Tanka 2

This pressure on me Rooms are closing in, can’t breathe The worst is yet here My heart is beating quickly Panic, this pressure on me © Holly P. Moore October 2012

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/28/2012 2:21:00 PM

Terrible feeling Holly - very well written Tanka 2 - Have a nice new week. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jancarl Campi

Date: 10/28/2012 2:08:00 AM

I like this one. A reminder of me "I have been there before" Feeling better thanks. Take care, Jancarl

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 10/27/2012 1:16:00 AM

Whoa! That is not a feeling I would wish on anyone. You've brought out the sense of panic well - the pressure, the inability to breathe, the racing heart -panic is not an ally. And to think the worst has not occured -more pressure. Aaaargh! Very well written Holly!

Kash Poet

Date: 10/26/2012 7:50:00 PM

Your feelings very nicely expressed in this tanka.I agree with Leo.Take a deep breath.

Toquyen Harrell

Date: 10/26/2012 6:21:00 PM

Nice Tanka, Holly. You made us wonder what is coming :) Love ya, Toquyen

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 10/26/2012 5:32:00 PM

Calm down and take a deep breath...the pressure will subside in a short while....