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I made for you, a castle But I built it in the sand I steadfastly tried to constrain the tide But the bastions didn't stand I planned for you, an Eden With needs to see us through But the ripened fruits had corrupted roots And I fed them all to you Tell the night to hold me I no longer have your arms I'll brood and swoon, cradled by the moon Still pining for your charms Tell the night to hold me June no longer follows May 'Til the moonbeams, blue, drift me back to you I'll forget about you ... every day. I dreamed for you, a family With two parts that acted one Yet my truth's demise only bred goodbyes Lucid of the tales I'd spun I wished for you a future Ripe with jubilance and mirth Still I left recanted and took for granted The measure of its worth Tell the night to hold me I no longer swim your eyes Instead I stare into vacant air And count the countless why's Tell the night to hold me 'Til Apollo's old and gray For until the stars are not mine, but OURS I'll forget about you ... every day. I desired for you a partner Who would stand beside you, true Though that came to be, that man wasn't ME And it broke my heart in two I promised you'd be happy And in ways, that's come to be Wed a man who's good - loves you as he should I just wish it had been me Tell the night to hold me It no longer heeds my will As I feared the most, I've become a ghost And I haven't tears to spill Tell the night to hold me For I've no more left to say Please remand what's just as I turn to dust And forget about you ... Every day ... 'Til I'm swept with wind, away. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Your Best Poem Ever" Premiere Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "N/A The Day Away" Poetry Contest, Lu Loo, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Your Choice (2), Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Poem of the Day" Poetry Contest, Richard Lamoureux, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Last Letter To My Beloved" Poetry Contest, Silent One, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Piece De Resistance" Poetry Contest, The Name Forsakes Me, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Lost Love 2017 Poetry Contest", John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Screwed XX" Poetry Contest, Rob Carmack, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Your Best Poem" Poetry Contest, Chantelle Anne Cooke, Judge & Sponsor. ~ Poem Of The Day ~ on Poetry Soup, featured and awarded on July 7, 2017 - thank you kindly, Admins! ~ Number 15 Top Poem ~ on Poetry Soup's Top 100 All-Time Best Poems List

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Date: 9/15/2020 10:03:00 AM
What an amazing creative work!! Brilliant!Fave!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 9/16/2020 8:41:00 AM
Thank you so very kindly, Krish, I greatly appreciate the wonderful comments, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/24/2020 6:51:00 PM
I see you entered this top poem of yours in Best Poem ever contest. So awesome, Greg!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 9/16/2020 8:40:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Andrea ... much appreciated! :-) <3
Date: 6/22/2020 9:38:00 AM
Gregory, it's a pleasure to return yet again with my hearty congratulations for another win with this exceptional poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:33:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Susan, that's very kind of you to say, my friend. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 6/22/2020 1:43:00 AM
I am glad to congratulate you on another win for this gem Greg. :)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:32:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Aditi - thank you so much, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 6/21/2020 5:18:00 AM
Congrats Gregory.. It is really a wonderful poem.. One of the best I read..
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:32:00 PM
What a wonderful comment, Jenish, thank you so very much! Blessings, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/20/2020 9:01:00 AM
Congrats, Gregory. This is an absolutely amazing write. Blessings, my friend.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:31:00 PM
Many kind thanks, Curtis, I greatly appreciate it, Friend! :o)
Date: 6/19/2020 4:58:00 PM
Another big congrats for this awesome write that keeps racking up the wins. Well done, poet!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:30:00 PM
Thank you so kindly, John - that means a lot! :o)
Date: 6/19/2020 3:21:00 PM
Yeah so here you are again Greg, it's a poem that I never tire of, I wasn't sure if you would enter this one but I'm glad you did. Congrats on a top win in my premium contest!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, John, I greatly appreciate the wonderful placement and thoughtful comment ... this is a very special win for me. Blessings, Bro! :o)
Date: 6/13/2020 5:55:00 PM
This is really a gem from your pen which I thankfully got to read because of this contest Greg! Subtle, soothing and intricately written with thoughtful references. Congratulations on your win :)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:41:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you as always, Aditi - I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! :o) <3
Date: 6/13/2020 6:05:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:41:00 AM
Blessings and thanks to you, Beata - much appreciated! <3
Date: 6/12/2020 8:46:00 PM
This one hits on all cylinders. Excellent in so many ways. Congrats, Greg.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:40:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Eric, thank you so much, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/12/2020 6:12:00 PM
Nice to see all the many honors you've garnered with this gem, Greg, including POTD and a podium win today. It's a really tight lyric with some cool internal rhymes, and that melancholy romantic vibe you are so great at. Bravo!
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Date: 6/17/2020 6:40:00 AM
Very kind of you to say so, John, and I thank you so much, Brother! :o)
Date: 6/12/2020 4:31:00 PM
A sad but beautiful tale of love. Congrats again.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:39:00 AM
Thanks so much, Jeanne! <3
Date: 6/12/2020 3:32:00 PM
Wow, congrats on your top win with this powerful poem, Gregory. Superb.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:39:00 AM
Thank you so much, Line, that is so appreciated, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 5/18/2020 10:42:00 PM
Wow, I just LOVE the beauty, emotion and flow of this outstanding piece....sending this to my FAVEs where I will cherish it! xx Rhonda
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:46:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Rhonda, I greatly appreciate the kind words and fave - I'm so pleased you found it worth your while, my friend! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 4/18/2020 11:49:00 AM
Greg, I'm going to have to have a talk with Rob about handed you a 2nd place for this, lol! Enjoyed the inner rhymes on each line 3, and I love the line 'forget about you every day'. I can see why this is a favorite for your readers, Greg. It's sad and beautiful, and replete with gorgeous images and phrases. ~ John
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:44:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, John, this is a great comment, and I'm so happy you liked this one - it is certainly special to me, that's for sure. Not really MY favorite, but ONE of them, and favorite among other people for sure. Blessings, Brother! :o)
Date: 2/25/2020 1:26:00 PM
I wanted to congratulate you and all of your winnings of contests. I think you have the most beautiful poems!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:39:00 PM
You are so very kind, Louise, and I thank you so much! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 9/21/2019 4:08:00 PM
Wow G over 6000 views, this one is special, I said it would win every contest you enter it.....see....see...I told you! Back for the 41st read and still get the chills!!! Creeping into the top 15 of top 100 all time woohoo!!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:39:00 PM
Thanks so much, John, yes, you had a premonition about this one, and I'm thankful you did - you're my lucky charm, ha! Blessings, Bud! :o)
Date: 9/7/2019 9:05:00 AM
So glad to see this piece has garnered another win.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 9/10/2019 9:15:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Richard, this one has been popular, at least by my meager standards, lol. So happy you enjoyed this one, my friend - blessings! :o)
Date: 9/7/2019 7:41:00 AM
OMG, this masterwork was N/A? Really, Greg? Color me shocked! This was one of the very first poems I faved, just so you know. Congrats on your well-deserved top win!:-)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 9/10/2019 9:14:00 AM
Oh, thank you, thank you, Sir Edward - that means a lot to me, as does this poem, which goes back to my "early" days of writing - almost three years now. I'm so pleased and thankful, and blessings to you, Good Friend! :o)
Date: 9/7/2019 2:03:00 AM
I love that you went back all they way to 2017- the rhyme spot on and rhythm perfect. I could hear a melody in the background as I was reading it. Great poem dear Gregory. Thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 9/10/2019 9:12:00 AM
Thank you SO much, Lu Loo!! This one is special to me, and one that has stood the test of time, (well, the couple years I've been writing anyway, lol), and brought me a lot of exposure, so I'm very pleased you found it worthy of placement. Blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 6/8/2019 7:25:00 PM
It is such a pleasure to return and offer my heartfelt congratulations for your win with this extraordinary poem and to partake of its beauty once more. It is so worthy of another top placement, Gregory. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/9/2019 12:24:00 AM
That's so very kind of you, Susan, and I thank you so much for the thoughtful and heartfelt comments you've given ... you are such a wonderful poet, and always so honest with your words ... this means a lot to me! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 6/6/2019 11:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your deserving first place win with this award winning poem my friend! : )
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/7/2019 12:02:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Connie, and I thank you so kindly ... blessings to you, Dear Poet! :-) <3
Date: 5/3/2019 8:24:00 AM
Blessings to you as well Gregory.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 5/3/2019 8:32:00 AM
Thank you, my friend! :-)
Date: 4/27/2019 5:41:00 PM
So happy to be back again to congratulate you on yet another win for this amazing Lyric poem, Greg! Poem of the Day is not a small thing! I have only experienced it twice in nearly five years! Happy to see this at the top again! Sandra <3 :)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 4/28/2019 8:18:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Sandra, it IS rather fun to get a POTD nod and all the wonderful comments that come with it ... I wish it happened more often, lol. Blessings, Dear Poet! :-) <3
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