Tanka 3


silently I lie
awaiting I await thee
a wry smirk greets me
sighted precision confirms
sporadic crimson now speaks

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Maurice Yvonne

March 27, 2015 at 4:58 AM

Love, love, love, love this Tanka!

James Fraser

March 29, 2015 at 4:11 PM

Thank you Maurice, so so much, kind regards, James :)

Paul Callus

March 26, 2015 at 11:58 AM

Excellent write, James. That wry smirk stabs at both heart and soul....blood seeps:( // paul

James Fraser

March 29, 2015 at 4:07 PM

Thank you kindly Paul. Many a wry smirk has been worn by a few, but many are cold in staring true. A blessed week ahead to you and yours, James.....

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

March 26, 2015 at 4:09 AM

Dino James, this one appeals much to being unkind to what reason..mmmn.. love the last line... the lava of pain...!! hugs!/olive eloisa

James Fraser

March 29, 2015 at 4:06 PM

I quite like this Tanka, the writing of it, not the scenes behind the write, hugs/xx/James xxx

Dorian Petersen Potter

March 25, 2015 at 4:24 PM

Powerful pen James! This is a very deep and profound tanka you've penned here, my dear friend. Wow, last line my very favorite one. I enjoyed it.A 7 from me! Thanks for sharing! Wishing you a very lovely day ! In his light! God bless you! :-) D.

James Fraser

March 29, 2015 at 3:58 PM

Thank you kindly Dorian, your comments are always appreciated. Wishing you a blessed Sunday evening, James :)

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