Lin Lane Poet Monorhyme

Tears At Midnight: a Monorhyme

Faithful in troth's plight, I wait for my knight
Bridal gown of white stained as tears alight
Still no groom in sight at strokes of midnight
Fireflies take to flight in pale candlelight
I glean no delight in their glow tonight
In sallow moonlight my heart grows contrite



April 28th, 2017
John Hamilton's Monorhyme

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Joseph May April 30, 2017 at 4:47 PM Congrats on your win Lin Lin Lane April 30, 2017 at 7:06 PM Thank you, Joseph, and I see larger congrats go to you.

Paul Callus April 30, 2017 at 2:32 PM How sad! What a letdown for the bride in white! A monorhyme with internal rhyme is never going to be easy, Lin, but you certainly rose to the occasion! Best regards // paul Lin Lane April 30, 2017 at 2:35 PM Thank you, Paul, however my rhymes were not difficult enough to score higher with the judge. hmmm A 3rd place went to rhymes of fly, sky, why, cry. Why cry indeed...lol I appreciate your encouragement, as always.

John Hamilton April 30, 2017 at 2:20 PM Great entry Lin I really enjoy your use of not often used words "sallow" for example. Next time maybe try a rhyme with a little more difficulty, 6 words using light brought score down a little, but I enjoyed it anyway! Lin Lane April 30, 2017 at 2:40 PM thanks, John

Eve Roper April 29, 2017 at 6:36 PM Very beautiful, Lin,,~* a 7 Lin Lane April 29, 2017 at 10:48 PM Thank you very much, Eve.

Tim Smith April 29, 2017 at 8:52 AM It is well before midnight Lin... terrific poem Lin Lane April 29, 2017 at 10:48 PM I've buried my clocks. Thank you, Tim.

Joanna Daniel April 29, 2017 at 8:04 AM This can be a terribly sad situation to be in, Lin, and you have brought out the sadness well:) hope to see this place high:) a 7:) Lin Lane April 30, 2017 at 11:59 AM Thanks ever so much for your comments and well wishes, Jo.

Darren White April 29, 2017 at 12:26 AM Glad to read it is fiction, but still, incredibly good and equally sad! Good luck in the contest. Lin Lane April 30, 2017 at 11:58 AM Thanks so very much, Darren.

Andrea Dietrich April 28, 2017 at 8:58 PM this is one of the better ones I have seen Lin. Love it! I have to hurry so fast and think something up for this contest!!! Lin Lane April 28, 2017 at 11:19 PM Thank you very much, Andrea. I'm sure you'll come up with something fantastic.

Kim Rodrigues April 28, 2017 at 7:40 PM Such a sad one, Lin! GL on contest! Lin Lane April 28, 2017 at 8:39 PM Thanks ever so much for the comments and well wishes, Kim.

Glen Schwartz April 28, 2017 at 7:13 PM Great Write !! I can feel the pain within .. Lin Lane April 28, 2017 at 7:15 PM Hello, Glen, and thank you very much for reading and commenting.

Jan Allison April 28, 2017 at 7:09 PM aww so sad a rhyme Lin In the past I have written poems on a similar subject but thankfully its a fiction write for me - it must be hard to deal with being jilted at the altar:-( hugs Jan x Lin Lane April 28, 2017 at 7:12 PM I can only imagine how terrible that would be. Fiction here, too. Thanks, Jan.