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Walking..... I was walking... Like I have done every morning since we moved into this neighborhood. I stepped back and my sight caught a radiant monarch butterfly... It had four broad colorful wings, and very distinguishable from other butterflies I have seen. How can its chrysalis match the color of last night's sunset? A somber yellow, streaks of pink and a tiny hue of orange brilliantly shining between the Rocky Mountains. My breath was taken away as my heart idyllically swelled into oblivion, I remembered little Ella walking through the fields with her butterfly net, so free and angelic... I could have sworn I saw wings on her back, and a white light surrounding her. Oh, she was such a beauty, that sweet little girl. A picturesque sight for sore eyes. This is the felicity I have always dreamed of. A mother, watching her child grow into a miraculous child of God. For she is a female descendant of myself but I see so much of her daddy in her smile. A continuous plethora of tiny bundles of laughter and those big brown doe eyes that you can see a mile away. You should've seen her last night. She can not sleep without a dulcet of her favorite songs. So melodious and soothing for her sweet little soul. Every single morning she wakes rhapsodic full of enthusiasm and excitement. Tomorrow she is turning ten years old. Such a young lady who I am very proud to call my daughter. I have come to the realization that very soon she will be evanescent and off to find.. her own life... her own husband.. her own child... In my jewelry chest I found my elegant sapphire necklace. It just happens to be her birthstone. My mother had given it to me and now it's her turn to treasure it. How can she be such a beauty? How did I get so blessed? Sometimes I think that I used a talisman to create her she is so perfectly special and a tiny piece of heaven shines when I see her hair sweep gently in the breeze. The very next morning I was... Walking.. and thinking... as I encountered the trail leading to the river, there it was, the radiant monarch butterfly... Written By: Laura Loo Date Written : January 20, 2016

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Date: 1/23/2016 9:59:00 AM
You sure met Silent One's ten-word challenge very well, Laura! Such a lovely tribute to your dear, sweet daughter too. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/23/2016 10:31:00 AM
Thank you sweet Sandra :) Yes she is my itty bitty sweetheart..Very tiny and petite. *Smiles*-luloo
Date: 1/22/2016 1:24:00 PM
What a wonderful way with words, Laura! Wasn't this a fun challenge? And I love how different each poem turns out, with the same list of words as our muse! Your poem is as beautiful as the sweetheart in the picture !! What a beautiful daughter you have!
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Date: 1/23/2016 10:30:00 AM
aww thank you very much Carrie! You are so sweet! I didn't know you accepted the challenge too! I will be reading it next :) *smiles* Thank you -luloo
Date: 1/21/2016 5:34:00 PM
Laura, oh utterly beautiful, you painted a picture with your words, no a painting in my mind, tremendous writing, dear heart, tremendous ~
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Date: 1/21/2016 5:36:00 PM
Thank you Broken Wings very much. Your kind words are always appreciated...:) *smiles* Be blessed
Date: 1/21/2016 5:15:00 PM
you placed the words well...excellent write Laura
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Date: 1/20/2016 11:27:00 AM
Well done, Laura. Soup mail for you.
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Date: 1/20/2016 1:14:00 PM
Thank you sweet lady..and thank you for your help, it's much appreciated! have a lovely day Lin *smiles* -luloo

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