Talking Sands

Here I lie reaching out to other sides
comforting sand surrounds me on every edge
foamy sea washes over me at night,
as the moon's blue light cools my outer body
at the break of day, the sun begins
its daily warming.

I've been here for decades, finished my turn at sea,
lain on many beaches before:
at Vesuvius, the lava scorched the beach, the sea boiled-
at Dunkirk, British soldiers fell-
on Bondi, I recall the crackling Aussie feet throughout the days,
and I was at First Dawn, as well.

Held close by the sand, it all comes back to me.
I will be the sand again one day soon.
The young gaze at me wondering
what I think and where I've been.

My story and yours, we are one.
Pick me up, I feel your touch. 
Marvel at my ancient design,
my winding colors.

Peer into my spiraling chamber.
Hold me close to your ear. 
Hear the voice of the sea.
Ponder what secrets I will reveal.
Muse the concept that you are me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Date: 4/6/2025 10:29:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your creative write. Great Ending... Have a blessed day/week with your win........
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Date: 4/6/2025 4:30:00 AM
Dear Greg, This isnt just creative and clever how youv woven metaphors, but so soulfully moving too, and touching and i love the way your lines flow from one to another and how youv written "Peer into my spiraling chamber. Hold me close to your ear. Hear the voice of the sea. Ponder what secrets I will reveal. Muse the concept that you are me." excellent ending! So beautiful! Thank you for sharing! Congratulations on your win! Sending you light
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Greg Gaul
Date: 4/6/2025 6:52:00 AM
I am most appreciative for the effort and the essence of your critique. Heartfelt thanks.
Date: 11/23/2024 1:42:00 PM
Hi Greg, love the personification of the "nautilus" telling its life story. "Build thee more stately mansions oh my soul...and let the oceans roll." Indeed we are always building more spirals in our life. This poem is so visceral "pick me up, I feel your touch." Congratulations on your win, my friend! Sending you Thanksgiving blessings
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Date: 11/23/2024 9:03:00 AM
Interesting take on the contest subject and you got it right on the nail. Congrats on your placement well deserved
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Date: 11/23/2024 4:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 11/23/2024 7:57:00 AM
Thank you kindly for your comment.
Date: 5/25/2024 5:13:00 AM
"Peer into my spiraling chamber. Hold me close to your ear. Hear the voice of the sea. Ponder what secrets I will reveal. Muse the concept that you are me."
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Greg Gaul
Date: 5/25/2024 5:27:00 AM
It is appropriate for you to use your interpretation. That's a good thing about poetry. Thanks for your comment.
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Candide Diderot
Date: 5/25/2024 5:14:00 AM
could be a shell like mentioned below...I'm more aligned with the "amygdala", the seat of God.
Date: 8/24/2020 4:23:00 PM
What an introduction to Greg Gaul! This is poetic creativity at the highest level my friend! I couldn't wait to find out who was talking - a seashell - of course! "I was at first dawn," - among many other places - among many memorable lines! Congratulations on your winning placement - well deserved!!!
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 8/28/2020 8:05:00 PM
Greg, is your shell a nautilus! Reminds me of Percy's "build thee more stately mansions, oh my soul."
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Greg Gaul
Date: 8/25/2020 3:25:00 PM
Sam, your comments are on point. Thanks so much for your visit and kind support. Be well.
Date: 8/24/2020 4:08:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win, Greg ... I remember how exciting it was to post my first poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Greg Gaul
Date: 8/24/2020 6:19:00 AM
So kind of you to visit and graciously comment. A little Sunshine in my day!
Date: 4/22/2019 8:18:00 AM
An excellent example of personification. I have enjoyed your poetry this morning. Blessings to you.
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Greg Gaul
Date: 4/22/2019 3:43:00 PM
Richard, coming from an accomplished poet like yourself, I'm overwhelmed with your attention, comments and insights to my poetic efforts. Thank you for spending the time and effort to read my works. Many blessings to you.
Date: 3/30/2018 4:25:00 AM
Blessings and sincere congratulations on your fine win, Greg - all the best to you, my friend! :-)
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Greg Gaul
Date: 3/30/2018 8:41:00 AM
Thanks, I'm learning and trying and your kind comments move me to continue. Much appreciated.
Date: 3/21/2018 9:22:00 AM
Intertwined and subtle acts of kindness in stories and poetry. Your poem touched me deeply. Congratulations and thank you for taking part in my contest. Many wishes, Kai
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Greg Gaul
Date: 3/21/2018 9:31:00 AM
For aspirants like me any acknowledgment is most helpful. Your running the contest in the first place is an act of generosity. Picking my poem is a cosmic coincidence that I won't dare question. Thanks muchly.
Date: 3/21/2018 8:11:00 AM
A beautiful poem, a great message. Congrats on your win, Greg.
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Greg Gaul
Date: 3/21/2018 9:42:00 AM
Coming from you I think it high praise. I must congratulate you also on your multiple placings in contests. I'm paddling as fast as I can. Learning a lot.
Date: 12/29/2017 10:05:00 AM
Wonderful title! What a tale of joy and sadness the sands tell!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 12/29/2017 10:17:00 AM
Too kind. Thanks. I'll have to find your stuff.
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