The Blade

The blade was fine as any But it couldn't cut to the core Or pierce the heart of it Though he tried forever more He sharpened it with iron Cleaned it many times a day Polished it with minerals Buffed it a most loving way It couldn't cut the chase It didn't even fit the bill He had to find a way It almost drove him up the hill

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Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 12/5/2015 2:29:00 PM

hmm... was he supposed to climb the hill, or not? I mean, does it have significance or were you just looking for a rhyme for bill? I'm curious. (and please don't be offended if the latter is the case.) I am chasing rhymes all the time! A very enigmatic piece, though, very interesting, and very well written. Pleasant flow and fine rhyming. Well done my friend! Best wishes, Keith

Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/6/2015 6:20:00 PM

Thanks...

Mike Martin
Date: 12/6/2015 6:11:00 PM

http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/now_i_understand_726801 http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_wordsmith_703604 http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_smithy_703129 The Smithy gets honorable mentions in these in these as well http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/ever_hope_to_know_707145 http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_prize_726570

Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/5/2015 3:13:00 PM

Yes I did. Where are your smithy poems? K.

Mike Martin
Date: 12/5/2015 3:08:00 PM

I was shooting for .. drove him crazy. While rhyming. Drove him up the wall. .. you know. I would have thought it should say that to most readers. Not you? It's all about trying to say something difficult in a facetious rhyme. That's what I like to try and do. Haps you've seen my smithy poems. Did you get any such a sort of a feeling from it?