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Joseph May's Rhymes in Nine 2 Contest October 23,2024

(1) I was frightened in the dark; my panic heightened tonight by eerie carved faces that left me teary eyed in the park I froze when I heard evil caws from a murder of crows in flight I was taunted by friends to go in this haunted place of gloom My skin bristled; the wind whistled. I was a ghost's mark. Tried to scream to wake myself from this horrid dream of doom I was chided so decided to be brave and opened the door There was a grave bearing my name. Was this a game, a lark? I'd find new friends. These can never make amends. Nevermore

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Joseph May

Date: 10/27/2024 11:54:00 AM

Scary write Lin, Very nicely penned, Congrats on your win

Lin Lane
Date: 10/27/2024 10:56:00 PM

Hi Joseph, and thanks for liking this one well enough for a placement in your contest. I'm honored.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/24/2024 9:47:00 AM

Dear Lin, you do rhymes so well and this surely is a challenging form but youv written one with very unique rhymes in such a creative storytelling manner for the picture prompt! I love the way youv ended it shows the character of one that would rise above any that would prank in such a manner, friends or otherwise! Fits the halloween vibe too right now: i love the most “ I froze when I heard evil caws from a murder of crows in flight“ the darkness and imagery youv painted here is brilliant! Best wishes for the contest. Sending you light always

Lin Lane
Date: 10/24/2024 10:22:00 AM

Ink, I commend you for always offering me detailed remarks. They are never just a few simple words that leave me wondering, 'hmmm, did she really read my poem?" Every comment you've ever given me shows that you've understood exactly what I meant and felt. I appreciate the time you take to point out what you enjoyed the most. You're always supportive and encouraging, a trait that I value.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/23/2024 1:09:00 PM

You rose well to the challenge with this spooky tale Lin and you've fulfilled all the contest requirements with ease. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 10/23/2024 1:31:00 PM

I'll have to get you some pom poms to shake, Tom for being one of my cheerleaders. Easy? Not by a long shot. I posted it earlier and then realized I'd NOT fulfilled one of the requirements, so it was back to the brain trust, hoping this time I got it right. Thanks, my friend.

Chris Green

Date: 10/23/2024 1:04:00 PM

Very cool my friend. Dark and eerie. I assume this is for a contest (the bold font words a giveaway) If so, best wishes, this looks like a winner to me.

Lin Lane
Date: 10/23/2024 1:08:00 PM

Hi, Chris and thanks so very much for your visit. They are much too few and far between. How are things in Texas?

Chris Green
Date: 10/23/2024 1:05:00 PM

Oops, just saw the reference to the contest at the top of the page. Good luck!!