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tell the night to hold me - Premiere Contest Winner

I made your shining castle
but I built it ‘pon the sand
and steadfastly tried
to constrain the tide
but the bastions didn’t stand

I worked to bloom your Eden
with the wares to see us thru
but the ripened fruits
grew corrupted roots
and I shared them all with you

     oh tell the night to hold me
     I’m no longer in your arms
     I will brood and swoon
     cradled by the moon
     ever pining for your charms

     yes tell the night to hold me
     June no longer follows May
     'til the moonlight blue
     beams me back to you
     I'll forget about you ... every day

I dreamed for you one family
love to last while we grew old
yet my truth's demise
bred our sad goodbyes
with the wealth of tales I told

I wished your brightest future
lush with jubilance and mirth
still I found recanted
and took for granted
the grand measure of its worth

     oh tell the night to hold me
     I no longer swim your eyes
     now instead I stare
     thru this vacant air
     as I count the countless why's

     yes tell the night to hold me
     ‘til Apollo's aged and gray
     for unless these stars
     are not mine but ours
     I'll forget about you ... every day

I prayed for the knight in armor
who would stand beside you true
though it came to be
that man wasn't ME
and that ripped my heart in two

I promised that you'd be happy
and in ways, that's come to be
wed a man who's good -
loves you as he should
though I wish it had been … me

     oh tell the night to hold me
     it no longer heeds my will
     as I feared the most
     I've become a ghost
     and I’ve no tears left to spill

     yes tell the night to hold me
     I've got nothing more to say
     I’ll remand what's just
     as I’m turned to dust
     and forget about you ... every day

'til I'm swept by winds … away.






~ 1st Place ~  in the "Your Best Poem Ever" Premiere Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "N/A The Day Away" Poetry Contest, Lu Loo, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "Your Choice (2), Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "Poem of the Day" Poetry Contest, Richard Lamoureux, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "Last Letter To My Beloved" Poetry Contest, Silent One, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "Piece De Resistance" Poetry Contest, The Name Forsakes Me, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "Lost Love 2017 Poetry Contest", John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Screwed XX" Poetry Contest, Rob Carmack, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Your Best Poem" Poetry Contest, Chantelle Anne Cooke, Judge & Sponsor.

~ Poem Of The Day ~  on Poetry Soup, featured and awarded on July 7, 2017 - thank you kindly, Admins!

~ Number 16 Top Poem ~  on Poetry Soup's Top 100 All-Time Best Poems List

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 5/7/2025 7:50:00 AM
This poem wrenched my heart out of chest, set it on fire, and then spit on the ashes. Thank you for writing this, and I wish you solace, life, and love. Be Blessed always, Hiba.
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Date: 5/2/2025 1:14:00 AM
I was moved by this poem, wrenched as appears to be from the depths of a tortured soul. I genuinely love the limerick form you have used. The whole thing works extremely well.
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Date: 5/1/2025 10:27:00 PM
Hello Gregory, this is a masterpiece of beauty and brilliance. Congratulations on all your wins with it. Sending Blessings your way, fellow poet.
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Date: 5/1/2025 4:08:00 PM
OMG! What an incredible piece of poetic artistry! This masterpiece was like musical piece that reached a crescendo that left every listener breathless, speechless, and in awe...and then the gentle descent into sadness. Thank you for sharing!
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Date: 10/7/2023 10:46:00 AM
This is beautiful! Thanks for sharing
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/26/2024 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so much for the kind comment! :o)
Date: 9/29/2023 11:40:00 PM
I just started peering through some of the top poems here from the past. And well, so far this is my favorite. Its a wonderful read. Heart felt and deep. I read it aloud to my sweetheart. He agreed. I am going to have to spelunk through the rest of your poems now.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/26/2024 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so very kindly, I’m so pleased you enjoyed this poem - you made my day! So sorry for the late reply, but I don’t get here much of late - hope to change that soon. Blessings! :o)
Date: 8/26/2023 8:59:00 AM
Wow what an impeccable write this is, i am truly in awe. I can see why this is a top poem and is placed 1st by so many especially silent one. I felt so much reading this poignant write. The soul stirring cadence and depth of this is just so very deeply moving and touching. So good to read poems as brilliant as this. Loved this , Ink
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/26/2024 9:58:00 AM
Thank you so kindly, my friend, I’m apologize for the late reply, but I’m not able to come here very often, though I hope to change that sometime soon. I’m so pleased you liked this one! :o)
Date: 6/18/2023 12:43:00 AM
This was very moving and conveyed more than just what the words said. Beautiful.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/18/2023 6:14:00 AM
Thank you so much, Mara, that’s very kind of you!
Date: 4/7/2022 7:53:00 PM
slowly this crept line by line thru me washing me with emotions and delving into its inspiration....i walked away fulfilled...thank you
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Timothy Ray
Date: 5/19/2023 12:02:00 PM
i came to read again because of the soul within this and i see the magnificence that is love....where in the depth of sorrow there is love in its purest form....forgiveness, forgetting, and moving on....speaks loudly of maturation....and intelligence
Date: 11/23/2021 3:02:00 PM
Breathtaking and magnificent, you certainly deserved to be in the #1 spot! Blessings, Paulette
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Date: 9/15/2020 10:03:00 AM
What an amazing creative work!! Brilliant!Fave!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/16/2020 8:41:00 AM
Thank you so very kindly, Krish, I greatly appreciate the wonderful comments, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/24/2020 6:51:00 PM
I see you entered this top poem of yours in Best Poem ever contest. So awesome, Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/16/2020 8:40:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Andrea ... much appreciated! :-) <3
Date: 6/22/2020 9:38:00 AM
Gregory, it's a pleasure to return yet again with my hearty congratulations for another win with this exceptional poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:33:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Susan, that's very kind of you to say, my friend. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 6/22/2020 1:43:00 AM
I am glad to congratulate you on another win for this gem Greg. :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:32:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Aditi - thank you so much, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 6/21/2020 5:18:00 AM
Congrats Gregory.. It is really a wonderful poem.. One of the best I read..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:32:00 PM
What a wonderful comment, Jenish, thank you so very much! Blessings, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/20/2020 9:01:00 AM
Congrats, Gregory. This is an absolutely amazing write. Blessings, my friend.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:31:00 PM
Many kind thanks, Curtis, I greatly appreciate it, Friend! :o)
Date: 6/19/2020 4:58:00 PM
Another big congrats for this awesome write that keeps racking up the wins. Well done, poet!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:30:00 PM
Thank you so kindly, John - that means a lot! :o)
Date: 6/19/2020 3:21:00 PM
Yeah so here you are again Greg, it's a poem that I never tire of, I wasn't sure if you would enter this one but I'm glad you did. Congrats on a top win in my premium contest!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, John, I greatly appreciate the wonderful placement and thoughtful comment ... this is a very special win for me. Blessings, Bro! :o)
Date: 6/13/2020 5:55:00 PM
This is really a gem from your pen which I thankfully got to read because of this contest Greg! Subtle, soothing and intricately written with thoughtful references. Congratulations on your win :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:41:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you as always, Aditi - I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! :o) <3
Date: 6/13/2020 6:05:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:41:00 AM
Blessings and thanks to you, Beata - much appreciated! <3
Date: 6/12/2020 8:46:00 PM
This one hits on all cylinders. Excellent in so many ways. Congrats, Greg.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:40:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Eric, thank you so much, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/12/2020 6:12:00 PM
Nice to see all the many honors you've garnered with this gem, Greg, including POTD and a podium win today. It's a really tight lyric with some cool internal rhymes, and that melancholy romantic vibe you are so great at. Bravo!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:40:00 AM
Very kind of you to say so, John, and I thank you so much, Brother! :o)
Date: 6/12/2020 4:31:00 PM
A sad but beautiful tale of love. Congrats again.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:39:00 AM
Thanks so much, Jeanne! <3
Date: 6/12/2020 3:32:00 PM
Wow, congrats on your top win with this powerful poem, Gregory. Superb.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/17/2020 6:39:00 AM
Thank you so much, Line, that is so appreciated, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 5/18/2020 10:42:00 PM
Wow, I just LOVE the beauty, emotion and flow of this outstanding piece....sending this to my FAVEs where I will cherish it! xx Rhonda
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:46:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Rhonda, I greatly appreciate the kind words and fave - I'm so pleased you found it worth your while, my friend! Blessings! :o) <3
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