Tanka 3

silently I lie awaiting I await thee a wry smirk greets me sighted precision confirms sporadic crimson now speaks

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 3/27/2015 4:58:00 AM

Love, love, love, love this Tanka!

James Fraser
Date: 3/29/2015 4:11:00 PM

Thank you Maurice, so so much, kind regards, James :)

Paul Callus

Date: 3/26/2015 11:58:00 AM

Excellent write, James. That wry smirk stabs at both heart and soul....blood seeps:( // paul

James Fraser
Date: 3/29/2015 4:07:00 PM

Thank you kindly Paul. Many a wry smirk has been worn by a few, but many are cold in staring true. A blessed week ahead to you and yours, James.....

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/26/2015 4:09:00 AM

Dino James, this one appeals much to being unkind to what reason..mmmn.. love the last line... the lava of pain...!! hugs!/olive eloisa

James Fraser
Date: 3/29/2015 4:06:00 PM

I quite like this Tanka, the writing of it, not the scenes behind the write, hugs/xx/James xxx

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 3/25/2015 4:24:00 PM

Powerful pen James! This is a very deep and profound tanka you've penned here, my dear friend. Wow, last line my very favorite one. I enjoyed it.A 7 from me! Thanks for sharing! Wishing you a very lovely day ! In his light! God bless you! :-) D.

James Fraser
Date: 3/29/2015 3:58:00 PM

Thank you kindly Dorian, your comments are always appreciated. Wishing you a blessed Sunday evening, James :)