Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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The Birthday Surprise

Today it’s Sally’s birthday party; she’s the star of the show
She’s a lovely little girl and all her friends are invited to go

They arrive on the doorstep with presents in their hand
Wearing their best clothes, oh don’t they look so grand

Excited children are entertained by Coco the clown
She’s jolly person but her face wears a sad frown

Coco blows up balloons and amazing animals are created
The children clutch them eagerly; they simply are elated

The dining table is laden with glorious treats
Sandwiches, crisps, cakes and biscuits to eat

Sally’s birthday cake is shaped like a cute little cat
Cats are her favourite animal; her kitten is called Pat
 
The children sing ‘happy birthday’ and Sally makes a wish
Her mum cuts up the pretty cake and serves it on a dish

After tea is over a magician arrives to entertain
He’s called The Great Suprendo but it’s not his real name!

The magician does lots of magic tricks, the children think he’s ace
When he produces a fluffy rabbit they have a smile on their face

Soon the party is over and its time for the children to go home
Sally had a wonderful time but now she’s sad as she’s now alone

Secretly hiding in the kitchen is the Great Suprendo
He gives her the rabbit, her shrieks of delight reach a crescendo!

Mummy and daddy had planned this birthday surprise
Sally is so happy that tears spring into her eyes

Daddy had made the rabbit a wooden rabbit hutch
Sally is overjoyed, and names her pet rabbit Butch

Contest: The Birthday Party
Sponsor: Nayda Ivette Negron
01~31~16

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Poet Destroyer A February 12, 2016 at 8:49 AM Thanks for the reply

Poet Destroyer A February 11, 2016 at 10:16 PM Jan, Congrats in Nayda's "Birthday Party win." Love LINDA Jan Allison February 12, 2016 at 3:40 AM Thanks Linda:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos February 11, 2016 at 5:11 PM Big Congratulations! Such a Winner! Cheers! Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 5:12 PM Thanks Judy I had fun with this contest:-) hugs jan xx

Steve Grammatico February 11, 2016 at 9:01 AM Very nice, Jan. I especially like your rhymes. Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 9:55 AM Many thanks Steve i always enjoy writing in rhyme I think it is my favourite form:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 11, 2016 at 4:33 AM Congrats on ur awesome winning write Jan. Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 9:55 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry February 11, 2016 at 4:01 AM Congratulations Jan for your win with this fantastic poem and story. Excellent! Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 9:56 AM Thanks usan:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper February 10, 2016 at 8:53 PM Great write, Jan, the bunny was the best! Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 9:56 AM The bunny is very special:-) :-) hugs jan xx

Janice Canerdy February 10, 2016 at 8:24 PM Great job, Jan. Congrats on your win. Janice Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 9:57 AM Thanks so much Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner February 10, 2016 at 8:21 PM Beautiful couplets and a well deserving happy birthday poem. Congratulations, Jan, on your prize winning write. It is well deserved. The first happy poem I've read. Jan Allison February 11, 2016 at 9:57 AM There are many sad ones in the contest Daniel - guess birthday's aren't always happy events as your poem shows:-( hugs jan xx

Joyce Johnson February 10, 2016 at 6:27 PM Simply lovely party and poem. Congratulations. Love, Joyce Jan Allison February 10, 2016 at 6:31 PM Many thanks Joyce:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight February 10, 2016 at 6:01 PM Sweet birthday poem, Jan. Congratulations on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison February 10, 2016 at 6:30 PM Thanks Sandra:-) hugs jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores February 10, 2016 at 5:16 PM Congratulations on the placement of the contest Jan Jan Allison February 10, 2016 at 5:48 PM Many thanks Nayda i am so delighted to get a top spot:-) hugs jan xx

Steve Grammatico February 3, 2016 at 6:07 AM A worthy poem for the contest, Jan. You capture the sense of innocence and wonder. Jan Allison February 3, 2016 at 10:50 AM Thanks so much Steve I had fun with this poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis February 2, 2016 at 6:50 PM Excellent and witty lines so winning. Jan Allison February 2, 2016 at 7:03 PM Thanks so much Iris just a fun write for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort February 2, 2016 at 4:12 AM What a great party. This is how the life of a child should be!! Jan Allison February 2, 2016 at 3:18 PM It should be Duke but sadly the reality is very different for many:-( hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso February 1, 2016 at 10:22 PM You are truly a Poetess who happens to be blessed with a kind heart! Jan Allison February 2, 2016 at 3:17 PM Aww thanks Arthur just a fiction poem for the contest but I thought of a lonely little girl having a fund party with her friends and then back to the loneliness so that is why the bunny got a top billing lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos February 1, 2016 at 3:05 PM NOW that is an all out party! My only complaint is that I did not receive an invitation especially after I read about the sandwiches and cakes...Great Poem... Jan Allison February 1, 2016 at 3:44 PM Thanks Judy just a fun write for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish January 31, 2016 at 9:37 PM This reminds me of birthday parties I have attended. Quite a pleasant write! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison February 1, 2016 at 11:28 AM Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich January 31, 2016 at 8:06 PM this is the birthday party every little kid want, Jan. WELL DONE. Jan Allison February 1, 2016 at 11:28 AM Thanks Andrea just a write from my imagination:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis January 31, 2016 at 1:47 PM Marvelous and so vividly written! Happy birthday to the little one! A seven dear Jan! Jan Allison January 31, 2016 at 1:59 PM Just a fun write from my imagination Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Keith Teaser January 31, 2016 at 1:17 PM Love it great composition..Keith.. Jan Allison January 31, 2016 at 1:29 PM Thanks Keith:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus January 31, 2016 at 11:12 AM Very lovely and a delight to read, Jan. That rabbit present was surely the cherry on the (birthday) cake! Hugs // paul Jan Allison January 31, 2016 at 11:59 AM I based the poem on an only child who is delighted to have her party and lots of friends round... then it all goes quiet when they have gone so i tried to make the ending upbeat:-) hugs jan xx

Eric Boddie January 31, 2016 at 9:06 AM this is a true treat because jan, you are so upbeat and happy, its so unique because of the hardships you have reaped which are very steep but you always seem to keep positivity and wisdom within your reach so as to teach the rest of us how to deal with what makes us weep....awesome job my friend....;) Jan Allison January 31, 2016 at 9:09 AM I've had a tough two years and shed a few tears I try to remain up beat and reading and writing poetry is my treat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Manu Singh Tanwar January 31, 2016 at 7:27 AM wow...remember my birthday party... make miss my mom and dad.. nicely writtern.all the best for the contest Jan Allison January 31, 2016 at 7:38 AM Thanks Manu - yes we have lots of times to reminisce writing about childhood events:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen January 31, 2016 at 7:05 AM - A fun and exciting birthday for Sally and her friends - Good luck in the contest ...... suddenly .... have you won :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) #7 Jan Allison January 31, 2016 at 7:07 AM I had a fun time writing this one Anne Lise:-) Hugs jan xx