loo's Write Me Something Deep and Dark Poetry Contest The ten Words used for this poetry contest: ebony/ obscurity/ masquerade/ aloof/ death/ hypnotize/ suture/ veneer/ crimson/ opaque

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Date: 6/6/2017 11:06:00 PM
Loved the title, it drew me in and I loved the line "But the real death came later when he smashed my soul into obscurity." Such a well written poem I can relate too!
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Date: 6/5/2017 9:09:00 PM
To the recipient of such an icy stare, heartbreak. Nice one, Andrea!
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Date: 6/5/2017 8:55:00 PM
I'm sad for your love life, if this is an autobiography. Nicely penned, however.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/6/2017 1:11:00 AM
Annette, it was teenage angst. I had many boyfriends in my youth and "got over him" so my life has been about as normal as everyone else who has gotten their hearts broken! I used poetic license to exaggerate, but the last part is VERY true. He was as cold as an ice king.
Date: 6/5/2017 8:53:00 PM
Nice write :)
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Date: 6/5/2017 4:52:00 AM
Oh boy Andrea, I adore this poem, " he smashed my soul into obscurity". Just awesome. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 6/5/2017 3:52:00 AM
Great write Andrea... Reads like a winner... Enjoyed your narration....
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Date: 6/5/2017 2:32:00 AM
I have read and enjoyed both poems, Andrea, but if I had to choose I'd go for the original, just for the simple reason that this one provides more information, while I prefer to look for that myself between the lines. ~ Have a lovely day:) // paul
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Date: 6/4/2017 9:13:00 PM
What is it about a COLD heart that draws us females!? Dramatic and well done, Andrea! Janice
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Date: 6/4/2017 4:33:00 PM
perfect :)
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Date: 6/4/2017 12:28:00 PM
Powerful stuff, Andrea! Striking imagery captivates from the start and leads you on an emotional journey. Best of luck for the contest! Regards, John.
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Date: 6/4/2017 7:52:00 AM
love this dark write, my friend - and enjoyed the Dickinson extract too (don't know much of her stuff)
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Date: 6/4/2017 7:35:00 AM
Very nicely penned Andrea...though only time can lessen the heartache..
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Date: 6/4/2017 7:24:00 AM
Great story telling. This is the guy you want to see at the reunion once he lost all his teeth and hair!
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Date: 6/4/2017 10:08:00 AM
I found a picture of him and he is right here in Utah with his chiropractor business. Sharp as the devil, you'd never know from his picture he is in his 60's (unless he has used an old picture)
Date: 6/3/2017 6:27:00 AM
Great write, Andrea, off to read your sonnet now:)
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Date: 6/2/2017 9:41:00 PM
Marvelous write, Andrea, Laura will love this one...
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