Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

The Apple a Pantoum

On this, the anniversary of my death
I am reminded of my horrible crime
For you see it was me who stole the apple
It had belonged to an angel with white wings

I am reminded of my horrible crime
In the moment, I imagined a free heart
It had belonged to an angel with white wings
My true crime was that of being as dark as night

In the moment, I imagined a free heart
It seems freedom came at the end of a rope
My true crime was that of being as dark as night
You see, our child was the blending of two worlds

It seems freedom came at the end of a rope
Yes, I knew one day they would both be with me
You see, our child was the blending of two worlds
All part of a plan to abolish slavery

Yes, I knew one day they would both be with me
For you see, it was me who stole the apple
All part of a plan to abolish slavery
On this, the anniversary of my death


I chose to challenge myself with a difficult form and to use all your word prompts.
For: "Forever Malta's" The Alphabet Letter A Contest.

Also entered into Eve's Pantoum Contest.

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Vladislav Raven April 7, 2016 at 4:10 PM Hi Richard, Congratulations for your win in the contest. A deep read my friend....Mike.

Poet Destroyer A April 6, 2016 at 10:01 PM Richard, Congrats on your "Pantoum --Poet's Choice Win." ~LINDA~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma April 6, 2016 at 2:16 AM Congrats on a worthy win with this superb poem Richard..

Rob Carmack April 5, 2016 at 8:32 PM Impressive Richard. It was a good idea to have entered this into two contests. Excellent poem.

Jan Allison April 4, 2016 at 5:12 PM Quite a dark write Richard I was expecting a much more light hearted poem from the title - congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Timothy Hicks March 24, 2016 at 2:11 AM In the first stanza I thought this was going to be kind of a cute story about stealing an apple, and feeling guilty about it later ... but now I see it is a much darker story. Nice metaphor for making love ... how tragic that era was, that one felt compelled to make a quote-unquote "mixed breed", just to make a statement about the silliness of the "skin deep" judgement. An intriguing way you presented this thought-provoking read, Rick ... and mixing it up with the extra word challenge, too! Richard Lamoureux March 24, 2016 at 6:08 AM Thanks Tim. ;0)

Constance La France March 23, 2016 at 11:28 AM Rick your Pantoum is excellent, very nicely penned and I am loving it 7. . . Richard Lamoureux March 23, 2016 at 3:37 PM Thanks Constance.;0)

Eileen Manassian March 23, 2016 at 10:51 AM Wow. You did so well with this form...and what a theme. Injustice really burns me. I feel with those who were enslaved....with those who are still enslaved. Great write. Hugs. Richard Lamoureux March 23, 2016 at 3:36 PM Thanks Eileen, I know this to be true about how you feel. Hugs Rick.

Michael Tor March 22, 2016 at 10:21 AM Complex in it's form Richard and you have mastered it well. A winning entry for sure! Richard Lamoureux March 22, 2016 at 11:02 AM Thanks again Michael.

Casarah Nance March 22, 2016 at 9:52 AM Very interesting, you are great with the pantoum form! Richard Lamoureux March 22, 2016 at 9:58 AM I thought I would try something different for his contest. It was hard to tie the end in with the beginning.

Jai Bankson March 21, 2016 at 10:31 AM I just saw the contest this morning,forget one,,take'em all!!That was really well written..Really enjoyed that...Thank you.. Richard Lamoureux March 21, 2016 at 1:00 PM Thanks for the visits this morning. Much appreciated.

CayCay Godwin March 21, 2016 at 9:46 AM You did - you used them all and I quite enjoyed it. Great fiction, beautifully done ... CayCay Richard Lamoureux March 21, 2016 at 1:00 PM Thanks Cay Cay.

Sarah Jabri March 21, 2016 at 6:24 AM Brilliant work! no other words needed, a7 Richard Lamoureux March 21, 2016 at 7:47 AM Thanks Sarah.

Andrea Dietrich March 20, 2016 at 2:32 PM Interesting how you incorporated abolish as well, with the apple theme. I thought his challenge was a fairly easy one but you chose a rather difficult form for it, and you managed quite well, Richard!! Richard Lamoureux March 20, 2016 at 3:19 PM Yep, Apple, Anniversary, Angel, Apple and Abolish. Thanks for he visit Andrea.

Nette Onclaud March 20, 2016 at 1:44 PM well woven combining all the words into a superb piece, rich... huggs! Richard Lamoureux March 20, 2016 at 3:20 PM I wasn't sure if I would be able to still have the Pntoum make sense, but I think it worked okay.

Red Fiery March 19, 2016 at 1:08 PM Indeed a great write and a great take on a contest... 7/7... You did it brilliantly my dear... Hugs REd... Richard Lamoureux March 19, 2016 at 7:11 PM Thanks Red, the visit and 7 are much appreciated. Hugs back to you.

Cherl Dunn March 19, 2016 at 11:17 AM Dear Richard Love how you did this one, what a great topic so out of the ordinary, simply wonderful my poetic friend awesome job, cheri dunn Richard Lamoureux March 19, 2016 at 7:12 PM Thanks Cheryl, not sure if I hit the mark, not many comments on this one.