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Written for the contest sponsored by Constance La France

Tattered

“A tattered soul isn’t always dark; there’s light within, amidst broken wings. Only a hyacinth heart would see the sun when it rains. ” ~
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I 
am like
tattered twigs
on dying trees,
facing freckled skies~
watered with blooming grief,
as tainted roots of life-lines~
keeps carrying emerald scars,
scattered along feathered rain-forests,
where devious dragonflies and cross-eyed~
crickets croon remnants of forgotten times.
There, fluorescent wild-flowers eavesdrop,
mocking tales of my weathered wings.
But will the rain ever see
how the sun in my soul
still spreads rose gold light,
across torn skies,
adorned with 
splintered
dreams… 
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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La France Avatar
April 23, 2024 at 5:15 AM
Ink, congratulations on your win in my contest with this outstanding poem, I love the quote too, Constance
George Avatar
March 20, 2024 at 1:07 PM
Congratulations love. Kudos dear Ink.
Blodgett Avatar
March 17, 2024 at 10:30 AM
Your use of words conjure such a love for the strength and stamina of the human spirit and you have metaphorically expressed this beautiful understanding of its nature. Breathtaking. Lonna
Goldsmith Avatar
March 15, 2024 at 9:41 AM
Congratulations on your win. Your "Tattered" is a wonderful Etheree write. Love your quote... Have a blessed day/weekend writing away.................
Baker Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 10:09 PM
Nice entry for the contest, my dear friend. I always enjoy your use of alliteration in your poetry. Your follow the words of challenge with words of hope. That is good for us readers to hear, Inky. Love and Light always, Bill
George Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 7:35 PM
I loved it, dear Ink. One thing is sure, wings grow and you'll soar so far above the sky. That's a powerful quote up there, really takes a special someone to see the sun when it rains. Nice entry, success.
Hind Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 5:49 PM
Dear Ink... I absolutely love your quote, and the poem...it's beautiful. Wishing you love, light, and healing today-
Beaufort Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 3:05 PM
IE, the poem ends with a question. Makes me think of how a botanist can take a dying twig and bring it to life as a new plant. I often find myself thinking about things that didn't go the way I wanted at the time. This is all part of a learning curve and thought process that we hope takes us to a better frame of reference. I have subject folders inside my brain that seem to get opened easily--I'm wondering about others. I am often surprised by these thoughts and what triggers them.
Poet Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 9:49 AM
I am enamored by the captivating aesthetics of the Etheree form; it exudes an individualistic allure. The imagery you conjure, dear Ink, is truly enchanting, akin to tattered twigs gracing withering leaves. Furthermore, your skillful use of alliteration, such as devious dragonflies and cross-eyed crickets, adds a delightful touch. I found solace in the notion that amidst adversity, the prospect of light and rejuvenation persists. Your poetic voice and stylistic prowess are truly remarkable.
Hamilton Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 3:56 AM
so so lovely Ink and impressive too the flow is beautiful love it a fav for me hugs Shadow
Dietrich Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 9:31 PM
I always love a good etheree and this is one. You put a great ending on it.
Empress Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 1:03 AM
Ah sweet andrea. yes ofcourse you are the queen of etherees and clerihews and also sonnets. You do them so well: im honored tl receive your feedback
Herrick Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 6:51 PM
The wild-flowers are young and have not the capacity to see those weathered wings show where the emerald scars came into being or experienced enough to know that hope through resilience and belief can see the sun in the rain and see a parched land blessed with rain, under dark skies where the light may lie hudden for a time to peak through,make a cricket go cross-eyed temporarily, a dragonfly be a deviant familiar championing. Wild-Flower, your outer beauty about to be tutored by inner strength.
Empress Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 1:01 AM
Im shocked after reading your comment, you are the only one here in comments that really understood what the etheree is about, perhaps you are right, wildflowers are too young to see the emerald scars beneath weathered wings .your comment is poetry too. You are very good with metaphors and personifying things: not many on here are readers like you except one or two. Thank you for making me feel heard. I appreciate your support
Greenhough Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 1:21 PM
Poem of hope and refusal hits to my heart. Life goes on. Many thanks.
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 3:17 PM
Thank you so much dear hilda im always grateful for your support
One Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 12:44 PM
At first I thought why have you formatted it like this then saw it was an etheree... a double one at that.. I will not call you the queen of etheree, more the queen of darkness to me... Your etheree eloquently explores themes of resilience, introspection, and the enduring power of the human spirit to find beauty and meaning amidst life's struggles. It offers a poignant reminder that even in our darkest moments, there is always the possibility of light and renewal...
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 2:15 PM
Haha queen of darkness, awwn Mistress of darkness maybe. Thank you so much dear silent one you really did understand the depth of what iv expressed here and im grateful for your support always means alot
Kulkarni Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 11:54 AM
Wow!! Such a profound poetry Ink!! I enjoyed reading it a few times! Thank you for sharing it. -Smita
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 2:02 PM
Thank you so very much im truly touched by your beautiful feedback. Sending you light always
Eslinger Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 8:29 AM
Now, here again, my tears fall after reading your poem. The book “the IHidden Life of Trees” 'science researched' tells how your poem may speak truth… so beautfully told. You know i Love trees. They are trying to communicate with us. Here you have heard them …
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 9:49 AM
So good to hear from you dear sally. Its been a while: i really hope you are doing well and ill keep you in my thoughts and prayers always
Onpaper Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 7:59 AM
tattered twigs on dying trees,facing freckled skies~watered with blooming grief, oh my goodness… damn papi … the opening lines !!!! will the rain ever see how the sun in my soul still spreads rose gold light,across torn skies, the kind of power ur words inspire papi !!! It’s sooo heavenly!!! Love this ethereal vibe etheree absolutely gorgeous papi !!
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 9:49 AM
Awwn thanks papi
Kendrick Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 6:23 AM
Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. I did not write the poem you just read it is from the internet. Sara K
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 6:53 AM
Ah thank you always dear sara im grateful for your support
Pandit Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 5:24 AM
Brilliantly woven with emotions, my friend.: There, florescent wild-flowers eavesdrop, mocking tales of my weathered wings---
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 6:52 AM
Thank you so much alwYs for your support, im always grateful for your kindness
Rhymes Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 3:27 AM
Now this is one of your best .
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 3:39 AM
Awwn too sweet
M  Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 3:27 AM
You sweet Ink have such beauty in your mind which you put into beautiful words for all to read! Though sad this is truly lovely! Debx
Empress Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 3:36 AM
Awwn you are so sweet, thank you so much kind soul
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