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The Black Tear Version Two

Mascara black tear fell as she looked on the silent man stretched lifeless in a cask full suit he loved for years. Pale lips smiling. She will never feel those soft lips again. 4 November 2020 Double Tetractys 5 Sponsor: Eve Roper

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/15/2020 6:24:00 AM

Beautifully penned Victor. So soft an expression of love. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Eve Roper

Date: 11/14/2020 7:02:00 PM

So very sad, Victory, great imagery and flow. Congratulation on your awesome win. Happy Thanksgiving. Hugs Eve

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/14/2020 5:20:00 PM

Victor, your gifted pen spills sorrowful ink. An aching intimate portrait of grief expressed so poetically. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Eve's contest.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/14/2020 1:04:00 PM

True love parted by the passing away of one partner. But, I think, this love will remain. Well done Victor. Congratulations on your win!

Jo Chamberlain

Date: 11/14/2020 2:26:00 AM

Very sad, it's better to have loved and lost, then never to have loved at all. Congratulations on your winning poem.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/13/2020 11:31:00 AM

Such exquisite sadness portrayed in this splendid poem, Victor. You are a very talented poet, my dear friend. Love and best wishes for the coming holiday.

Alexis Y.

Date: 11/8/2020 9:59:00 PM

Hi Victor, You painted such a sad picture from the image chosen. I felt every line. Best wishes in the contest. Great job- Alexis

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/6/2020 7:02:00 PM

this for me is the better of the two, and I see you thought so too!!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/6/2020 6:31:00 AM

Great imagery of a sorrowful moment.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 11/4/2020 9:18:00 PM

You portrayed her broken heart very well, with fine imagery. :)

Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/4/2020 4:30:00 PM

A great poem with a sad ending. :(

Akkina Downing

Date: 11/4/2020 2:12:00 PM

Awe, this is so heartbreaking but beautifully done... Hey, Vic, it’s been awhile and I hope you’re doing great :)

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/4/2020 7:41:00 AM

Nicely done Victor. :) Linda

Silent One

Date: 11/4/2020 7:39:00 AM

Heartbreaking second part...

Quoth Theraven

Date: 11/4/2020 7:09:00 AM

Victor, "for dust you are and to dust you will return." Such lovely dust we've known in life. -Richard

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/4/2020 4:42:00 AM

You paint your scenes wonderfully, Victor--as you do in this melancholy write.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/4/2020 1:46:00 AM

- She has deep grief ... lovely written, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 11/4/2020 1:46:00 AM

Quite a sad scene Victor, the loss of a loved one is a painful experience. Tom

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 11/4/2020 1:16:00 AM

Your words imagery of many a version! As a reader I immerse my imagination into your switching adept.. your mastery of conveying your thoughts and impressions in so concise wonderful and new to me a form of poetry! It is always my honour and great pleasure to read your beauties, Victor.. My deepest regards and blessings.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/4/2020 1:09:00 AM

Oh! This is heartbreaking indeed, Victor, you bring out the emotions so well :)