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The Apple a Pantoum

On this, the anniversary of my death I am reminded of my horrible crime For you see it was me who stole the apple It had belonged to an angel with white wings I am reminded of my horrible crime In the moment, I imagined a free heart It had belonged to an angel with white wings My true crime was that of being as dark as night In the moment, I imagined a free heart It seems freedom came at the end of a rope My true crime was that of being as dark as night You see, our child was the blending of two worlds It seems freedom came at the end of a rope Yes, I knew one day they would both be with me You see, our child was the blending of two worlds All part of a plan to abolish slavery Yes, I knew one day they would both be with me For you see, it was me who stole the apple All part of a plan to abolish slavery On this, the anniversary of my death I chose to challenge myself with a difficult form and to use all your word prompts. For: "Forever Malta's" The Alphabet Letter A Contest. Also entered into Eve's Pantoum Contest.

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 4/7/2016 4:10:00 PM

Hi Richard, Congratulations for your win in the contest. A deep read my friend....Mike.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/6/2016 10:01:00 PM

Richard, Congrats on your "Pantoum --Poet's Choice Win." ~LINDA~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/6/2016 2:16:00 AM

Congrats on a worthy win with this superb poem Richard..

Rob Carmack

Date: 4/5/2016 8:32:00 PM

Impressive Richard. It was a good idea to have entered this into two contests. Excellent poem.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/4/2016 5:12:00 PM

Quite a dark write Richard I was expecting a much more light hearted poem from the title - congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/24/2016 2:11:00 AM

In the first stanza I thought this was going to be kind of a cute story about stealing an apple, and feeling guilty about it later ... but now I see it is a much darker story. Nice metaphor for making love ... how tragic that era was, that one felt compelled to make a quote-unquote "mixed breed", just to make a statement about the silliness of the "skin deep" judgement. An intriguing way you presented this thought-provoking read, Rick ... and mixing it up with the extra word challenge, too!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/24/2016 6:08:00 AM

Thanks Tim. ;0)

Constance La France

Date: 3/23/2016 11:28:00 AM

Rick your Pantoum is excellent, very nicely penned and I am loving it 7. . .

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/23/2016 3:37:00 PM

Thanks Constance.;0)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/23/2016 10:51:00 AM

Wow. You did so well with this form...and what a theme. Injustice really burns me. I feel with those who were enslaved....with those who are still enslaved. Great write. Hugs.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/23/2016 3:36:00 PM

Thanks Eileen, I know this to be true about how you feel. Hugs Rick.

Michael Tor

Date: 3/22/2016 10:21:00 AM

Complex in it's form Richard and you have mastered it well. A winning entry for sure!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/22/2016 11:02:00 AM

Thanks again Michael.

Casarah Nance

Date: 3/22/2016 9:52:00 AM

Very interesting, you are great with the pantoum form!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/22/2016 9:58:00 AM

I thought I would try something different for his contest. It was hard to tie the end in with the beginning.

Jai Bankson

Date: 3/21/2016 10:31:00 AM

I just saw the contest this morning,forget one,,take'em all!!That was really well written..Really enjoyed that...Thank you..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/21/2016 1:00:00 PM

Thanks for the visits this morning. Much appreciated.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/21/2016 9:46:00 AM

You did - you used them all and I quite enjoyed it. Great fiction, beautifully done ... CayCay

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/21/2016 1:00:00 PM

Thanks Cay Cay.

Sarah Jabri

Date: 3/21/2016 6:24:00 AM

Brilliant work! no other words needed, a7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/21/2016 7:47:00 AM

Thanks Sarah.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/20/2016 2:32:00 PM

Interesting how you incorporated abolish as well, with the apple theme. I thought his challenge was a fairly easy one but you chose a rather difficult form for it, and you managed quite well, Richard!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/20/2016 3:19:00 PM

Yep, Apple, Anniversary, Angel, Apple and Abolish. Thanks for he visit Andrea.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/20/2016 1:44:00 PM

well woven combining all the words into a superb piece, rich... huggs!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/20/2016 3:20:00 PM

I wasn't sure if I would be able to still have the Pntoum make sense, but I think it worked okay.

Red Fiery

Date: 3/19/2016 1:08:00 PM

Indeed a great write and a great take on a contest... 7/7... You did it brilliantly my dear... Hugs REd...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/19/2016 7:11:00 PM

Thanks Red, the visit and 7 are much appreciated. Hugs back to you.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 3/19/2016 11:17:00 AM

Dear Richard Love how you did this one, what a great topic so out of the ordinary, simply wonderful my poetic friend awesome job, cheri dunn

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/19/2016 7:12:00 PM

Thanks Cheryl, not sure if I hit the mark, not many comments on this one.