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Taunting the Dragon Premiere Contest Winner

My head rests on the doorframe, as I'm watching him at work. I'm jealous of the devotion, and the motion of his hands, much surprised at the green-eyed dragon that lurks within my mind, while he rubs the pungent oil into muscles of the pine. With rolled up sleeves, a sweaty brow, his rough, sandpaper hands. he hones a smile along the aisle of every strand of wood With even strokes, a time-worn cloak is peeled back and released, where the onion skin of years and wear had been entombed beneath the grain He groans with satisfaction, (this Frankenstein, of mine), while something worn, and tossed away, is brought to life. Back from the dead A shimmering sheen, patina gleams while morning light slides in, I think I see a swirl of smoke that curls above his head And the warmth of the wood has sizzled hot, as if the sun came up No awareness of the passion, engrained upon his face, he sees me not, .... or my jealous want,.......His needs have been erased. The lingering scent of linseed has claimed my breathing space There are swarming nests of sawdust , cart-wheeling in the air, a strand of hair, falls out of place.......and I cannot tear my eyes from here The sensual, taunting, simple grace.......my eyes have begged to stay I stare and marvel, for awhile A shiver up my spine, implores.....to touch the man I face, release his trancelike state of mind, and let his fingers trace ________________________________________

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Date: 7/6/2018 1:42:00 PM
Carrie, congratulations on your top win in Anthony's contest, with this beautifully penned poem, well done !
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Date: 7/4/2018 10:11:00 PM
Masterfully penned, Carrie. Congrats on your well deserved gold medal finish.
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Date: 7/4/2018 2:39:00 PM
Wonderful poem, Carrie, love the way you used the word "patina".. excellent .. Congratulations on your win... Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/4/2018 12:29:00 PM
This is an amazing write. I was watching with you. Congratulations on your #1 win!
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Date: 7/4/2018 12:28:00 PM
A top winner! I take great pleasure in sending congratulations to you, Carrie!
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Date: 7/4/2018 10:01:00 AM
A very detailed and intricate poem. Congratulations on your win Carrie!
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Date: 7/3/2018 10:14:00 PM
So much beauty here to appreciate in your breathtaking poem, Carrie. I was as captivated watching your man at work as you were :) Sensual, emotional and magical.. the imagery in your poem is rich, delicious and seductive. Stunning poetry and a fav! Congratulations on your well deserved and excellent trophy win, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/3/2018 9:19:00 PM
An oldie but goldie; glad you dusted this one off and shared it with us, Carrie, congrats on your win. John
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Date: 7/3/2018 2:16:00 PM
Excellent tale, imagery, and denouement, Carrie -- and congrats on the earning a well-deserved 1st prize! ~ gw
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Date: 7/3/2018 1:11:00 PM
Congrats on your win with this awesome poem. I love the subtle internal rhyme; it really comes out when reading aloud.
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Date: 1/3/2015 8:57:00 AM
Interesting and fantastic write on the theme of jealousy, congrats on the win, carrie
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Date: 1/3/2015 2:01:00 AM
Congrats on your fine win Carrie... huggs
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Date: 1/2/2015 11:30:00 PM
CARRIE, Congratulations on your win. Awesome "Green-Eyed Monster, poem." Love LINDA
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Date: 1/2/2015 2:54:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Carrie:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/2/2015 2:49:00 PM
As a winner of my contest, I congratulate you! Verlena
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Date: 10/5/2014 3:34:00 PM
This content is #1, I would challenge you to use periods if you capitalize the beginning of a sentence, & revisit the use of comma, ... & ; Carrie Carrie uses internal slant rhyme in line 6 smile/aisle strokes/cloaks - such a visually & tactically evocative verse! Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 10/5/2014 11:14:00 AM
Wow! Carrie! loving and seductive write; your take on this them is very original; I can picture this unfolding in black and white or sepia. // Congratulations...very merited top placing. // paul
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Date: 10/4/2014 5:32:00 PM
This is an amazing piece Carrie. From the beginning I was hooked up with the story and wanted to hear more, and many times I repeated the sentence or even the stanza twice or sometimes more just to relive the situation. Descriptive and coherent, really smooth poem, congrats for the first place... HSK AlKendi
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Date: 10/4/2014 11:52:00 AM
What a wonderful write Carrie:-) many congrats on your win. hugs jan xxx
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:33:00 AM
endearing sweet poem Carrie.. :) I love best the cart-wheeling line and the next lines.. :) wow!!! I am humbled to share the same spot. :) God bless us all. :) CONGRATULATIONS!
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:27:00 AM
What a lovely write Carrie! Congrats on ur top win my friend!
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:26:00 AM
Hi Carrie, This was a very interesting, thought provoking tale. Congratulations on your win. Keep up the good work. Take care. Earl
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:52:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Carrie. What a beautiful tribute.
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:36:00 AM
Nice write with tributes to your husband, congrats on the top place win, carrie
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win. I love this poem to bits and pieces.
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