That Sinking Feeling

Murky sea this day as she wades chest deep
Battling strong waves with every step
No other swimmers, no lifeguards, no sun
Nary a gull on the beach so windswept

Solitude is her preference, she floats
Closes her eyes, attempts to clear her head
She’s tossed about, but opts to remain
She’d rather be here than alone in bed

Suddenly she feels a slippery nudge
To her feet she slips, scans surrounding sea
No life in sight, but she’s drifted out far
Her heart pumps fast, she swims feverishly

Another bump!  Is this her worst nightmare?
Sea creature preying ‘neath turbulent surf?
White caps surround and her cries reach no ears
A painful sting, she’s  p
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For Gareth's "Leave Me Hanging" challenge

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/4/2010 4:56:00 PM
Carolyn, I am glad you won big with this one. I pulled mine out. I am such an idiot. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/4/2010 10:33:00 AM
Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Gareth James's contest "Leave Me Hanging". Love, Carol
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Date: 6/14/2010 9:32:00 PM
I kept trying to find a poem of yours I'd not seen on that first page. I am not sure it exists! anyway, I recalled this one and that crazy contest that never was judged. GEEEEZ. What the HECK happened to it? All those great poems and I thought we would get to see eventually their endings after they were all judged!!
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Date: 5/10/2010 2:49:00 AM
A well written cryptic message, Carolyn! So many times we need help, there won't be anybody around to assist us or to lifeguard us! I like the open ending in this! And thank you for your comments and best wishes...Love, Gert
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Date: 4/25/2010 11:17:00 PM
mysteriously and deeply you left us hanging with a splendid poem for sure my friend,,i wish you all the best in the contest,,I have not been inspired for this one yet maybe I will be and maybe not,,anyway Thank you for all the visits,,,blessings ...Cecil
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Date: 4/23/2010 11:47:00 PM
that sinking feeling of no one listening to your words, knowing what you say makes all the more sense then what they believe.and all she wants if for them to hear these words. you did a lovely write on this, the "pulled" idea is a brilliant on with awesome art attached. have a wonderufl night. -Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 4/22/2010 12:57:00 PM
Very creative write Carolyn..really enjoyed it ..good luck in the contest...Allie
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Date: 4/22/2010 12:57:00 PM
GEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE Carolyn...this is chilly and Mysterious..Was it the shark from jaws..or the lochness monster which lies in Scotland Seas..:)..This is mysterious indeed..going to my favs.. I love the way you did the "|Pulled" thing..I have goose pimples.. Bravo ,you kept me hanging//Charma
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Date: 4/22/2010 12:12:00 PM
Chilling story, leaves me hanging alright, Carolyn. Great job with this write. Should be a winner for the contest. Thank you for your kind comments on my poem as always. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 4/22/2010 9:30:00 AM
Carolyn, Shades of the shower scene in "PSYCHO" and when the music in "JAWS" goes, Da-dump, Da-dump. I only swim in indoor pools, you made me nervous. Good luck in the contest. I Lov'd it! JT
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Date: 4/22/2010 9:24:00 AM
very nice good luck in the contest and thank you for all your comments and support appreciate it a lot faleshia
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Date: 4/22/2010 8:59:00 AM
Thankxxx Carolyn... after Ron leaves I get very inpired... and we really had a great time this time as he is quite willing to help me now that the job has waved bye bye.. he is my soul mate for sure... however.. we will see what the future indeed holds for us..luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 4/22/2010 8:58:00 AM
eeeee........eeeerrrrrrrrrrrrrr.....yuk........ I wonder if she made it back? Or did she meet her end? Yuk...makes me think her end! Leaves me hanging for more! Nicely done Carolyn, good luck in the contest! Thanks for your welcome comments on my 'Arum', glad you like it! Kindest thoughts as ever, Anna-Marie.
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Date: 4/22/2010 8:22:00 AM
Well this one will keep you on the edge of your chair....nice ending, good write...( have written and will post tomorrow 2 on the history of muling drugs....how it got it name on the 5Y, they turned out well I think..thanks Danny
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Date: 4/21/2010 7:52:00 PM
Accelerating heartbeat here- Great start! But if she gets pulled into an Alien ship ...
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Date: 4/21/2010 7:37:00 PM
This is a good imagination, so if I tell you what it was that nudged her you would just change you story and I never would know if I was right anyway. Therefore i will remain silent.Smile, Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/21/2010 7:15:00 PM
VERY Good hanging there!!! CAn't wait to see the ending, My ending is very short to finish mine up, is yours? Don't tell me who goes out tonight on Idol. I still have to go home and watch it after work. haha. Luv, andrea ps. I do hope a girl wins this time and Crystal is the most deserving.
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Date: 4/21/2010 5:05:00 PM
great hanger!! enjoyed! I have not canoed in a long time. I have canoed down the Flint River before, I enjoyed it back then.
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Date: 4/21/2010 4:34:00 PM
Ah, Carolyn...I am 'pulled' right down with you and hangin' on for the ending!...I can surely identify ya' know...Love the contrast between the first two verses and the second two - Tim
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Date: 4/21/2010 4:26:00 PM
Its like a scene from Jaws Carolyn. The shark see's seal, or is it human shaped form. For we are in its domain, so we are against its norm > god luck in the contest >> James
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