Terminal

I linger long after you've gone
and watch the coming of the dawn,
with crusted eyes from little sleep,
a cross to bear, a wound too deep
for me to cauterize or stitch,
an all-consuming, scratchless itch
that aggravates me to the core
and cruelly whispers nevermore.
A locket in my pocket and
a tear-stained kerchief in my hand,
emblems of a stillborn romance,
listlessly I change my stance
and wander mindlessly, my eyes
fixed firmly on the ground, the skies
are cold, the wind is gray, 
I never will forgive this day.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 2/20/2009 6:26:00 AM
I know this feeling all too well. Sometimes I still relive that last day...but I have managed to go on none the less...Good write my friend.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/14/2009 9:01:00 PM
Keith, I agree with Donna's remarks. I hope you have stopped the "all-consuming, scratchless itch." Well done, my friend. Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 1/30/2009 8:29:00 PM
Wow, this is so dramatic and piercing. This is very well written, for I can feel each emotion thtat you describe. "A locket in my pocket and a tear-stained kerchief in my hand, emblems of a stillborn romance," Fantastic! Blessings, Donna G.
Login to Reply
Date: 1/23/2009 7:12:00 AM
Wonderful poem, I was truly transported like i was watching from afar. And the ryhming is just...perfect. Love Leander
Login to Reply
Date: 1/22/2009 11:41:00 AM
I love your rhythm. I think the rhythm of this poem is what makes it so soothing as you read it. You get drawn in and your mind quiets and all you see are the words and the iambic flow. The way I read it, your rhythm drew me in so deep that I forgot the subject, then the last line snapped me out of it and I reread to grasp what you're actually saying. So there you go...the best poems invite the reader to keep reading long after the poem's over. That's my two cents anyway.
Login to Reply
Date: 1/22/2009 11:40:00 AM
Keith, this is so sad. The rhyme and flow are perfect, the imagery and emotion woven so beautifully through it. A heartfelt, very touching write. Love, Robin
Login to Reply
Date: 1/22/2009 8:15:00 AM
Excellent rhyme, and deep emotion in this terrific poem, Keith! ~ Well done...sad but great writing! ~ Carrie
Login to Reply
Date: 1/22/2009 7:33:00 AM
A very deeply felt write, and the rhyme works well as it seems to cut with each rhymed word, love, Kristin
Login to Reply
Date: 1/22/2009 5:09:00 AM
So sorry for this deep loss you write of. Such a feeling of overwhelming sadness and feeling lost, well expressed. Love, Shar
Login to Reply
Date: 1/22/2009 12:59:00 AM
Words escape me... the pain you've captured is just surreal... excellent write, absolutely excellent.
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter