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Take a Peek

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Take a Peek

I'm here for the ad, young man
I believe it was your father I spoke to
on the phone about an hour ago
Said I was coming by to look at the car on sale
Sure, I'll wait ...
by the way, that's a lovely Christmas tree in the window
(A minute or two later)
Hi, Mr. Bartier,
I'm here for the car that I saw in the ad
You sure painted a nice picture,
truth be told, it almost sounded too good
So do you mind, if I may,
take a peek under the hood
Engine looks clean, motor sounds fine
It hums real low
(Speaking to myself ... that price is beginning to look like a steal)
This auto has a retiree feel,
do you mind if I get behind the wheel
Interior is like new,
and the gauges and gadgets all work too
And the mileage is less than the height
of a Mt. Everest view
Do a final spot check on the underbody,
no leaking fluids ... suspension seems solid
Well, Mr. Bartier,
here's what I think:
This car is as good as advertised,
the price is phenomenally low,
and your maintenance has the vehicle looking
like it just came from a new car expo
Only got one question though ...
it's about the trunk,
with the rug covering all those bullet holes

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Date: 1/4/2017 11:45:00 AM
Hahaha... such full of fun poem. Loved the way you ended it.
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Date: 12/28/2016 8:50:00 PM
Lol, funny ending Freddie! Thank God there wasn't a dead body in there as well, Gulp! ;)
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Date: 12/27/2016 4:40:00 PM
Humourous and lovely! Yet again.
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