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Tattered Fashion Inspiration

I saw him sitting on the street, With open arms and folded feet, A beggar with a bowl, He had on him a tattered jeans, And matted locks that proved his means, A poor and hungry soul; I saw him coming out his car, A rockstar with a new guitar, The hero of the crowd, A tattered jeans he had on him, Uncombed long hair, unshaved face grim, A rich brat spoilt and proud; The beggar sat with hair not shorn, Coz of no dough, his dress was torn, I could understand that, But that rich guy in clothes tattered, Inspired by a beggar battered, I think fashion fell flat. 08.23.17 Contest: Form T Sponsor: Broken Wings Theme: Tattered Form: Tail-Rhyme

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Date: 9/11/2017 5:55:00 PM
Seeing this one again that I liked so much and big congrats on the win!!
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Date: 9/9/2017 12:50:00 PM
Oh, you just brought up a subject that I cannot understand. My 11 year old granddaughter tries to get me to buy her torn up jeans and I do everything for her, but in this case my answers is " NO! "But that is the style grandma..."Jo, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 9/8/2017 9:34:00 AM
Like this very much -- the obvious difference in circumstance creating a mockery of the rich man's existence. Great work!
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Date: 9/2/2017 7:20:00 PM
Interesting that a poor beggar can be their inspiration. Great imagery! Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/27/2017 1:05:00 PM
It makes you wonder where the idea came from. Wonderful tail-rhyme which took great skill. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/25/2017 6:03:00 PM
Yes, it's something to think about. I like how you made such a thoughtful poem out of that theme, Jo. You are amazing.
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Date: 8/25/2017 11:04:00 AM
Very well expressed Jo..GL in the contest
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Date: 8/25/2017 8:00:00 AM
- Fashion picture is bad .... lots of money for holes in the pants ... - Great written, Jo :) - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/23/2017 6:37:00 PM
Hi Jo, I agree with Victor, this is a good contrast. It's looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis
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Date: 8/23/2017 12:51:00 PM
the polarity of your theme amazes me, jo... job well done!...huggs
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Date: 8/23/2017 12:09:00 PM
Very wonderful piece Jo! I like all the fashion contrast from one subject to the next and the last line, just made me smile very big.Well done! Wish you the best in this contest!Be blessed!:) D.
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Date: 8/23/2017 11:02:00 AM
Fashion sense for the senseless. Kind of ridiculous isn't it? The rich should buy food for the poor with the $200 they spend on those jeans. In exchange, the ones in need would give them original tattered jeans. You bring up a good point, Jo.
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