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Poetic Form: Free Verse
Inspired: 2024 January 01
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I waited as tears wallowed, how so can it be e'er so, e'er different tears are the depth of you it empties from the void the absence of them I need them in to my life there the abyss the hollow the echoing they are so vivid I live for them I miss them it's less than four minutes till the year twenty-twenty four who knew Brothers first but Dad between Brothers a Sister then Mom then Sisters one minute less than and less fireworks outside more and more I turned midnight Hawaii Aloha my family ... 12:01 a.m. Hilo, Hawaii cemetery uphill they can hear it too they see me just plain simple no drama I'm smiling I smile for my son I smile for them S M I L E O U R S O N O U R B R O T H E R M Y D A D

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Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/1/2024 6:18:00 AM

I hear the angst of your voice and pain in your heart. You had way more grief than most. A FAVE for this expressive write, my friend--emptions tremble as I read your tribute to the beloved.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 6:57:00 AM

My smile left a bit, reread, and smiled again, --thank you, Vijay. Blessings my friend, Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/1/2024 5:30:00 AM

such a powerful and poignant poem, William. As the midnight hour struck, I too was filled with loss and remorse, briefly reliving some grief. I love the positive contrast of the 'smile' at the end

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 5:38:00 AM

Yes, smile, Sara...Aloha from Hilo, Hawaii

Silent One

Date: 1/1/2024 4:56:00 AM

Your poem is a poignant and evocative reflection on the passage of time, the emotions associated with loss, and the significance of shared moments... The repetition of 'I smile' creates a poignant rhythm in your poem. The act of smiling becomes a powerful tribute to your son, family, and loved ones, infusing the narrative with positivity amid the emotional weight..

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 5:10:00 AM

Thank you, my friend...Aloha, from Hilo, Hawaii