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Takers Taken

The night takers come when the sun goes down When there's no one around to hear the quiet loud They are the shadowed clouds feared by the proud Seeping in through ears with maddening clapping sound Insane clowns with razor sharp teeth poking around The mind pounds until it's fully unwound Once it's lost it can never be found The brain twitches and seizes until it freezes Epileptic diseases permeating the creases Too late to call out or to cry to Jesus Life never owned each one of us leases Man thinks he can do whatever he pleases Monkey like minds relating to rhesus Trying to pick up all the evolutionary pieces **** disguised as treasure but it's still feces Witness lowly ones described as meek Traveling along a narrow path to seek Listening to prophets from the past speak People laughing and calling them Jesus Freaks Thinking they're feeble minded and weak Are the wise and powerful really so unique Who will be left to listen to their critique For the night takers came and took them in their sleep We live in a world of wise people who feel Science is our salvation. Yet each attempt man makes to improve upon creation seems to destroy another part of it. Eventually we are the takers and the taken.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 2/16/2016 9:44:00 AM
I could easily list about 40 admiring adjectives to describe this brilliant poem my friend. Instead, I will add this gem to my fav poem list... Thanks, tis a pleasure to read such talented verse. A7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/29/2016 11:43:00 AM
Sorry for the late reply, thanks for this wonderful comment Robert.
Date: 2/11/2016 9:05:00 AM
Death, no one escapes. Interesting, deep and nicely written piece, Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/29/2016 11:44:00 AM
Thanks James, it appears I have missed a few comment.
Date: 2/6/2016 7:38:00 PM
There are still so many things in existence that science just cannot explain... This is very interesting and provokes us into thinking with an open mind... A brilliant piece of writing, Rick!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/8/2016 9:10:00 AM
Thanks Kelly.
Date: 2/3/2016 9:32:00 AM
Insightful poem. I like it.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/8/2016 9:11:00 AM
Thanks Probir
Date: 1/27/2016 9:18:00 AM
A good soul questioning piece that fights with the age long question of "who or what am I", seeking answers that are not easily available, even in one's faith. This poem reflects the facts that we can't always know what we envision our lives to be, we are all human with all the frailties intrinsic to our race and fate reveals no secrets to the impatient. Emile.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/27/2016 9:59:00 AM
Well said Emile!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/27/2016 9:58:00 AM
Thanks Constance, I was very moved by your poem this morning.
Date: 1/26/2016 9:12:00 AM
Richard, oh those night takers who steal our dreams, taken are our thoughts perhaps that is why we cannot remember them in the morning, your poem is skillfully written and powerful, well done~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/27/2016 10:05:00 AM
If you have a chance, read my latest piece.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/26/2016 9:48:00 AM
Thanks Constance, I was very moved by your poem this morning.
Date: 1/26/2016 9:00:00 AM
Richard, thanks for the kind reply. I'm having a great year. Today Is a good one so far .. I hope I get to stay indoors all day. :)
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Date: 1/26/2016 9:08:00 AM
I have them every day, lol..I just don't want to be called out of my comfort zone like yesterday. Hugs.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/26/2016 9:07:00 AM
it's good to have a lazy day now and again.
Date: 1/26/2016 6:56:00 AM
Blessed are the meek, indeed, Richard. The last laugh will be an eternal one, I believe. Great piece, much enjoyed. regards, Viv
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/26/2016 8:50:00 AM
Thanks Viv.
Date: 1/25/2016 11:47:00 PM
Enjoyed the way you expressed every line Richard, thank you for sharing:) LOVE LINDA
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/26/2016 8:51:00 AM
Thanks Linda, I hope you have had a great start to 2016.
Date: 1/25/2016 12:28:00 PM
Hi Richard: You always outdo yourself and constantly surprise me. great imagery and well worded.Cynicism becomes you. (ha ha) only kidding.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/26/2016 8:52:00 AM
You are Kind Ralph
Date: 1/23/2016 11:36:00 PM
Hi Rick. Have you seen this video? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rfWIuymme50 I can just imagine Tom Hanks perform the above. It has great performance possibilities. Loved the deep thoughts expressed here :-)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/25/2016 9:07:00 AM
Thanks for the Visit and the thoughtful comment. I will check out the video.
Date: 1/23/2016 2:34:00 PM
Great poem Richard, I really enjoyed it. must visit your page more often. Cheers, Craig
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/25/2016 9:05:00 AM
Thanks Craig, you are welcome any time.
Date: 1/23/2016 9:27:00 AM
Very cleverly rhymed with poerful phrasing and splendid imagery! Well done my friend! Best wishes, Keith
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 1/23/2016 10:57:00 AM
...and you succeeded in spades!!! K.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/23/2016 9:45:00 AM
Thanks Keith, much appreciated. I wanted to create a performance piece with this one.
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 1/23/2016 9:27:00 AM
Whoops! POWERFUL! K.
Date: 1/22/2016 11:28:00 AM
Excellent take on life and people. Hope you have a good weekend. Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/22/2016 2:29:00 PM
Thanks mom, love Rick.
Date: 1/22/2016 10:39:00 AM
the takers and the taken indeed...excellent write Richard, great!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/22/2016 2:30:00 PM
Thanks White.

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