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T U R P I T U D E

T U R P I T U D E



On and on, slash! My sweetest agony thrilled to tease, SLASH!

Puff, PUFF! Cooking my skin into tender purple dots, fast

as pies of flesh fever, shrills and tearing in spiral rush. . .

Weary sounds ebb-- we dip deep  resting hush o'er chained lusts.
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++Sponsor Name: Broken Wings++
++Contest Name: Four Lines++
~~9th Place~~


~Olive Eloisa Guillermo~
11:32 am, September 21, 2015

Copyright © Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser | Year Posted 2015

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Michael Tor Date: 9/28/2015 11:12:00 PM Very clever Olive. Nice win Dear! Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 9/28/2015 9:50:00 PM Olive, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT** Login to Reply

Justin Bordner Date: 9/28/2015 1:11:00 AM Exhilarating, terrifying, fortifying, bliss igniting poetry Olive. I love the photos too! Fantastic title! J.A.B. Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 5:55:00 PM gosh Olive this is very dark many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/24/2015 11:50:00 PM Wonderful expressions dear Olive! Congrats on big win! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/24/2015 3:36:00 PM Congrats, Olive. GLad to see you made the winners' list. Login to Reply

Casarah Nance Date: 9/24/2015 7:53:00 AM Oh I like it! Your use of many poetic devices, awesome! Grats on your win :) Login to Reply

Cherl Dunn Date: 9/23/2015 8:38:00 PM Ok wow what a passionate write here my friend love the exotic flavor, and the romantic expressionism of this seductive piece, and thanks for the review of my football poem, cheri Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 9/23/2015 6:33:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Olive. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 10/27/2015 7:51:00 AM thanks Eve. =`)

James Fraser Date: 9/23/2015 1:48:00 PM Loved chatting to you about this poem little one. Your writing keeps growing and it's more a joy writing with you, reading you, sharing your ideas etc than I do writing for myself now. Your a joy to read ;-) - So glad it was placed in the contest. I'm smiling, hugs//James xxxx Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/28/2015 5:13:00 AM Thanks much my huge James for being always there.. =`) hugs tight and war,, I'm smiling more... xxx~Olive Eloisa, your lil one.. =`)

James Inman Date: 9/23/2015 12:27:00 PM Woe, Olive. Multi-level write, the obvious erotic overtone but much deeper darkness lies beneath. Because of your, the writer's, assumed gender, the first thought is that it should be read from a feminine submissive point of view (the visuals lead you this way as well), but NO, read deeper and it becomes a psycho killer point of view. Excellent! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/28/2015 5:11:00 AM thanks much James.. I really want to make the theme appear here... I just didn't not sure that as one reads my poem it will get darker and darker.. =`)

Sara Kendrick Date: 9/22/2015 6:55:00 AM Enjoyed reading your four lines..Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/28/2015 5:10:00 AM thanks much Sara... =`)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/21/2015 2:18:00 PM Hmmm, Fifty Shades kind of writing here!! You sure went darker than I did for this one. Very interesting take on the theme, Olive. This could also be called Sweetest AGony! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/24/2015 9:49:00 PM This is a challenge for me Andrea.. =`) I just like it..=`) thanks much for your most generous comment..=`)

Paul Callus Date: 9/21/2015 5:25:00 AM Turpitude brings forth sensations through depravity....actions that are usually contrary to normal behavior. To some horrid...to others pleasurable, satisfying lusty greed. ~ Quite a unique take if intended for the deep and dark contest, Olive_eloi! Hugs // paul Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/22/2015 2:40:00 AM Paul, originally what's in my mind is perversions: Maso... and sad... but when I read the theme instructions that no erotica... I changed some of the words.. though when I let James read it first he actually imagines the Hannibal lecter.... =`) anyways, as I said below each time I read it... I think differently, i think it covers various deep and dark acts..