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Poetic Form: Free Verse
Inspired: 2024 January 01
Image: N/A

I waited as tears
wallowed, how so can it be e'er
so, e'er different
tears are the depth of you
it empties from
the void
the absence
of them
I need them
in to my life
there the abyss
the hollow
the echoing
they are so vivid
I live for them
I miss them
it's less than
four minutes till
the year twenty-twenty four
who knew
Brothers first
but Dad between Brothers
a Sister
then Mom
then Sisters
one minute
less than
and less
fireworks outside
more and more
I turned
midnight
Hawaii
Aloha
my family ...
12:01 a.m.
Hilo, Hawaii
cemetery uphill
they can hear it too
they see me
just plain
simple
no drama
I'm smiling
I smile
for my son
I smile
for them
S M I L E    O U R    S O N    O U R    B R O T H E R    M Y    D A D

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Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/1/2024 6:18:00 AM

I hear the angst of your voice and pain in your heart. You had way more grief than most. A FAVE for this expressive write, my friend--emptions tremble as I read your tribute to the beloved.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 6:57:00 AM

My smile left a bit, reread, and smiled again, --thank you, Vijay. Blessings my friend, Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 1/1/2024 4:56:00 AM

Your poem is a poignant and evocative reflection on the passage of time, the emotions associated with loss, and the significance of shared moments... The repetition of 'I smile' creates a poignant rhythm in your poem. The act of smiling becomes a powerful tribute to your son, family, and loved ones, infusing the narrative with positivity amid the emotional weight..

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 5:10:00 AM

Thank you, my friend...Aloha, from Hilo, Hawaii