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oh, my precious child,
let me kiss away your weep -
do not be troubled, the moon but bids good night,

       stars whispering their ancient lullaby,

swallowing not, the western reach,
but merely giving pause to the day, waking
so that the grateful star of morn
should adorn its burgeoning bosom.

let not the salty seep of your cheek yet trill
such certain and elegant inequity there be,
should a stain darken that pinafore, pressed.
a scandal be my name with thy mother,
should those eyes dampen your Sunday best,
and surely not for the sake of Luna's languor -
oh, such dire dalliance, that!

       I adore thee, my wee lass
       boundless are the ways -
       echoed in your mother's smile
       there, so deep your gaze.

'tis true, his aged face did blush, fleeting,
dipping his dusty chin to the sea,
but it was for Sol's regard only,

       their goodnight kiss - pressed tender, a-cheek

and no misfortune was spun.

we shall return, my child, sooner than soon,
and you will bear witness their recurrence!
your old man moon will beg company again,
with his patient aspect beaming -
shimmering bright for your veneration -

       soft, soft, so daubs the moon
       soft as bluebells blooming -
       wan on skin to softly swoon
       e'er a dream's consuming.

oh, I vow this to you, my daughter!
you shall dance again on this shore,
bound and prance, my tiny ballerina!
you will twirl in the breath of evening, I am sure,
lit by the gangling glow, star-ward,
and tonight's lament will seem a silly song,
you shall see and be heartened, my little one!

and should I yet kiss that weep away, too?
ah, but joyous, those tears...
and as the heavens themselves,

       and the best born of a father's heart,

how immeasurable their number!

       oh, my darling, precious child!

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Date: 6/24/2021 5:06:00 PM
Joe showed up right on cue as I was chatting to you on Messenger!! but I am trying to still do as many comments as I can
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Date: 6/24/2021 5:05:00 PM
So filled with joy and love for your daughter. I think it's wonderful how close you are with yours and also with your dad who passed away. This was another very beautiful poem of yours, Greg.
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Date: 6/21/2021 7:26:00 PM
This is beautiful Greg. I hope you had a wonderful Father’s Day. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 6/20/2021 10:34:00 PM
A brilliant poem, Greg:)
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Date: 6/20/2021 8:46:00 AM
And it is themed on Apollo , no less. Does my heart good to see a fellow poet entering that realm and gifting golden verses on the greatness that was Greece and its ancient religion, its magnificent and truly enjoyable mythology. God bless...
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/16/2021 1:10:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Roberto!
Date: 6/20/2021 8:43:00 AM
My dear friend, I simply must bow to the magnificent creation that is this new poem that you have so generously and faithfully given to us to read and enjoy. This to me , an old poet is every bit as great as the poems of the golden masters of old. A fav- a true gem!!!! God bless.....
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