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The Black Tear Version Two


Mascara black tear fell as she looked on
the silent man
stretched lifeless
in a 
cask
full
suit he
loved for years.
Pale lips smiling.
She will never feel those soft lips again.


4 November 2020

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Sponsor: Eve Roper

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Linda Alice Fowler

November 15, 2020 at 6:24 AM

Beautifully penned Victor. So soft an expression of love. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Eve Roper

November 14, 2020 at 7:02 PM

So very sad, Victory, great imagery and flow. Congratulation on your awesome win. Happy Thanksgiving. Hugs Eve

Susan Ashley

November 14, 2020 at 5:20 PM

Victor, your gifted pen spills sorrowful ink. An aching intimate portrait of grief expressed so poetically. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Eve's contest.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman

November 14, 2020 at 1:04 PM

True love parted by the passing away of one partner. But, I think, this love will remain. Well done Victor. Congratulations on your win!

Jo Chamberlain

November 14, 2020 at 2:26 AM

Very sad, it's better to have loved and lost, then never to have loved at all. Congratulations on your winning poem.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

November 13, 2020 at 11:31 AM

Such exquisite sadness portrayed in this splendid poem, Victor. You are a very talented poet, my dear friend. Love and best wishes for the coming holiday.

Alexis Y.

November 8, 2020 at 9:59 PM

Hi Victor, You painted such a sad picture from the image chosen. I felt every line. Best wishes in the contest. Great job- Alexis

Andrea Dietrich

November 6, 2020 at 7:02 PM

this for me is the better of the two, and I see you thought so too!!

Kim Rodrigues

November 6, 2020 at 6:31 AM

Great imagery of a sorrowful moment.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

November 4, 2020 at 9:18 PM

You portrayed her broken heart very well, with fine imagery. :)

Angela Crabtree

November 4, 2020 at 4:30 PM

A great poem with a sad ending. :(

Akkina Downing

November 4, 2020 at 2:12 PM

Awe, this is so heartbreaking but beautifully done... Hey, Vic, it’s been awhile and I hope you’re doing great :)

Linda Alice Fowler

November 4, 2020 at 7:41 AM

Nicely done Victor. :) Linda

Silent One

November 4, 2020 at 7:39 AM

Heartbreaking second part...

Quoth Theraven

November 4, 2020 at 7:09 AM

Victor, "for dust you are and to dust you will return." Such lovely dust we've known in life. -Richard

Vijay Pandit

November 4, 2020 at 4:42 AM

You paint your scenes wonderfully, Victor--as you do in this melancholy write.

Tom Cunningham

November 4, 2020 at 1:46 AM

Quite a sad scene Victor, the loss of a loved one is a painful experience. Tom

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 4, 2020 at 1:46 AM

- She has deep grief ... lovely written, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Besma Riabi Dziri

November 4, 2020 at 1:16 AM

Your words imagery of many a version! As a reader I immerse my imagination into your switching adept.. your mastery of conveying your thoughts and impressions in so concise wonderful and new to me a form of poetry! It is always my honour and great pleasure to read your beauties, Victor.. My deepest regards and blessings.