Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Quatorzain

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T U R P I T U D E

T U R P I T U D E



On and on, slash! My sweetest agony thrilled to tease, SLASH!

Puff, PUFF! Cooking my skin into tender purple dots, fast

as pies of flesh fever, shrills and tearing in spiral rush. . .

Weary sounds ebb-- we dip deep  resting hush o'er chained lusts.
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++Sponsor Name: Broken Wings++
++Contest Name: Four Lines++
~~9th Place~~


~Olive Eloisa Guillermo~
11:32 am, September 21, 2015

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Michael Tor September 28, 2015 at 11:12 PM Very clever Olive. Nice win Dear!

Skat A September 28, 2015 at 9:50 PM Olive, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT**

Justin Bordner September 28, 2015 at 1:11 AM Exhilarating, terrifying, fortifying, bliss igniting poetry Olive. I love the photos too! Fantastic title! J.A.B.

Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 5:55 PM gosh Olive this is very dark many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 24, 2015 at 11:50 PM Wonderful expressions dear Olive! Congrats on big win!

Andrea Dietrich September 24, 2015 at 3:36 PM Congrats, Olive. GLad to see you made the winners' list.

Casarah Nance September 24, 2015 at 7:53 AM Oh I like it! Your use of many poetic devices, awesome! Grats on your win :)

Cherl Dunn September 23, 2015 at 8:38 PM Ok wow what a passionate write here my friend love the exotic flavor, and the romantic expressionism of this seductive piece, and thanks for the review of my football poem, cheri

Eve Roper September 23, 2015 at 6:33 PM Congratulations on your win, Olive. Hugs Eve Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 27, 2015 at 7:51 AM thanks Eve. =`)

James Fraser September 23, 2015 at 1:48 PM Loved chatting to you about this poem little one. Your writing keeps growing and it's more a joy writing with you, reading you, sharing your ideas etc than I do writing for myself now. Your a joy to read ;-) - So glad it was placed in the contest. I'm smiling, hugs//James xxxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 28, 2015 at 5:13 AM Thanks much my huge James for being always there.. =`) hugs tight and war,, I'm smiling more... xxx~Olive Eloisa, your lil one.. =`)

James Inman September 23, 2015 at 12:27 PM Woe, Olive. Multi-level write, the obvious erotic overtone but much deeper darkness lies beneath. Because of your, the writer's, assumed gender, the first thought is that it should be read from a feminine submissive point of view (the visuals lead you this way as well), but NO, read deeper and it becomes a psycho killer point of view. Excellent! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 28, 2015 at 5:11 AM thanks much James.. I really want to make the theme appear here... I just didn't not sure that as one reads my poem it will get darker and darker.. =`)

Sara Kendrick September 22, 2015 at 6:55 AM Enjoyed reading your four lines..Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 28, 2015 at 5:10 AM thanks much Sara... =`)

Andrea Dietrich September 21, 2015 at 2:18 PM Hmmm, Fifty Shades kind of writing here!! You sure went darker than I did for this one. Very interesting take on the theme, Olive. This could also be called Sweetest AGony! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 24, 2015 at 9:49 PM This is a challenge for me Andrea.. =`) I just like it..=`) thanks much for your most generous comment..=`)

Paul Callus September 21, 2015 at 5:25 AM Turpitude brings forth sensations through depravity....actions that are usually contrary to normal behavior. To some horrid...to others pleasurable, satisfying lusty greed. ~ Quite a unique take if intended for the deep and dark contest, Olive_eloi! Hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 22, 2015 at 2:40 AM Paul, originally what's in my mind is perversions: Maso... and sad... but when I read the theme instructions that no erotica... I changed some of the words.. though when I let James read it first he actually imagines the Hannibal lecter.... =`) anyways, as I said below each time I read it... I think differently, i think it covers various deep and dark acts..