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The Aching Rain

The aching rain beats down on me
   I shield myself as best can be
Its piercing slants like stinging bees
   The cold damp wind goes right through me

My teeth do chatter up and down
   My body's shaking all around
No warmth retained, I'm 'bout to freeze
   Right through me howls the cold wet breeze

I spot whitecaps way out at sea
   The aching rain beats down on me
I shield myself as best can be
   Then shiver in the chill damp breeze

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Elaine Perrin Date: 10/13/2019 6:11:00 AM Chillingly beautiful, love the rhyme and rhythm :-) x Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/13/2019 11:05:00 AM Thank you, Elaine, for letting me know what you like about this poem. This kind of feedback really helps me! Appreciated. Warm wishes, Gershon

David Mchattie Date: 10/12/2019 5:44:00 PM I too felt a chill from reading your poem. We get that type of weather in Saskatchewan in early November. Not looking forward to it. Have a great day my friend. Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/12/2019 9:14:00 PM Saskatchewan! No kidding. Great to be corresponding with a Canadien. Never knew any before Poetry Soup. Now there's you and Line Gauthier. Thanks for the support, David. Best always, Gershon

Quoth Theraven Date: 10/12/2019 2:11:00 AM Gershon, This poem's bite is felt to the dampest part. But old soul remembers the cold best. -Richard Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/12/2019 9:12:00 PM Richard, thank you for a comment that was definitely 'felt' in my bones. Much appreciated. Take good care, Gershon

Sandra Adams Date: 10/11/2019 7:09:00 PM nothing worse then a cold rain lashing through the chilly winds...i feel this one and its numbing bite...great penning my friend...hugs :) Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/12/2019 9:11:00 PM Once again, I think I felt the influence of one S.A's penning as this one came together. Thank you for the inspiration!! Warm wishes, Gershon

Susan Ashley Date: 10/11/2019 2:49:00 PM Gershon, your rhythmic rhyme depicts the nor'ester we're experiencing here today perfectly. I felt every stormy line.. Fabulous imagery, my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/11/2019 4:05:00 PM Lol! Your warm humor never fails to bring me a smile, my long-lost friend. ‘Tis true, my time here has been severely limited these busy days, but it was such a pleasure to read your evocative poem today, Gershon. Gershon Wolf Date: 10/11/2019 3:35:00 PM Susan Ashley... Hmm... Don't I know you from somewhere? Let's see... Ashley... Ashley... Oh, yes. I remember. I used to see you a long time ago on Poetry Soup or some such website... LOL. Thank you so much for your inspirational comments, my long-lost friend. Warm and dry wishes! ~ Gershon

Judy Ball Date: 10/11/2019 2:21:00 PM Ooohoohoo! Get away from the water and go inside where it's warm. Great rhyme and rhythm. Really good imagery. Nice job. God Bless, JB Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/11/2019 3:33:00 PM Yeah! Nothing like a warm fireplace. Thanks, Judy! :) gw

Heidi Sands Date: 10/11/2019 2:08:00 PM It is getting like that here right now! You have described this perfectly and written the poem with a beat to it. Well done Gershon :) Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/11/2019 3:32:00 PM Interesting. It seems that much of the country is awash with rain, reading the comments. Thank you, Heidi. Warm (dry!) wishes, Gershon

Brenda Chiri Date: 10/11/2019 1:57:00 PM Wow had me shivering just reading this one! But brought a warm smile to my face lol just not warm enough after you wrote of rain, damp breezes , white caps! Lol loved it my friend!;) Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/11/2019 3:31:00 PM True, my friend. This had to be your chilliest 'warm smile' ever. LOL. Thanks, Brenda! :) gw