Joanna Daniel Poet Tail-rhyme

Tattered Fashion Inspiration

I saw him sitting on the street, 
With open arms and folded feet,
A beggar with a bowl,
He had on him a tattered jeans,
And matted locks that proved his means,
A poor and hungry soul;

I saw him coming out his car,
A rockstar with a new guitar,
The hero of the crowd,
A tattered jeans he had on him,
Uncombed long hair, unshaved face grim,
A rich brat spoilt and proud;

The beggar sat with hair not shorn,
Coz of no dough, his dress was torn,
I could understand that,
But that rich guy in clothes tattered,
Inspired by a beggar battered,
I think fashion fell flat.


08.23.17



Contest: Form T
Sponsor: Broken Wings 

Theme: Tattered 
Form: Tail-Rhyme 

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Andrea Dietrich September 11, 2017 at 5:55 PM Seeing this one again that I liked so much and big congrats on the win!!

Eve Roper September 9, 2017 at 12:50 PM Oh, you just brought up a subject that I cannot understand. My 11 year old granddaughter tries to get me to buy her torn up jeans and I do everything for her, but in this case my answers is " NO! "But that is the style grandma..."Jo, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~`*

Cindi Rockwell September 8, 2017 at 9:34 AM Like this very much -- the obvious difference in circumstance creating a mockery of the rich man's existence. Great work!

Alesia Leach September 2, 2017 at 7:20 PM Interesting that a poor beggar can be their inspiration. Great imagery! Best of luck in the contest.

Janis Medders Tobechi August 27, 2017 at 1:05 PM It makes you wonder where the idea came from. Wonderful tail-rhyme which took great skill. Good luck in the contest.

Andrea Dietrich August 25, 2017 at 6:03 PM Yes, it's something to think about. I like how you made such a thoughtful poem out of that theme, Jo. You are amazing.

Joseph May August 25, 2017 at 11:04 AM Very well expressed Jo..GL in the contest

Anne-Lise Andresen August 25, 2017 at 8:00 AM - Fashion picture is bad .... lots of money for holes in the pants ... - Great written, Jo :) - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Alexis Y. August 23, 2017 at 6:37 PM Hi Jo, I agree with Victor, this is a good contrast. It's looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis

Nette Onclaud August 23, 2017 at 12:51 PM the polarity of your theme amazes me, jo... job well done!...huggs

Dorian Petersen Potter August 23, 2017 at 12:09 PM Very wonderful piece Jo! I like all the fashion contrast from one subject to the next and the last line, just made me smile very big.Well done! Wish you the best in this contest!Be blessed!:) D.

Lin Lane August 23, 2017 at 11:02 AM Fashion sense for the senseless. Kind of ridiculous isn't it? The rich should buy food for the poor with the $200 they spend on those jeans. In exchange, the ones in need would give them original tattered jeans. You bring up a good point, Jo.