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the battlefield

tiny steps inched forward towards the line tiny hands reaching through shadows on the other side was death ...she survived teenage strolls tempting fate with screeching brakes she flew wingless through night's air ...she survived adulthood fears lurked in shadows of darkness hands grabbing through the fog she was lifted staring barrels down felt the pierce of blades pressing rage of minds exploding a shattered heart ...she survived climbing life's hill a weakened heart in slow beats fading in echoes pulse of death upon her ....she survived now she stands on the battlefield all the warriors of life have fallen into the shadows of death she stands armed with needle not knowing how to fight to survive the pain of this killer a survivor she is lost between memories that haunt and the rituals that life has become inching towards that line her story told ...will she survive? she doesn't know how (this video inspired my write ) November is National Diabetes Awareness Month~

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Date: 11/18/2019 5:07:00 AM
My very first comments on poetry. I am glad that I picked this one to review. I love the style and form of this poem. The kinetic burst of lines. You convey much with a few brief words. This is something that I had thought of doing. Nice to see how well it can be done. The story or picture is very moving. I really like how it was written. Clearly paper is your canvas and words are what you paint by. Thank you. ps I keep coming back here to read this again!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/18/2019 5:19:00 AM
Thank you so much for such an in depth wonderful comment ... I write mostly free verse unless contests call for something else! We all have a blank canvas and each artists paints in different strokes. :) hugs
Date: 11/4/2019 12:06:00 PM
May the strength of the angels forever be at your side...
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Date: 11/4/2019 6:43:00 PM
what a sweet thing to say HT thank you so much...i have lots of angels that fell in the grasp of this disease...i fight for them too, sometimes i just don't know how to win... <3
Date: 11/4/2019 9:09:00 AM
I should have started with this one and ended my morning reading on "In the depths of poetry" I was on a high after reading that and now my feel sorrow for you my friend. Your words, though beautiful are so deeply sad and affecting. This pain and worry that you have to deal with would get the better of most, but I know you and I know you are a fighter. Many here, myself included, stand with you as you battle this demon.
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Date: 11/4/2019 6:42:00 PM
Thank you my friend...i have my weak moments though i am a fighter...it just knocks me back sometimes...it knows i am fierce...i will be fine...i may break down but i get back up...sometimes i need friends to pull me up, just dust me off and send me out to fight again.... hugs :)
Date: 11/3/2019 5:38:00 PM
This is in honor of so many people in my world who have to do this including my wonderful husband.
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Date: 11/3/2019 6:48:00 PM
sorry your husband and so many others have to deal with this...it is not a fun way of life as you know...i have lost many family members to its hands and i fight for them... for all diabetics.... hugs
Date: 11/3/2019 6:13:00 AM
Would love to collab with you on this subject.. my mum had an episode this morning.... this is a great poem..
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/3/2019 6:34:00 AM
oh no....I hope your mom is ok... the episodes are the worst, never knowing when they will happen, my friend took me to a haunted place last night, she had vip passes...it was cold here, by the end of the night after exploring all 4 buildings,i had to have hard candy with me to keep my sugar level because the walking we did could bring it too low.... the cold got to me, i started with muscle cramps thanks to the diabetes i was having a hard time doing the walk back to the car...it was a painful night... hug her tight....really do hope she is ok....
Date: 11/3/2019 5:16:00 AM
A vivid image of life’s struggles. Ongoing...
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Date: 11/3/2019 6:35:00 AM
Thank you Kim....something you wish you had a magic wand for...so you could erase them...
Date: 11/2/2019 8:03:00 PM
See I didn't know it was national diabetes awareness month! Tell you what kind of diabetic I am huh! I just hate the shots and the finger pricks but good for you to bring this to all attention (and really mine too) everyone Needs to be aware and do what they can to find relief for those of us who wish they had relief! You are an amazing and caring person Sandy!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/3/2019 6:41:00 AM
Thank you so much Wayne....
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/3/2019 4:54:00 AM
Thank you WK much appreciated!;)
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Wayne Kingston
Date: 11/2/2019 10:21:00 PM
Amazing how something so dastardly can make one so strong. Evocative piece, SA. Prayers lifed for each of you Warriors. ://
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/2/2019 9:12:00 PM
diabetes has been around me all of my life...i agree the 4-6 shots a day suck but because i am type one i am lucky to have a cgm and only have to pick my fingers if it acts up... the lifestyle gets old as you know...bless you... it sucks to have this killer inside of you...thank you Brenda... maybe some day they will cure it...here's to hoping for all of us
Date: 11/2/2019 7:53:00 PM
Listening to the video. Do you have diabetes one or two? I am taking something that they say can cure it (but maybe only diabetes two). Email me if you want info on it.(I am taking it for my own weird condition. I am lucky I don't have diabetes)
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Date: 11/2/2019 8:57:00 PM
i am one...it's autoimmune, there is no cure, my body is attacking itself...i am stuck with 4-6 shots a day .... i wish there was a way to get rid of it.... thank you... luv ya
Date: 11/2/2019 7:50:00 PM
I read comments below and I see I was right about my impressions that this was autobiographical. I saw the poem Richard wrote too. I am glad to have a strong person like you as my friend.
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Date: 11/2/2019 8:59:00 PM
John wrote the poem....and yes each verse is a snippet from life...of course not everything but some...i am a fighter but this battle is not like any of the others.... I am glad to have you as a friend...
Date: 11/2/2019 7:49:00 PM
Sandy, I wish I had time for the video. You were very well inspired and I love what you did with your inspiration. Let me check it out really fast and see if it's a short one on my way off here!
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Date: 11/2/2019 9:05:00 PM
It's ok...i was sent it from a diabetes support group...it touched me ...this warrior was touched by it...then had some weak moments....my friend must have sensed it she invited me to penhurst asylum for the haunted attraction but it's really haunted and has been on many of the paranormal shows...it was a fun time...another of my friend's son's works there, he also works with me...tonight was blackout night so it was pitch black, he saw me, can't miss my long blond hair and kept running after me, calling my name then yelled by Sandy as we turned the corner out of his view...it was funny...the video will be with this, you can see it anytime... hugs :)
Date: 11/2/2019 6:19:00 PM
Sending you angels, to guard your every day...asking for healing...real and certain...for you...hugs and cheerful thoughts. Tea and cakes on sunny days, under my big tree...all welcome...Lovely write... prayers and prayers. Ann
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Date: 11/2/2019 9:07:00 PM
Tea and cakes under a tree on a sunny day sounds good...but the cakes must be sugarless... thank you my friend...prayers are always needed and welcomed...hugs... :)
Date: 11/2/2019 4:17:00 PM
Thanks for sharing this emotive piece Sandy, very powerfully penned indeed. My heart goes out to you in your battles of life determined to fight on. Keep aiming high! Blessings and prayers are yours, Gordon
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Date: 11/2/2019 4:44:00 PM
Thank you Gordon...i have fought many of battles, survived things other's haven't...but i have seen what this one can do...all my life i have seen...if there is a way to win this war...i will be the one to do so...some days get frustrating for sure and brings all my other battles to surface...hugs
Date: 11/2/2019 3:54:00 PM
- A deeply touching and painful poem, Sandra - When I graduated as a nurse ... my theme was diabetes ... "my first needle stick" was injection for insulin - I understand your battles, my friend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/2/2019 4:07:00 PM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise...i have watched family deal with this all of my life and have watched them lose, one by one...i thought maybe i would be the lucky one to escape it's grasp, certainly the oldest to get it and of course got the worse of the two.types..i know you understand the life...you see it...hugs
Date: 11/2/2019 2:27:00 PM
Ooh those hands reaching through the shadows gave me goosepimples... it was striking how you didn’t tell us until the footer that it was about diabetes. I guess most people know someone with T1 diabetes, see them living their life, and forget it’s a killer. Your reminder was sobering. Wishing you strength, warrior woman!
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Date: 11/2/2019 2:44:00 PM
Thank you Nina...i have seen its wrath all of my life...i always thought i would be the lucky one with all the battles i have had in life (john Hamilton dedicated a poem to me that kind of shows my life) each verse of my poem is a minor snippet of my life's battles, but this battle is the worst i have ever been in, i always survived wondering what my purpose was in life, only to get this killer disease...how does a survivor even begin to fight against something unseen, but so damaging and break free from it's grasp...if there is a way, i will figure it out... hugs :)
Date: 11/2/2019 2:24:00 PM
I do, your strength is the fibre that weaves through all of your inspired writings. Hugs Rick
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Date: 11/2/2019 2:34:00 PM
Thank you Rick...sometimes that strength hides behind tears...all the battles i have fought in life and survived when i shouldn't have always made me believe i had a purpose, a reason to be alive, and then comes the battle that so many family members have lost bringing forth all the other battles...sometimes it is overwhelming...no two days are the same...hugs and thank you for your kind words... :)
Date: 11/2/2019 12:04:00 PM
I am also diabetic but not as severe as you. I understand your pain as my mum goes through the same thing as you... Thank you for sharing this eye opening poem..
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Date: 11/2/2019 12:13:00 PM
Thank you my friend...i knew you were diabetic as well and would understand this pain...some days are worse then others...some days i am ok other days i am an emotional wreck! I have survived many battles in my life but this one by far is the most challenging...maybe one day we will collaborate on this subject.... hugs :) I can't read this poem or listen to that video without crying today...
Date: 11/2/2019 11:28:00 AM
What a powerful write Sandy, you are a fighter so you will make it when others didn't. It's a daily fight in this bloody battlefield, but you are a conqueror....a survivor. We are privileged to know you!
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Date: 11/2/2019 11:51:00 AM
I have made it through every battle life has put me in...never let anything get to me... this battle seems to break me down in tears often and bring all the other battles to the front lines of memories...maybe because it took my rock, the one person that was always good to me from me at a young age...i remember what she went through... I knew you would comment on this one...i am equally privileged to know you John...i think you are one of the few that really understand...hugs :) Thank you for everything!
Date: 11/2/2019 9:06:00 AM
Powerful images in the video and your poem, Sandy..this disease haunts millions worldwide! Strength of your poem is in the universal message it delivers..superb write my friend.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/2/2019 11:20:00 AM
And hugs to you my friend..type 1 is a constant reminder in frequent daily care it needs..stay strong, as I know you are!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/2/2019 9:20:00 AM
Thank you so much Vijay...i have fought much in my life but have watched this take so many from life...i have type 1, it has me all over the place with emotions...the struggle to live is real...i just want it out there, maybe it can help others...i have the strength of the army of fallen in my will to survive but i have weak moments... Hugs my friend :)
Date: 11/2/2019 8:46:00 AM
this poem provokes a deep need to understand the struggles some go through on their perilous journey with life...my first thought after reading dear poet
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Date: 11/2/2019 8:49:00 AM
i have known struggles all of my life, and have watched all around me fall victim to this killer that is now upon me...a survivor that seems to feel helpless now...you have great insight...thank you so much Frederic... hugs